Get Your Premium Membership

Idioma

11/29/2015 Idioma There is a man with a gun. His finger taut, tensed and still, the intention obvious, no reason instilled. Because guns kill people. Or do people kill people? I can never remember. Let's take a look at entropy. A molecule hits a molecule hits a molecule and BOOM - a bomb. Thousands dead. More on the way. But of course that's a bit clumsy, seeing that entropy's remorse only marginally taps the frayed edges of something, Atomic. So what stops it? Science might tell us Energy. That’s a bit broad though. Come back to the man with the gun. Naturally he's drunk, and not a man, an adolescent. Waving the gun - the weapon in your face. He points it at you. So what do you do? What can you do? One might pray and hope his hand is stayed, for in the land of entropy learned helplessness breeds Power. And the masses will pray and cower. Some might fight, or fly, in instinctual flurry. But these options are few and far too crude for more, sophisticated tastes. So this sophistication leads us... Ah, but sophistication sounds so posh. Let's instead call this Order. And so you order, Yell, or speak, rather; yelling is so harsh. You speak, maybe even whisper. You don't want to antagonize this kid willing to put a hole in you - you in a hole - covered by the thoughtlessly certain curtain of uneasy infinity. So you, oh so subdued, whisper, Please. But a simple please has never gotten anyone anywhere worth being, so you follow up with a more firm Stop. And in his inebriation, the most powerful being in your world stumbles upon a moment of lucidity. His finger slips, sending a .45 caliber bullet - lead some might call it, but this is grossly anachronistic - into your frontal lobe and out your cerebral cortex. Enter. Exit. An open system. Because in an entropic world, Language languishes in its ephemeral rags and is wasted away by greater things.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2015




Post Comments

Poetrysoup is an environment of encouragement and growth so only provide specific positive comments that indicate what you appreciate about the poem. Negative comments will result your account being banned.

Please Login to post a comment

Date: 12/16/2015 12:25:00 AM
ALEXANDER, Congratulations on your win. **SKAT**
Login to Reply
Date: 12/14/2015 4:13:00 PM
I really liked this one, I am not usually fond of this type, but this is an exception. Congrats and glad I found your poem today.
Login to Reply
Date: 12/14/2015 11:11:00 AM
an epic piece here (a touch long perhaps?) but worth sticking with and reading until the end - those closing lines are wonderful! there is a clever use of language throughout this hard hitting poem, and i like the conversational tone you've adopted, full of impact on the reader - congrats on your win in my contest!
Login to Reply
Date: 11/16/2015 9:35:00 PM
This is really brilliant. It sounds like a subject Ginsberg would take on, but with the command of Eliot and the lithe, smooth confession of Sylvia. I apologize as you probably don't like being compared to other poets as you are most certainly your own... but this was brilliant- your repetitions, your allusions to science- and always going back to entropy- the bullet spurting from the gun, the 'choice' to fire- all entropy- all absurd- such pointless disorder of only molecules upon molecules.
Login to Reply
Plevka Avatar
Alexander Plevka
Date: 11/17/2015 4:53:00 PM
Thank you Riddleton. You are very kind, if a bit generous with comparisons.

Book: Radiant Verses: A Journey Through Inspiring Poetry