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For Nette Onclaud's Variation Of Dramatic Or Light Verse Poetry Contest

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I See Fire

I see you and you see me
from across the room;
sweet is the heat under your
unwavering gaze.

A small smile tugs at your lips
as your eyes light up;
I see fire that well foretells
sunshine exploding.

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Krishnanand Guptar

September 19, 2025 at 2:57 AM

Heartiest congratulations on your top placement in this contest with a lovely metaphorical short poem on fire from the eyes. Reminiscent of days of youth. Wishing you a shining day.

Danny Derden

September 17, 2025 at 10:18 AM

This poem glows with quiet intensity. The gaze across the room is electric, and “sunshine exploding” is a gorgeous image—passion wrapped in warmth. It’s romantic without being overdone, and the fire metaphor burns just right. Lovely work.

Howard Kerr

September 16, 2025 at 4:50 PM

Hello Andrea, I’m back to congratulate you with all the sincerity I can muster on your triumph. A towering triumph in both artistic terms and placement. Howard

Andrea Dietrich

September 16, 2025 at 7:06 PM

Than you. I love how inspirational Nette's contests are

Sara Kendrick

September 16, 2025 at 2:19 PM

Congratulations on your winning work. Way to go. Thanks for sharing your talent with us. Sara K

Joe Maverick

September 14, 2025 at 8:00 AM

There could well be a BOOM.' Instead of a vaccous vaccum In the said room.' Va-voom... Heres cheers if they make both Bride and groom.'

Paige Hind

September 11, 2025 at 5:12 PM

A lovely poem-"sunshine exploding"

Kim Rodrigues

September 11, 2025 at 10:16 AM

Speaks of sweet young love!

CayCay Godwin

September 11, 2025 at 8:02 AM

Hot and steamy in all the right ways to hit all the right places in the reader. Ew la la writing. Poetry hugs ... CayCay SOUPY

Joseph P. DiMino

September 11, 2025 at 7:32 AM

Yep, attraction is flammable. Always carry an emotion extinguisher. Garlic sometimes works. But not in Italy.

Howard Kerr

September 11, 2025 at 5:44 AM

Hello Andrea, It goes without saying that this is a serious contender for any serious contest worthy of the name. Excellent depiction, superb flow and narrative Howard