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I sigh long and sad I have years lifetimes oceans of sadness to let go . . . from d e e p , deep inside me I just want to F L Y away- but I am walking . . . it is WINTER with a freezing wind the snow is c r u n c h i n g under my feet I smell churned up earth the DECAY of dead flowers and voices from the graves I pass by . . . the day is d a r k no sun shines just thick dark clouds hang like ghosts and it is snowing the sky is w e e p i n g white hidden, a bird cries like a new baby I just want to fly a w a y but I follow . . . the hearse carrying my baby boy I feel detached a watcher of this scene I hear the prayers DRIFTING among the stones and in the b a r r e n snow covered trees the smell of roses is choking me, then . . . . my family turn and are leaving but I am a STATUE weeping alone I sigh long and sad and then, I am s i n g i n g a lullaby it is drifting and f l o a t i n g in the wind . . . _________________________ October 23, 2017 Free Verse/I Just Want To Fly Away Copyright Protected, ID 951951 Written for the contest, Deep and Dark II sponsor, Laura Loo First Place

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Date: 11/6/2017 12:36:00 AM
Congratulations on your wonderfully dark win, Constance - blessings, and keep up the great work! :-)
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Date: 11/2/2017 9:36:00 AM
Truly dark and makes one weepy, Constance, congratulations on your fine win:)
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Date: 11/1/2017 3:46:00 PM
I'll Fly Away in the Morning. Hallelujah by and by. I'll fly away.
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Date: 10/28/2017 10:26:00 PM
Stunning , Broken Wings, congratulation on your win Hugs Eve ~`*
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Date: 10/27/2017 10:45:00 PM
A very moving poem, B.W. Congrats on your win.
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Date: 10/27/2017 4:59:00 PM
Back for congrats! <3 Kim
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Date: 10/24/2017 10:24:00 AM
Deep and dark it truly is. I can't imagine a sadder scene, and perfected with your ability to express.
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Date: 10/24/2017 8:18:00 AM
So sad and powerful, I can really feel the words. I thought this was incredibly poignant, Broken Wings!
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Date: 10/24/2017 7:08:00 AM
I could feel the anguish in this poem; very well done. Good luck in the contest.
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Date: 10/24/2017 6:25:00 AM
A very sad write... very deep and dark..
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Date: 10/23/2017 10:23:00 PM
This poem reminds me of ‘Die Winterreise’ and is worthy of inclusion in that song/poem cycle. Beautifully atmospheric and sad.
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Date: 10/23/2017 7:28:00 PM
So sad. The loss sits hardest on theone who grieves the most.
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Date: 10/23/2017 6:47:00 PM
beautiful but so so so sad Constance I had tears by the end of the poem - i know this will do really well for you in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx
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