I Miss You

Babe I took you much for granted Should have known that things were wrong. You put up with every moment, Kept your peace and tagged along. Then one day to my dismay You packed up to go away. I implored, but all in vain, There was nothing to explain. -------------------------------------- Eight lines of beauty Lyric Contest Sponsor: Rick Parise

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Susan Ashley

Date: 11/26/2017 7:35:00 PM

Ohh Paul, my heart melted when I read this. Even though love was taken for granted and is the reason why the other left, your heartfelt words are so poetically sincere and rhythmic that I can't help but feel sadness for this person's heartbreak... a mark of a brilliantly written poem my talented friend. Belated congrats as well. Warmest wishes always.. P.S. check out my poet's note on 'Finespun Fingers'..

Susan Ashley
Date: 11/27/2017 9:17:00 PM

you're welcome Paul :)

Paul Callus
Date: 11/27/2017 8:33:00 AM

Thank you, Susan. Often we take things and people for granted, little realizing that a storm could be brewing up. ~ I have revisited 'Finespun Fingers' and I can't describe in words my lovely reaction to your generous note...thank you!! Your friendship is also very much appreciated. Warm regards // paul

Darlene De Beaulieu

Date: 8/13/2017 12:44:00 PM

I am proud of you for winning . I like this poem.Love should never be taken for granted. Have a great day my friend.

Darlene De Beaulieu
Date: 8/13/2017 8:41:00 PM

Your welcome Paul. have a nice evening my friend.

Paul Callus
Date: 8/13/2017 4:10:00 PM

That is so very nice of you, Darlene:) Thank you. ~ Best regards // paul

Pandita Sietesantos

Date: 7/29/2017 8:04:00 PM

Paul, please accept my congratulations on your great win! Your words so wonderfully express what happens when we take someone's love for granted. The beloved should always be treasured. Hugs. Pandita

Paul Callus
Date: 7/30/2017 2:57:00 PM

Thank you, Pandita; it's a pleasure having you stop by:) Hope you are keeping well. Regards & Hugs // paul

Curtis Johnson

Date: 7/17/2017 8:34:00 PM

Paul. Congrats on your placement. The beauty explodes in those 8 lines that express so much pain.

Paul Callus
Date: 7/18/2017 11:44:00 AM

Thank you for stopping by with lovely feedback, Curtis. Regards // paul

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/16/2017 6:12:00 PM

Paul, it's nice to see you on the winners' list. This poem should resonate with all the unlucky ones who lost out on love by taking someone for granted. Congrats to you.

Paul Callus
Date: 7/17/2017 5:06:00 PM

Thank you, Andrea. Hopefully the same mistake won't be repeated twice! Regards // paul

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 7/16/2017 5:53:00 PM

Sad one! Glad to see that it's fiction!

Paul Callus
Date: 7/17/2017 5:05:00 PM

Thank you, Kim. I loved your embroidered winning poem:) Regards // paul

Eve Roper

Date: 7/16/2017 5:38:00 PM

Good one, Paul, it is so hard for some to just pack up and leave. congratulations on your win ~*

Paul Callus
Date: 7/17/2017 5:02:00 PM

Thank you, Eve. Fortunately this is only fiction! Regards // paul

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 7/10/2017 3:20:00 AM

Taking a relationship for granted often takes a person by surprise, like you say, but by that time it is too late. Love is a fragile thing. Great poem Paul! : )

Paul Callus
Date: 7/10/2017 4:41:00 AM

Thank you for the meaningful feedback, Connie. Yes, love has to be handled with care...and those embers need fanning regularly! Have a lovely week:) Regards // paul

Eileen Manassian

Date: 7/7/2017 4:51:00 AM

OH....how could she? ;) Crazy woman. Good luck in the contest, dear.

Paul Callus
Date: 7/7/2017 2:26:00 PM

Hi Eileen, lovely to have you visiting:) Thank you! Glad to see you posting again. Hugs // paul

Maria Williams

Date: 7/4/2017 8:40:00 AM

So glad to see you are back and writing Paul. I guess many men unknowingly fall into the same routine until it's too late and their lady love leaves. Great advice! - All the best for the Contest Paul...Maria

Paul Callus
Date: 7/7/2017 2:33:00 PM

I think that a relationship needs to be 'refreshed' from time to time, Maria! Thank you for your feedback. Have a lovely weekend. Regards // paul

Joanna Daniel

Date: 7/3/2017 8:41:00 AM

Lovely lyrics on love lost, Paul:)

Paul Callus
Date: 7/7/2017 2:37:00 PM

Pleased you liked, Jo...thank you:) Regards // paul

Daniel Turner

Date: 7/2/2017 11:17:00 PM

Bummer, Love is kinda funny that way, Paul. You start start taking it for granted and it has a way of disappearing. Happens everyday:( This is just so real. very sad. Good luck!

Paul Callus
Date: 7/7/2017 10:59:00 AM

You are right, Danny! So sad when the solid ground underneath the feet suddenly gives way! Regards // paul