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I Just Want To Fly Away

I sigh
long and sad
     I have years
lifetimes
           oceans of sadness
to let go . . . 
from  d e e p ,   deep  inside me
                  I just want to  F L Y  away-
but I am walking . . . 
it is WINTER
      with a freezing wind
the snow is  c r u n c h i n g  under my feet
                       I smell churned up earth
the DECAY of dead flowers
             and voices
                    from the graves I pass by . . . 
the day is   d a r k
                         no sun shines
just thick dark clouds hang like ghosts 
    and it is snowing
               the sky is  w e e p i n g  white
hidden, a bird cries like a new baby
                         I just want to fly  a w a y
but I follow . . . 
the hearse carrying my baby boy
                   I feel detached
a watcher of this scene
I hear the prayers  DRIFTING among the stones 
      and in the  b a r r e n  snow covered trees
                      the smell of roses is choking
me, then . . . . 
    my family turn and are leaving
            but I am a STATUE  weeping alone
I sigh
long and sad
            and then, I am  
                                 s
                                    i
                                      n
                                        g
                                          i
                                            n
                                               g      a lullaby
    it is drifting and  f l o a t i n g  in the wind . . .   

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October 23, 2017

Free Verse/I Just Want To Fly Away
Copyright Protected, ID 951951


Written for the contest, Deep and Dark II
sponsor, Laura Loo

First Place
Copyright © | Year Posted 2017

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Barden Avatar
November 6, 2017 at 12:36 AM
Congratulations on your wonderfully dark win, Constance - blessings, and keep up the great work! :-)
Daniel Avatar
November 2, 2017 at 9:36 AM
Truly dark and makes one weepy, Constance, congratulations on your fine win:)
Horn Avatar
November 1, 2017 at 3:46 PM
I'll Fly Away in the Morning. Hallelujah by and by. I'll fly away.
Roper Avatar
October 28, 2017 at 10:26 PM
Stunning , Broken Wings, congratulation on your win Hugs Eve ~`*
Nusker Avatar
October 27, 2017 at 10:45 PM
A very moving poem, B.W. Congrats on your win.
Rodrigues Avatar
October 27, 2017 at 4:59 PM
Back for congrats! <3 Kim
Wanter Avatar
October 24, 2017 at 10:24 AM
Deep and dark it truly is. I can't imagine a sadder scene, and perfected with your ability to express.
Gentile Avatar
October 24, 2017 at 8:18 AM
So sad and powerful, I can really feel the words. I thought this was incredibly poignant, Broken Wings!
Gondolf Avatar
October 24, 2017 at 7:08 AM
I could feel the anguish in this poem; very well done. Good luck in the contest.
One Avatar
October 24, 2017 at 6:25 AM
A very sad write... very deep and dark..
Brewer Avatar
October 23, 2017 at 10:23 PM
This poem reminds me of ‘Die Winterreise’ and is worthy of inclusion in that song/poem cycle. Beautifully atmospheric and sad.
Rodrigues Avatar
October 23, 2017 at 7:28 PM
So sad. The loss sits hardest on theone who grieves the most.
Allison Avatar
October 23, 2017 at 6:47 PM
beautiful but so so so sad Constance I had tears by the end of the poem - i know this will do really well for you in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx
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