I Could Not Even Remember When

The ricefields at the
roadsides were gone.
I didn’t notice when
they started to fade.

I felt empty and sick,
as sad as dark dawn,
when I saw the flock
of teeny weeny birds,

chasing each other
going to the direction
where four squares
rice paddies located.

If green grains evanesced,
where should they go
to find food when even gardens
turned into buildings too?

Copyright © | Year Posted 2020



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Date: 8/27/2020 11:20:00 AM
Such a sincere expression of Industrial Revolt. I must admit the choice of "ricefields at the roadsides is a unique image...puts me in mind of the American police action in Vietnam...which puts me in mind of Peter Straub's wonderful novel, "KOKO", and the beautifully drawn scenes of Dr. Manhattan's catastrophic touch as displayed in the graphic novel "The Watchmen", which puts me in mind of Joni Mitchell's song "Big Yellow Taxi", Which puts me in mind...and on and on. And that's what good poetry is supposed to do. Well done.
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Date: 8/27/2020 8:01:00 PM
Wow, I am blown away by these stuff Ryan!Thank you so much really for reading this piece. Stay safe.
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