Lora Robinson Poet Free verse

Icarus

Love, the noon time sun-
You'd melt the wax off my 
Arms, soaring
Before I could fly within reach 
Of your great heights


Revision One: Round Poem Revision 

(I need ideas to make this into a round poem)
Before I could fly within reach
Of your great heights. 
Love, the noon time sun,
You'd melt the wax off my
Arms, soaring-

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Debbie Guzzi May 13, 2015 at 11:34 AM Try it with the last two lines first - I think you are comparing your love for this person with Icarus' love for the sun, it's a fine metaphor. The verse is about you, yes? Your love? Perhaps, a different title don't TELL the reader it's Icarus most readers know the mythos and you are already SHOWING us Icarus. Light & love

Skat A May 12, 2015 at 3:08 PM WOW, Lora he seems to have the layouts of your life. Icarus the architect,... Enjoyed..SKAT