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I Don'T Know

physical distress my emotional nightmare just can't catch a break can't feel any less uncontrollable night fears which road should I take? sometimes I feel blessed my lover says he's right here achy hands my fate need to stop and rest I can't cry anymore tears looks like I'm too late -Laura Loo

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Bl Devnath

Date: 5/13/2016 3:02:00 PM

Beautifully penned a very sad senryu, it's heartfelt. At the time of distress one should try to be strong mentally first and if continues for sometime, everything becomes normal thereafter.

Joanna Daniel

Date: 5/10/2016 12:29:00 AM

You are indeed blessed with God to take care of you:) No need to "cry anymore tears" Laura:) I like the way you rhymed these senryus:)

Lu Loo
Date: 5/10/2016 11:57:00 AM

thank you Jo:)-luloo

Charlie Smith

Date: 5/9/2016 8:43:00 PM

Glad at least to know it has no effect on your writing skills. Feel better LuLoo...

Lu Loo
Date: 5/10/2016 11:57:00 AM

thank you Charlie :)-luloo

Jan Allison

Date: 5/9/2016 6:10:00 PM

Such a sad string of Senryu :-( The most important thing we both have LuLoo is we have a support network around us if we are going through a bad time - your third stanza is perfect:-) hugs jan xx

Lu Loo
Date: 5/9/2016 8:38:00 PM

thank you lady -luloo :)