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June 28, 2025

~ Ninth Place ~
Premiere Contest: 2025 Poetry Marathon Mile 20
Sponsor: Mark Toney


 

I Wandered Weightless as a Feather: an after poem

after “I Wandered Lonely as a Cloud” (also sometimes called “Daffodils”) by William Wordsworth

I wandered weightless as a feather, 
a muted plume from mourning dove. 
A tuft afloat in breezy weather 
connected now to skies above;
as long as winds will carry me 
from over fields and out to sea. 

My glad esprit more free than birds, 
detached from mortal needs I fly, 
where spirits long to share their words 
among the songs in clouds, I sigh... 
for Earth was never this composed,
this high I travel unopposed. 

Oh cumulus, a meadow white,
I feel at home atop your waves
illuminant, in purest light.
Mid savored heights my mem’ry saves 
inertia of the clover green
and shiver of the water’s sheen. 

Such riches now I do enjoy 
in solitude away from fray. 
I'm free from living once so coy;  
in spirits’ realm I long to stay,
for then, myself I will fulfill 
with gild as gold as daffodil.
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Agustin Avatar
October 10, 2025 at 12:00 AM
Wow! Congrats... Thanks for sharing this. God bless you.
Ashley Avatar
October 11, 2025 at 7:28 PM
Dear Beata, my inspiring poet friend, thank you for your gracious visit and kind congrats. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Godwin Avatar
October 8, 2025 at 11:30 PM
Beautiful poem, a joy to read, Susan. I always know I'll love the poem when I click on one of yours. Congratulations on your placement in the contest.
Ashley Avatar
October 11, 2025 at 7:39 PM
Dear CayCay, you're such a shining light in my poetic journey, your precious words are ever so kind and encouraging. Thank you, my sweet poet friend, for your lovely visit and heartfelt congrats. They are received with appreciation and held in my heart. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Toney Avatar
October 8, 2025 at 3:05 PM
Susan, this is a beautiful homage, and it honors Wordsworth by standing on its own without imitation. I always knew you were light as a feather. ;-) Congratulations on your top 10 win on Mile 20 of my 2025 Poetry Marathon Contest. Keep your running shoes on, because Mile 21 has already started. You can find your current standing in my Mile 20 Checkpoint blog post.
Ashley Avatar
October 11, 2025 at 7:33 PM
Dear Mark, I'm so glad you found my poem worthy as a homage to Wordsworth and also worthy of a coveted place on your win list. Thank you for your encouraging words and for the honor of my poem's placement in your contest. Though I'm "light as a feather", both lift me higher :) Warmest wishes, my poet friend.. ~Susan
George Avatar
August 22, 2025 at 2:06 AM
Sometimes this sort of an escape is needed in life. This world with its frantic hurry and humdrum become so tiring for us. Then to float into the skies carried by the wings of the current gives us a sense of sweet freedom and serene solitude. To be able to get detached from mortal needs makes us weightless. "in spirits’ realm I long to stay, for then, myself I will fulfill with gild as gold as daffodil." Love your sweet ending to the poem. How I wish I too could fly. There is a family function coming soon and I am in the midst of too many responsibilities that I wish to somehow escape, but in no way. Beautiful poem, dear Susan.
Ashley Avatar
August 23, 2025 at 7:30 AM
Dearest Valsa, you bare your heart and soul as beautifully in the comment box as you do in your gilded poetry pages. Your poetic thoughts, observations and critiques are swoon-worthy. Thank you for taking flight with me to the 'spirits' realm' where it's always "summertime and the living is easy" to quote the famous song "Summertime" from the opera Porgy and Bess. I think we all wish we could fly and escape the gravity of life's demands and responsibilities when they weigh too heavily upon us. Alas, earthbound we are to stand and face them. I wish you strength and endurance to face what lies ahead, my sweet poet friend. Warmest wishes to you, dearest Valsa.. ~Susan
Goldsmith Avatar
July 5, 2025 at 11:06 AM
What a wonderful write. I enjoyed reading. Love It... "Good Luck" Have a fun day writing away..........
Ashley Avatar
July 5, 2025 at 11:10 AM
Dear Paula, I'm so happy to know that you enjoyed my poem. Your comments are heartwarming and a joy to receive. Thank you, my dear poet friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
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July 3, 2025 at 12:07 PM
My Dearest Rhyme Time Friend, your word usage and images are so rich I floated with you through the skies and over the seas! I love the homage to Daffodils in your last line - the feather to be gilded with golden sunshine! You have, as always, chosen a beautiful symbol and made it a metaphor for the seasons of life. Your words always reach a deep place in me. Are you going to set this to music? It would be a beautiful song! Best wishes for the contest. Sending you blessings of joy!
Ashley Avatar
July 4, 2025 at 8:42 AM
My Dearest Rhyme Time Friend, your beautiful and uplifting comments thrill me like 4th of July fireworks! I'm so glad my imagery had you floating through cumulus fields like a weightless feather. A wonderful journey for us both... thank you for joining me and for noticing my homage to "Daffodils" with my last line.. your poetic perception never fails to be aware and wondrous. I would love to see this piece set to music but since I don't read or write music, I'm unable to do that.. but I humbly agree it would make a beautiful song. If you would like to add music/vocals let me know :) I know your musical talents could take this poem much further, my sweet and gifted poet sis. Happy 4th to you! Warmest wishes sent on a muted plume of peace.. ~Susan
Baker Avatar
June 30, 2025 at 2:29 PM
Great entry and great poetry, Susan. The imagery was outstanding and the message so true and fulfilling. You'll need no luck with this one. :-) A FAV for my list! Your poet friend in Texas, Bill
Ashley Avatar
July 1, 2025 at 9:09 AM
Dear Bill, I'm elated to receive your wonderful comments. Your words are truly uplifting as is the high honor of your fav. Thank you for sharing your thoughts with me, they are treasured, my poet friend from Texas :) Warmest wishes to you and Sara.. ~Susan
Dietrich Avatar
June 30, 2025 at 11:31 AM
Wow. A beautiful job. I did not really understand the rules to this contest. But it looks like you sure did
Ashley Avatar
July 1, 2025 at 9:06 AM
Dear Andrea, I hope I got it right.. I had to read the rules several times, and since this concept is new to me, I have my fingers crossed that I understood it all correctly:) I'm so happy to receive your encouraging comments. They mean a lot to me. Thank you, dear Andrea. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
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June 29, 2025 at 11:27 AM
Thanks for introducing me to two beautiful poems, Wordsworth's and yours, I truly enjoyed reading them both.
Ashley Avatar
June 29, 2025 at 9:26 PM
Dear David, thank you for your beautiful comments. Wordsworth’s poem is so expressive and musical, and of course, inspiring. I’m glad you read and enjoyed the fantastic poem that inspired mine. Your visit is truly appreciated. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Seeker Avatar
June 28, 2025 at 7:57 PM
I feel like the feather on its enchanting journey! William Wordsworth will be pleased :)
Ashley Avatar
June 28, 2025 at 8:07 PM
Dear Seeker, your thoughts are meaningful and treasured. Thank you for sharing in the enchanted journey with me. I hope William Wordsworth would be pleased and proud. I adore his poetry and wish to pay homage to his artistry. Warmest wishes, my poet friend.. ~Susan
Gasun Avatar
June 28, 2025 at 7:05 PM
Hello my dearest poet friend Susan! A breathtaking and dazzling piece. Love this a lot from beginning to end. I'm joining you in the flight. Thanks for sharing. Best wishes in the contest! God bless you always. Hugs, hugs
Ashley Avatar
June 28, 2025 at 7:21 PM
Hello my wonderful poet friend, Len, it’s a joy to hear from you! Thank you for sharing in this soulful flight with me. I’m so glad you enjoyed my poem, I’m uplifted by your words. Warmest wishes, my sweet poet friend.. ~Susan
Alhemaidy Avatar
June 28, 2025 at 12:40 PM
Hi Susan :-) Very interesting read! Flying is many poets big dream, Have a nice day AA
Ashley Avatar
June 28, 2025 at 12:43 PM
Dear AA, I have dreamed about it since I was a kid.. thank you for your gracious visit and wonderful response to my poem. I'm glad you found it interesting :) Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Hind Avatar
June 28, 2025 at 11:46 AM
Hey, you did a great job with this!! It's so whimsical and I feel like I'm floating. Beautiful.
Ashley Avatar
June 28, 2025 at 12:23 PM
Dear Paige, thank you for your uplifting comments. I'm so glad you feel like you're floating... my verse has done its job! :) Your gracious visit is so appreciated. Warmest wishes, my poet friend.. ~Susan
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