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written for the contest sponsored by Andrea Dietrich .. 3 am write. Hah! 

I know not rhymes, swap

Stars brightly shine, up in the sky, like peridots aching to fly, unfurling sage dreams so divine. Up in the sky, stars brightly shine. I know not rhymes, to weave these views, but in mere ethereal hues, I knit violet prose sometimes. To weave these views, I know not rhymes. I see the light, sparkling in gold, when this frail heart is caged and cold. I hear jewels sing, as I write, sparkling in gold, I see the light. Muse is the moon, when ink is mute revealing the deep timeless root~ of the faded flowers that croon, when ink is mute, muse is the moon.
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Seeker Avatar
July 1, 2024 at 7:37 PM
Beautifully done, IE, these swap quatrains are not so easy to execute ~ well deserved solo top win with this enchanting write, with alliteration subtly sprinkled for effect.
Empress Avatar
July 2, 2024 at 11:10 PM
Yes dear seeker this was very hard to do. Thank you for your thoughtful comment truly always an honor to hear from you
Woods Avatar
July 1, 2024 at 2:05 PM
Oh how lovely...I see shades of purple when I'm reading this... cool and misty. The form brings out such beauty. Winner winner chicken dinner! Lol! Much deserved! Xoxo
Empress Avatar
July 2, 2024 at 11:10 PM
Thank you so much dear crystol
Dietrich Avatar
July 1, 2024 at 9:02 AM
Right away you had me at peridots aching to fly SO beautiful. Meter and punctuation , nearly everything was just spot on! My favorite of them all. Congrats, Ink
Empress Avatar
July 1, 2024 at 10:17 AM
Thank you so much sweet andrea i am grateful, and so pleased that you liked my poem, ah! You are the best!!! Btw iv never thought i could get meter right haha you are the queen! So thank you that made me smile
Canerdy Avatar
July 1, 2024 at 5:20 AM
Ink Empress, a huge CONGRATS on your well-deserved top win! Janice
Empress Avatar
July 1, 2024 at 5:45 AM
Thank you so much , i didnt expect to be placed high at all its a pleasant surprise, appreciate your support
Kelii Kekaula Avatar
June 30, 2024 at 5:48 PM
Ink Empress, your talent is equivalent to your words -- both charming and uplifting (mines is proof that you were looking at my clock, lol). My compliments to your 1st placement win, to a dear fellow island friend, Aloha William
Empress Avatar
July 1, 2024 at 5:52 AM
Thank you so very much dear hilo so kind and generous of you! Appreciate your poetic support always truly
Edmonds  Avatar
June 30, 2024 at 4:36 PM
Back with congratulations on your top win in Andrea’s contest. Well done Ink, Beryl x
Empress Avatar
July 1, 2024 at 5:54 AM
Thank you so much dear beryl
Wraith Avatar
June 23, 2024 at 9:52 AM
The flow and meter here is melodic. It reads beautifully. The celestial wonder and imagery is enchanting. This piece reverberates along cosmic pathways and touches the soul of every life form. Another beautiful write by the esteemed poetess, the one and only Ink Empress
Empress Avatar
July 1, 2024 at 5:54 AM
Ah that means alot thank you dear edward i appreciate your kindness and enthusiastic compliments! So sincerely.
George Avatar
June 22, 2024 at 5:40 PM
Terrific rhymes Dear Ink. Celestial blessings are always on a call with our creativity and they are anew every day. I particularly believe midnight is a time for those dangerously creative words to pop up and I love to write at night. "Muse is the moon, when ink is mute revealing the deep timeless root." Very correct.
Empress Avatar
July 1, 2024 at 5:54 AM
Thank you sweet tonye appreciate your kindness truly
One Avatar
June 19, 2024 at 2:52 PM
The imagery in this is brilliant... Your poem rhymes really well and you have put together the swap refrains so well...each one flows really well, which adds to the poetic nature of your quatrain.. I think this one will do really well in the contest.. Best of luck..
Empress Avatar
July 1, 2024 at 6:21 AM
Awn thank you sweet silent one you are an inspiration to me
Nicholsen Avatar
June 19, 2024 at 12:39 AM
Lovely write enjoyed reading your work many blessings
Empress Avatar
June 19, 2024 at 1:59 PM
Thank you so very much
Gentile Avatar
June 18, 2024 at 4:12 AM
It seems that the moon was full and illuminating inspiration for you at 3 AM Ink Empress, for your glorious quatrain is so beautifully crafted and rhymed ! It illuminates on its own!!
Empress Avatar
June 19, 2024 at 1:59 PM
Ah thank you so much dear mike appreciate your kindness truly
Rose  Avatar
June 18, 2024 at 3:24 AM
No greater muse than the moon dear heart, keep watching it, it glows for you !
Empress Avatar
June 19, 2024 at 1:33 PM
Awn how so very sweet you are dear rose
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June 18, 2024 at 2:41 AM
Your rhymes are better than mine. Loved your swap poem. It took me ages to complete. Best for a win.
Empress Avatar
June 19, 2024 at 1:33 PM
Oh thats such a kind thing for you to say altho i believe you rhyme better thank you dear victor
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June 17, 2024 at 10:08 PM
WoW muse is the nooon
Empress Avatar
June 19, 2024 at 1:33 PM
Moon not noon haha dahlin
George Avatar
June 17, 2024 at 9:16 PM
"I know not rhymes, to weave these views, but in mere ethereal hues," Wow....! How can you lament that you know no rhymes through a beautifully rhyming poem! This is a wonderful quatrain, written at midnight when the moon is sending down sparkling light in gold. Thoroughly enjoyed your poem. All the best in the contest, dear Empress!
Empress Avatar
June 19, 2024 at 1:32 PM
Thank you so very much sweet valsa i appreciate your kindness truly
M  Avatar
June 17, 2024 at 4:01 PM
A beautiful rhyme Sweet Ink….you did good….you did real good!!! Haha…..Lovely poem! Debx
Empress Avatar
June 19, 2024 at 7:40 AM
Awn thank you sweet debx always happy to hear from you
Parker Avatar
June 17, 2024 at 3:47 PM
Well done dear poet, a perfect moment captured by your pen...
Empress Avatar
June 19, 2024 at 6:59 AM
That means alot coming from you, thank you so much
Hind Avatar
June 17, 2024 at 3:47 PM
Wow, beautiful, and it doesn't matter if you rhyme or not, your work is amazing...a privilege to read it always <3 :)
Empress Avatar
June 19, 2024 at 6:56 AM
Awwn how kind of you sweet paige i appreciate you
Edmonds  Avatar
June 17, 2024 at 3:35 PM
An exquisite Swap Quatrain Ink, prefect rhyming. Love every line… Beryl
Empress Avatar
June 19, 2024 at 6:47 AM
Awn thank you thats so kind of you to say dear beryl
Greenhough Avatar
June 17, 2024 at 3:30 PM
This is a poetic rhapsody of silent poems when the moon is the Muse., it seems to me. Good luck with the contest.
Empress Avatar
June 19, 2024 at 6:44 AM
Thank you so much sweet hilda so kind of you
Onpaper Avatar
June 17, 2024 at 3:12 PM
like peridots aching to fly, Mmmmm it’s like reading magic!!! Sooo in love with ur weave papi!!! when this frail heart is caged and cold.oooooo child!!! Like abracadabra pooooof!!!” I hear jewels sing, as I write, sparkling in gold, I see the light.” The kinda of realm that goes through ur mind must me enchanting!!! when ink is mute revealing the deep timeless root… the flow is an absolute stream of joy n the rhymes are just soooo satisfyingly effortless aeee … magnificent
Empress Avatar
June 17, 2024 at 3:15 PM
Papi took me three hours to rhyme! Now my brain wont shut down! So im wide awake 3 am! Ugh hahah
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