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Ice Cubes

Ice cubes crunch beneath teeth clear cold melting delight chilly glaze coating my numb tongue frost bite 2/6/20 For 'Modern or Traditional Cinquain' contest Sponsor: William Kekaula Shared 1st Place

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Kai Michael Neumann

Date: 5/15/2020 4:14:00 AM

Nice one. Congratulations. Take care, Kai

Jenish Somadas

Date: 2/23/2020 11:18:00 PM

Back with congrats Michelle..

Hilo Poet

Date: 2/23/2020 9:00:00 PM

Lol, you are my dear sister throughout, save the last line, whereto, that will explain me, Michelle, "...a jaunt through memory lane with your efforts, blessings -- Aloha!~@wk

Eve Roper

Date: 2/23/2020 4:05:00 PM

Congratulations on your win, Michelle. Hugs Eve

M. L. Kiser

Date: 2/13/2020 2:01:00 PM

Beautiful piece.

Jenish Somadas

Date: 2/11/2020 11:51:00 PM

Fantastic Cinquain.. This form if aligned center looks good.. Good luck in the contest Michelle..

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 2/12/2020 10:53:00 AM

Thanks, Jenish! (it's actually just a normal left alignment)

John Watt

Date: 2/11/2020 8:57:00 PM

Michelle, perfect ending to a fun read ~ John

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 2/11/2020 9:11:00 PM

Thanks for your visit and comment, John!

Swetha Vangaveti

Date: 2/11/2020 1:25:00 AM

"frost bite" .. Woah!! Good one.

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 2/11/2020 9:09:00 PM

Thank you very much, Swetha-

Pashang Salehi

Date: 2/7/2020 8:05:00 PM

Next time use Ice Cube... He raps better...

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 2/10/2020 6:28:00 PM

Sorry, not much of a fan of rap, I guess-

Maureen Mcgreavy

Date: 2/6/2020 9:28:00 PM

This is so good! That last line ;)))) xomo!

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 2/7/2020 1:21:00 PM

Really appreciate it - xoxo!!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 2/6/2020 6:46:00 PM

oh wow, your last line was so amazing. I love when both traditional and modern sum up the first line excellently at the end.

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 2/7/2020 1:19:00 PM

Thanks, Andrea - I do prefer the traditional in this form, thank you for the kind comment...

Mark Toney

Date: 2/6/2020 6:39:00 PM

Michelle, I enjoyed this. I can feel the hard, cold cubes and hear the crunch. The end result for me would be brain freeze! ~Mark

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 2/7/2020 1:17:00 PM

I almost went with 'brain freeze' on the last line! Thanks for commenting, Mark-

Rico Leffanta

Date: 2/6/2020 6:22:00 PM

Well said! I recall a comic book from the 1940s where the killer made blow-dart ice cubes because the evidence would melt away before police could arrive on the scene ....something else to chew on! Aloha! Rico

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 2/7/2020 1:15:00 PM

I think I saw a movie or TV show where the bullets were made of ice so there's no evidence - crazy stuff!