I Have a Revelation

In this forest abyss, I navigate my tender to the touch nerves - the finger tracing surface pain, a fixation on the all too silent footfall, prints that talk behind my back. They patronize me with hyena laughs, lurking tendrils that wind around my path. tangible tightrope - the lasso ready to hang me on fervent branch Intrigue finds me running, screaming through skeletal fingers — branches tearing at my hair and clothes. I hear the forest floor and ceiling laughing at me, driving me to the brink of insanity. Pausing, I have a revelation...I recall a tale, a wild whopper of a portal in the epicenter of the woods. spontaneous thought dare i enter a new world - earth’s fraught with danger I find a clearing up ahead once I step through dense fog. Funny, I am suddenly all alone with the tallest tree. I know I must climb into the clouds. I eat the fruit as I make my trek. Aromatic, juicy, so alive this food. empowered with strength leaving suffering behind - - must be tree of life 1/29/2020 Eight word challenge 1 2020 Poetry Contest Sponsor: John Hamilton

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Date: 1/31/2020 1:43:00 PM
Congrats Kim for your first place win--splendid write!
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 1/31/2020 7:11:00 PM
Thanks so much, sweet friend!
Date: 1/31/2020 12:42:00 PM
Kim great use of THR 8 words! Congrats on your top win!;)
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 1/31/2020 7:11:00 PM
Thank you, Brenda!
Date: 1/31/2020 12:31:00 PM
Wow Kim, you've definitely put a lot of thought into this write, an excellent use of the eight words, just what I was looking for...congrats on a top win!
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 1/31/2020 4:38:00 PM
Thank you so much, John! :)
Date: 1/30/2020 5:55:00 AM
Your imagery is sound and wonderful Kim.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 1/30/2020 7:00:00 AM
Thank you, sweet friend!
Date: 1/29/2020 9:21:00 AM
Wow, this was amazing Kim. Your talent will definitely lift this one to the top of the list where I might have to climb a tree to see it. :)
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 1/29/2020 2:27:00 PM
Thanks, my friend!
Date: 1/29/2020 8:51:00 AM
Well done! Great write. I think tree of life is a good guess. If not, at least the fruit is nourishing--and always more to see from greater heights. I have climbed many a wrong tree--this one of yours sounds promising. I love the imagery in this work!
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 1/29/2020 2:26:00 PM
Thanks, Joe!
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