Icarus

Love, the noon time sun- You'd melt the wax off my Arms, soaring Before I could fly within reach Of your great heights Revision One: Round Poem Revision (I need ideas to make this into a round poem) Before I could fly within reach Of your great heights. Love, the noon time sun, You'd melt the wax off my Arms, soaring-

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Debbie Guzzi

Date: 5/13/2015 11:34:00 AM

Try it with the last two lines first - I think you are comparing your love for this person with Icarus' love for the sun, it's a fine metaphor. The verse is about you, yes? Your love? Perhaps, a different title don't TELL the reader it's Icarus most readers know the mythos and you are already SHOWING us Icarus. Light & love

Skat A

Date: 5/12/2015 3:08:00 PM

WOW, Lora he seems to have the layouts of your life. Icarus the architect,... Enjoyed..SKAT