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You lost my life. Sharp as a knife... You lost a lot of things. Your memory in my heart Still sings... Today I gave you my secrets, All of them, the ones from Egypt, And those from Europe, slow motion Swimming away across the Ocean. I whispered in your ear All you didn't want to hear. And... I forgive you, I forgive you. The secrets of the life stolen While you screech, eyes swollen With tears of loss. Both of us kneeling on moss; I am not cruel, only want your love, That one word you get so sick of. But... I will always forgive you, I will always forgive you. Buried so deep inside, Almost a stone I tried to hide. I'll always be that seeking child That wants to be reconciled. I lost you before I was born. Before I even opened my eyes I was forlorn. *** April 8, 2017 N/A in contest: Open Poetry Contest 2 Sponsored by: Charlotte Jade Puddifoot

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J Hamilton Gist

Date: 7/26/2017 1:11:00 PM

Nice work!!

Sudarsan Mishro

Date: 7/8/2017 8:24:00 PM

"Buried so deep inside almost a stone I tried to hide" touched me most.

Darren White
Date: 7/9/2017 1:42:00 AM

It's a very emotional poem for me.... Thank you.

Jenifer Jeyaseelan

Date: 6/28/2017 12:39:00 AM

A heart touching piece....really great work

Darren White
Date: 6/28/2017 5:29:00 AM

Thank you Jennifer :)

Debbie Duncan

Date: 6/27/2017 6:30:00 PM

Awesome write :)

Darren White
Date: 6/28/2017 5:28:00 AM

Thank you Debbie :)

Robert Lindley

Date: 5/7/2017 8:37:00 PM

I love poems with epic depths of emotion, mystery and forlorn feelings of loss.. This is truly an exquisite gem my friend! A7 and a fav..

Darren White
Date: 5/8/2017 12:42:00 AM

Robert, thank you so very much for this, and also for the 7 and the fav. :)

Sam The Poet

Date: 4/13/2017 5:08:00 AM

you've touched me

Darren White
Date: 4/13/2017 5:10:00 AM

Thank you, Sam :)

Doug Vinson

Date: 4/11/2017 11:08:00 PM

Ouch, Darren, this is a deep one.

Darren White
Date: 4/12/2017 12:23:00 AM

Doug, didn't recognize the avatar :) Thank you...

Bawa Talwar

Date: 4/11/2017 10:36:00 PM

Its touchy.heart bleeds after reading this.

Darren White
Date: 4/12/2017 12:22:00 AM

Yes, I agree, thank you.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/11/2017 7:12:00 PM

Yes, I agree with the person who guessed an unborn child. A very sad one but lovely in its forgiveness.

Darren White
Date: 4/12/2017 12:22:00 AM

Thank you, Andrea.

Maria Williams

Date: 4/11/2017 4:24:00 AM

Amazing work as usual Darren. I see this is for a contest. In my eyes you are the Winner already. A 7+++

Darren White
Date: 4/11/2017 4:29:00 AM

Maria, thank you so much! Also for the 7 :)

Arthur Vaso

Date: 4/10/2017 9:21:00 PM

I came to read this again, :)

Darren White
Date: 4/11/2017 12:31:00 AM

Welcome back :)

Anil Deo

Date: 4/10/2017 8:52:00 PM

Made sure this one earned a 7 rating in the box, above. Shalom (Dankie en tosiens mynheer. Ik was in Suid Afrikan gebooren). Verstaan U my Afrikaans-en-Nederland I van my jare op universiteit. Anil Deo

Darren White
Date: 4/11/2017 12:30:00 AM

hehe ja dat versta ik :) and thank you!

Ibrahim Bashiru

Date: 4/10/2017 4:58:00 PM

great piece, love it...

Darren White
Date: 4/11/2017 12:31:00 AM

thank you :)

White Wolf

Date: 4/10/2017 1:25:00 AM

What a wonderful way you have with words, Duir! You have soul my friend, and it shows! Best of luck to you mate!

Darren White
Date: 4/10/2017 2:37:00 AM

Thank you Budgie :) Now keep your fingers crossed that I can go home today!

Arthur Vaso

Date: 4/9/2017 11:48:00 PM

The music goes so well with this fine poem!

Darren White
Date: 4/10/2017 12:44:00 AM

Thank you my friend. I think so too.

Lynn Marie

Date: 4/9/2017 5:01:00 PM

An intense piece layered with meaning that even after several reads, I feel quiet with the emotions your beautifully sad words conveyed. The imagery is stunning, the final stanza just heartbreaking. One of the most profound poems I have read on 'forgiveness'. Extraordinary writing Darren :-) a fave, 7+ lynnxxx

Darren White
Date: 4/10/2017 12:43:00 AM

Lynn. What wonderful words, thank you so much. Also for the fave and the 7 :)

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 4/9/2017 4:34:00 PM

Extraordinary work, Darren. I agree with Judy's comment. I kept feeling like this was an aborted child forgiving the mother. Wow!

Darren White
Date: 4/9/2017 11:42:00 PM

A not-wanted child.... Thank you Carolyn

Laura Leiser

Date: 4/9/2017 3:48:00 PM

No words....powerful...beautiful!

Darren White
Date: 4/9/2017 11:41:00 PM

Thank you Laura

Sara Ella

Date: 4/9/2017 2:35:00 PM

There is so much to this poem - the repeated forgiveness is a wonderful message. Beautiful poem Darren <3

Darren White
Date: 4/9/2017 11:40:00 PM

Thanks my sweet friend <3

Judy Ball

Date: 4/9/2017 10:41:00 AM

WoW! This sounds very much like a child who was unwanted by the mother. Very well done with exceptional feeling. Bravo God Bless, JB

Darren White
Date: 4/9/2017 10:46:00 AM

Thank you, Judy :)

Tim Smith

Date: 4/9/2017 9:51:00 AM

It's not just with flowers and candy we show our love...It is in our heart and in our forgiveness where it lies...That final couplet is beautiful...A fav

Darren White
Date: 4/9/2017 9:55:00 AM

Thank you Tim, my friend... I a agree. And I am happy with the fav :)

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 4/9/2017 9:01:00 AM

You do sad with pizzaz!

Darren White
Date: 4/9/2017 9:07:00 AM

I like that compliment :)

Anne-Marie Coreggia

Date: 4/9/2017 8:44:00 AM

Darren, it left me absolutely speechless for a while. The depth of your words is deeply touching and the music piece you chose accentuates its reach within us. This is an outstanding entry for the contest 7+ :) Amitiés P.S.: I also loved the image of the bird finally unrestrained flying higher and stronger . . . go Darren, go!

Darren White
Date: 4/9/2017 9:06:00 AM

Anne-Marie, thank you so much for your great comments, I indeed agree to the music accentuating it. Thank you for the 7 :)

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 4/9/2017 5:45:00 AM

Deep emotion in your incredible ink! A 7 my friend!

Darren White
Date: 4/9/2017 5:48:00 AM

Kim, thank you, my friend. For the 7, and because you love the poem.

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 4/9/2017 4:46:00 AM

Wow, this is very impressive Darren! It all became clear when I got to the ending stanza. An awesome entry for the contest. 7 : )

Darren White
Date: 4/9/2017 5:47:00 AM

Connie, I am so very happy that you love my poem, and for the 7 :)