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I Wish It Could Be

This emptiness within surrounds the insides Penetrating my sorrows, I see the light A light so faded and sad…as if it knows my lamentation This light dies to be seen, yet it is surrounded by shadows The light has not a voice, nor eyes to cry Yet it weeps in the strangest of times If only that light could travel up and onto my tongue Springing forth in articulate passion and delight To all that happen to behold its philosophic brilliance But it cannot speak to you It cannot cry to you… It cannot tell you that I am… So deeply in love with everything you are Your talents, your pursuits…I cherish I hold your dreams in my heart Not merely wishing for them all to come true But willing to sacrifice all for your fulfillment It melts at every smile Every squeak of laughter Each hesitant touch I wish it could be… How strange this light has made me! So dim inside, yet shaking with infuriated quaking It longs to take over my every being And make sweet music with you Trilling in its soft embraces To fulfill you is to leave me writhing in containment Yet your happiness weaves into the pain And the light remains…yet it never rains This light thrives to love you…shivering but alive It sighs in silence, comforted by fruitless words The light is afraid and cold For the vessel it resides in centers all warmth on you

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Richard Lamoureux

Date: 8/1/2014 2:37:00 PM

As a man, to receive a poignant expression of love such as this would be amazing. I hope he fully appreciates your light. Outstanding writing and vivid emotions.

Arlene Smith

Date: 8/1/2014 12:36:00 PM

Sweet Laura!.. This is a sad poem yet so beautifully penned... I wish your light to be surrounded by love and happiness, dear one.. Hugs.. Arlene

Dan Kearley

Date: 7/30/2014 1:00:00 AM

Let your love light shine! :o) So very tender.

Justin Bordner

Date: 7/29/2014 8:20:00 PM

This Light thunders with violet love, the rain of a new sun, a new love is whetting you with a golden fever. You are learning a new language of love. " So dim inside, yet shaking with infuriated quaking..." Your love is so very strong on the tongue of soul! This poem is so intense with love Laura, I'd be remissed if I didn't FAV. it forever.J.A.B.

Poet Tacito

Date: 7/29/2014 11:58:00 AM

Sigh. Magnificently expressed. Spellbinding language that gave me significant goosebumps. So. Many. Feels.

Jslambert Mister Roboto

Date: 7/29/2014 5:17:00 AM

WOW! I mustuh ripped this poem hot off the press! I feel lucky to be the first to read, or at least comment on such a pretty display. My wife is my translator, as she is typing this for me now, also too, she read your poem to me aloud. I recommend you have someone read this to you aloud. It is like love makin' music! It goes to the faves and a 7.

Laura Breidenthal
Date: 7/29/2014 5:41:00 AM

Thank you very much. I am glad you enjoyed reading. I wrote it just now actually. Anyhow thanks again. :} ~Laura