I Have Fallen

I clasp your hand the moment I realise I will fall alone
You grit your teeth in anger holding me as I dangle there
Your jawline is rock hard, the veins on your head popping out,
You are breathing in and out in desperate fear of losing me
But your lightening, determined eyes shoot through me and say,
"Damn it all!
I love you
I will never let you go"

The mountain's edge falls around me and below us
But I will not look down
Gravity is pissed
With all of my strength I hurl my shoulder upwards so that my other hand clasps your arm
You pull me up to safety and draw me into your fiery embrace

Nothing will take us but each other...
I know this and sob in your arms
I have never fallen so in love with you
In that moment when death was so close
From here, we will rise
Kiss me relentlessly through all destruction,
You have taught me that
Every mountain will fall before us

Copyright © | Year Posted 2016



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Date: 3/15/2016 5:51:00 PM
WOW, Laura, you end this poem well. I like the passion and lesson love teaches us. Breathtaking write. LINDA
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 3/15/2016 6:00:00 PM
Thanks so much for checking this one out, Linda! Means a lot coming from such a talented Poetess. ~Laura
Date: 2/9/2016 8:27:00 PM
Wow the first 3 lines of the second stanza. And the last verse. Great
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Date: 1/25/2016 1:51:00 PM
My senses in totality are in awe of your wonderful lines. Liquefied bliss from the boil of glorious words has brought out enchanting aroma beyond scaling. 7 is simply an underscore for this fine share.
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Date: 1/4/2016 11:55:00 AM
Spectacular verse my dear , such a heart, soul and breathtaking , this one did blow up my mind , I've enjoyed every letter not only every word......I thank you so much for sharing this delightful and remarkable poem.....wish you a happy new year full of passion, happiness, romance and joy for u and all of ur beloved one's....hugs / / :) dalia
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 1/5/2016 3:38:00 AM
You've got a heart of gold, Dalia. Can't wait to check out more of your work, and thank you for reading mine. Hope you have an amazing year. ~Laura
Date: 1/3/2016 3:30:00 PM
Can emotion be any stronger than this? I think not. This love could not have been described in any more powerful terms than these. None exist in our universe. We should all feel this passion and can when we appreciate the people around us for what they are. You inspire me to do just that. There is beauty and love all around us if we just take a moment to appreciate and savor it.
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 1/5/2016 3:38:00 AM
To inspire you, brings me so much happiness...savor the love! ~Laura
Date: 1/3/2016 12:11:00 PM
The test of true love lies in the moments of danger and painful trials, Laura. Having overcome those will see the blossoming of love in all its strength and passion. ~ Happy New Year and regards ~ paul
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 1/5/2016 3:36:00 AM
Hey there, Paul. Life is so fragile, but together, with love, somehow we prevail. That strength is something Eternal and sacred. ~Laura
Date: 1/2/2016 3:15:00 AM
Mmmmmm...Laura, the danger of your pain is no match for the power of your love with him, to feel truly inseparable from one another, magic lives between such hearts!!! I love how you assert their belief in eachother, and how only they can determine their outcome, fricken sweet! The merger of imagery, devotion, and truth is breathtaking, a revelation of faith! "Kiss me relentlessly through all destruction..." invincible love!!! The final verse is Divine! J.A.B. A FAV!!!
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 1/5/2016 3:35:00 AM
I love your enthusiasm and love, Justin! So glad you liked this one! : ) My favorite line is: "Gravity is pissed" ! ~Laura
Date: 1/1/2016 5:24:00 PM
Wao... Nicely written... the miuntain's edge fall around me and below us....waoo nice choice of words,
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Date: 1/1/2016 9:16:00 PM
Thanks, Andrew! glad you enjoyed the poem! Always, Laura
Date: 1/1/2016 4:50:00 PM
A passionate love poem Laura. A love every couple craves.
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 1/1/2016 9:15:00 PM
Thanks Tim! : ) ~Laura
Date: 1/1/2016 2:20:00 PM
Beautiful!
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 1/1/2016 4:19:00 PM
Thanks Carol for visiting my page :) Glad you liked the poem. ~Laura
Date: 1/1/2016 1:45:00 PM
Wow! Larua! that last stanza! Brilliant! I think I have fallen for you now...:)
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 1/1/2016 4:18:00 PM
Now now. Aint no one in the right mind wants to fall down that rabbit hole. xD Thanks for reading, Jerry and Happy New Year. ~Laura
Date: 1/1/2016 9:38:00 AM
There is nothing like young love, Laura....bask in it...let it be true and strong....Damn it all....for the one you love, sweetie....happy New Year...
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 1/1/2016 4:17:00 PM
Thanks, sweet Eileen. Happy New Year dear. Damn it all is right! ~Laura
Date: 1/1/2016 6:34:00 AM
beautiful writing
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 1/1/2016 4:07:00 PM
Thanks Anthony! ~Laura
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