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I Forgive You

You lost my life.
     Sharp as a knife...
     You lost a lot of things.
     Your memory in my heart
     Still sings...

Today I gave you my secrets,
All of them, the ones from Egypt,
And those from Europe, slow motion
Swimming away across the Ocean.
I whispered in your ear
All you didn't want to hear.
    
     And...
     I forgive you,
     I forgive you.

The secrets of the life stolen
While you screech, eyes swollen
With tears of loss.
Both of us kneeling on moss;
I am not cruel, only want your love,
That one word you get so sick of.

     But...
     I will always forgive you,
     I will always forgive you.

Buried so deep inside,
Almost a stone I tried to hide.
I'll always be that seeking child
That wants to be reconciled.

     I lost you before I was born.
     Before I even opened my eyes

          I was forlorn.





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April 8, 2017 
N/A in contest: Open Poetry Contest 2
Sponsored by: Charlotte Jade Puddifoot

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J Hamilton Gist Date: 7/26/2017 1:11:00 PM Nice work!! Login to Reply

Sudarsan Mishro Date: 7/8/2017 8:24:00 PM "Buried so deep inside almost a stone I tried to hide" touched me most. Login to Reply Darren White Date: 7/9/2017 1:42:00 AM It's a very emotional poem for me.... Thank you.

Jenifer Jeyaseelan Date: 6/28/2017 12:39:00 AM A heart touching piece....really great work Login to Reply Darren White Date: 6/28/2017 5:29:00 AM Thank you Jennifer :)

Debbie Duncan Date: 6/27/2017 6:30:00 PM Awesome write :) Login to Reply Darren White Date: 6/28/2017 5:28:00 AM Thank you Debbie :)

Robert Lindley Date: 5/7/2017 8:37:00 PM I love poems with epic depths of emotion, mystery and forlorn feelings of loss.. This is truly an exquisite gem my friend! A7 and a fav.. Login to Reply Darren White Date: 5/8/2017 12:42:00 AM Robert, thank you so very much for this, and also for the 7 and the fav. :)

Sam The Poet Date: 4/13/2017 5:08:00 AM you've touched me Login to Reply Darren White Date: 4/13/2017 5:10:00 AM Thank you, Sam :)

Doug Vinson Date: 4/11/2017 11:08:00 PM Ouch, Darren, this is a deep one. Login to Reply Darren White Date: 4/12/2017 12:23:00 AM Doug, didn't recognize the avatar :) Thank you...

Bawa Talwar Date: 4/11/2017 10:36:00 PM Its touchy.heart bleeds after reading this. Login to Reply Darren White Date: 4/12/2017 12:22:00 AM Yes, I agree, thank you.

Andrea Dietrich Date: 4/11/2017 7:12:00 PM Yes, I agree with the person who guessed an unborn child. A very sad one but lovely in its forgiveness. Login to Reply Darren White Date: 4/12/2017 12:22:00 AM Thank you, Andrea.

Maria Williams Date: 4/11/2017 4:24:00 AM Amazing work as usual Darren. I see this is for a contest. In my eyes you are the Winner already. A 7+++ Login to Reply Darren White Date: 4/11/2017 4:29:00 AM Maria, thank you so much! Also for the 7 :)

Arthur Vaso Date: 4/10/2017 9:21:00 PM I came to read this again, :) Login to Reply Darren White Date: 4/11/2017 12:31:00 AM Welcome back :)

Anil Deo Date: 4/10/2017 8:52:00 PM Made sure this one earned a 7 rating in the box, above. Shalom (Dankie en tosiens mynheer. Ik was in Suid Afrikan gebooren). Verstaan U my Afrikaans-en-Nederland I van my jare op universiteit. Anil Deo Login to Reply Darren White Date: 4/11/2017 12:30:00 AM hehe ja dat versta ik :) and thank you!

Ibrahim Bashiru Date: 4/10/2017 4:58:00 PM great piece, love it... Login to Reply Darren White Date: 4/11/2017 12:31:00 AM thank you :)

White Wolf Date: 4/10/2017 1:25:00 AM What a wonderful way you have with words, Duir! You have soul my friend, and it shows! Best of luck to you mate! Login to Reply Darren White Date: 4/10/2017 2:37:00 AM Thank you Budgie :) Now keep your fingers crossed that I can go home today!

Arthur Vaso Date: 4/9/2017 11:48:00 PM The music goes so well with this fine poem! Login to Reply Darren White Date: 4/10/2017 12:44:00 AM Thank you my friend. I think so too.

Lynn Marie Date: 4/9/2017 5:01:00 PM An intense piece layered with meaning that even after several reads, I feel quiet with the emotions your beautifully sad words conveyed. The imagery is stunning, the final stanza just heartbreaking. One of the most profound poems I have read on 'forgiveness'. Extraordinary writing Darren :-) a fave, 7+ lynnxxx Login to Reply Darren White Date: 4/10/2017 12:43:00 AM Lynn. What wonderful words, thank you so much. Also for the fave and the 7 :)

Carolyn Devonshire Date: 4/9/2017 4:34:00 PM Extraordinary work, Darren. I agree with Judy's comment. I kept feeling like this was an aborted child forgiving the mother. Wow! Login to Reply Darren White Date: 4/9/2017 11:42:00 PM A not-wanted child.... Thank you Carolyn

Laura Leiser Date: 4/9/2017 3:48:00 PM No words....powerful...beautiful! Login to Reply Darren White Date: 4/9/2017 11:41:00 PM Thank you Laura

Sara Ella Date: 4/9/2017 2:35:00 PM There is so much to this poem - the repeated forgiveness is a wonderful message. Beautiful poem Darren <3 Login to Reply Darren White Date: 4/9/2017 11:40:00 PM Thanks my sweet friend <3

Judy Ball Date: 4/9/2017 10:41:00 AM WoW! This sounds very much like a child who was unwanted by the mother. Very well done with exceptional feeling. Bravo God Bless, JB Login to Reply Darren White Date: 4/9/2017 10:46:00 AM Thank you, Judy :)

Tim Smith Date: 4/9/2017 9:51:00 AM It's not just with flowers and candy we show our love...It is in our heart and in our forgiveness where it lies...That final couplet is beautiful...A fav Login to Reply Darren White Date: 4/9/2017 9:55:00 AM Thank you Tim, my friend... I a agree. And I am happy with the fav :)

Richard Lamoureux Date: 4/9/2017 9:01:00 AM You do sad with pizzaz! Login to Reply Darren White Date: 4/9/2017 9:07:00 AM I like that compliment :)

Anne-Marie Coreggia Date: 4/9/2017 8:44:00 AM Darren, it left me absolutely speechless for a while. The depth of your words is deeply touching and the music piece you chose accentuates its reach within us. This is an outstanding entry for the contest 7+ :) Amitiés P.S.: I also loved the image of the bird finally unrestrained flying higher and stronger . . . go Darren, go! Login to Reply Darren White Date: 4/9/2017 9:06:00 AM Anne-Marie, thank you so much for your great comments, I indeed agree to the music accentuating it. Thank you for the 7 :)

Kim Rodrigues Date: 4/9/2017 5:45:00 AM Deep emotion in your incredible ink! A 7 my friend! Login to Reply Darren White Date: 4/9/2017 5:48:00 AM Kim, thank you, my friend. For the 7, and because you love the poem.

Connie Marcum Wong Date: 4/9/2017 4:46:00 AM Wow, this is very impressive Darren! It all became clear when I got to the ending stanza. An awesome entry for the contest. 7 : ) Login to Reply Darren White Date: 4/9/2017 5:47:00 AM Connie, I am so very happy that you love my poem, and for the 7 :)

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