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I Wish It Could Be

This emptiness within surrounds the insides
Penetrating my sorrows, I see the light
A light so faded and sad…as if it knows my lamentation
This light dies to be seen, yet it is surrounded by shadows
The light has not a voice, nor eyes to cry
Yet it weeps in the strangest of times

If only that light could travel up and onto my tongue
Springing forth in articulate passion and delight 
To all that happen to behold its philosophic brilliance

But it cannot speak to you
It cannot cry to you…
It cannot tell you that I am…
So deeply in love with everything you are
Your talents, your pursuits…I cherish 
I hold your dreams in my heart
Not merely wishing for them all to come true
But willing to sacrifice all for your fulfillment
It melts at every smile
Every squeak of laughter
Each hesitant touch

I wish it could be…
How strange this light has made me!
So dim inside, yet shaking with infuriated quaking
It longs to take over my every being
And make sweet music with you
Trilling in its soft embraces

To fulfill you is to leave me writhing in containment
Yet your happiness weaves into the pain
And the light remains…yet it never rains
This light thrives to love you…shivering but alive
It sighs in silence, comforted by fruitless words
The light is afraid and cold
For the vessel it resides in centers all warmth on you

Copyright © Laura Breidenthal | Year Posted 2014

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Richard Lamoureux Date: 8/1/2014 2:37:00 PM As a man, to receive a poignant expression of love such as this would be amazing. I hope he fully appreciates your light. Outstanding writing and vivid emotions. Login to Reply

Arlene Smith Date: 8/1/2014 12:36:00 PM Sweet Laura!.. This is a sad poem yet so beautifully penned... I wish your light to be surrounded by love and happiness, dear one.. Hugs.. Arlene Login to Reply

Dan Kearley Date: 7/30/2014 1:00:00 AM Let your love light shine! :o) So very tender. Login to Reply

Justin Bordner Date: 7/29/2014 8:20:00 PM This Light thunders with violet love, the rain of a new sun, a new love is whetting you with a golden fever. You are learning a new language of love. " So dim inside, yet shaking with infuriated quaking..." Your love is so very strong on the tongue of soul! This poem is so intense with love Laura, I'd be remissed if I didn't FAV. it forever.J.A.B. Login to Reply

Poet Tacito Date: 7/29/2014 11:58:00 AM Sigh. Magnificently expressed. Spellbinding language that gave me significant goosebumps. So. Many. Feels. Login to Reply

Jslambert Mister Roboto Date: 7/29/2014 5:17:00 AM WOW! I mustuh ripped this poem hot off the press! I feel lucky to be the first to read, or at least comment on such a pretty display. My wife is my translator, as she is typing this for me now, also too, she read your poem to me aloud. I recommend you have someone read this to you aloud. It is like love makin' music! It goes to the faves and a 7. Login to Reply Laura Breidenthal Date: 7/29/2014 5:41:00 AM Thank you very much. I am glad you enjoyed reading. I wrote it just now actually. Anyhow thanks again. :} ~Laura