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Let's Get Emotional - Personification in a Sicilian Quintain Stanza Poetry Contest by Andrea Dietrich.

My attempt to write in Iambic Pentameter. Personally, I feel writing this way can lack emotion, but I thought I would give it a go.

The Quintain is Written in Iambic Pentameter with a rhyme sequence of a.b.a.b.a. This one also has a sense of personification..

My fate decays like dead moss on a tree.
Soft teardrops fall like leaves caught in a breeze.
My shadow still remains lost in debris,
as I reside in prison on my knees.
In darkness no light helps me find the key.

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Tonye George

Date: 2/1/2025 3:11:00 PM

Portrayed the sadness emotion so well. This is very evocative. "My shadow still remains lost in debris." Congratulations on your win Silent.

Crystol Woods

Date: 8/30/2024 12:18:00 PM

This is perfection. I adore how this flowed and rhymes all the way through. Hitting rock bottom brings us to our knees, perfect place to seek help right?! You're such a deep thoughtful poet Silent One... so professional, emotional, filled with image that brings me back to the times I've been knocked to my knees. Congratulations on much deserved win!! Xo

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/29/2024 3:34:00 PM

Good imagery plus great expression of sadness equals a great placement. Congrats!

Phyllis Babcock

Date: 8/25/2024 10:37:00 AM

Great personification on your poem. Yes sadness can keep us in dark places for while. love phyl

Valsa George

Date: 8/20/2024 7:38:00 PM

The Best personification of sadness ! Great poetry.... unmatched in poignancy. " My shadow still remains lost in debris, as I reside in prison on my knees/ In darkness no light helps me find the key". The intensity of helplessness cannot be better expressed. How I wish you could say--- I am Happiness!

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 8/19/2024 12:09:00 PM

"I Am Sadness" is a powerful write. In 5 lines you told a wonderful story. Great Ending.... "Good Luck" Enjoy your day with fun writing away............

Nette Onclaud

Date: 8/18/2024 9:17:00 PM

ohh, poe-like in mood and poetic depth, S... i almost used the same theme but ended up taking a diffirent route . .. remarkably composed wc went deeper than sadness!

Tom Woody

Date: 8/18/2024 1:40:00 PM

You and inky both took on sadness so well. I thought I would go with fear. I think we'll see a lot of outstanding entries. Well done, I know this wasn't easy for you which makes all the more praiseworthy

Jay Narain

Date: 8/18/2024 10:30:00 AM

Nice thoughtful poem

Beej Simrov

Date: 8/18/2024 9:47:00 AM

This is lovely, and you did a great job melding the emotion with the math. Great read!

Paige Hind

Date: 8/18/2024 9:14:00 AM

Deep expressions.... you did this form very well

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart

Date: 8/18/2024 8:24:00 AM

Beautifully composed. Certainly not lacking in emotion IMHO. xomo

Regina Mcintosh

Date: 8/18/2024 4:33:00 AM

You always amaze me with your words, a portrait that tells the story of a heart, a soul, a light - sadness, whatever you attempt to write, you write with so much beauty. God bless you and much love, Gina

Ink Empress

Date: 8/18/2024 4:17:00 AM

Youv personified and written about sadness using imagery in such eloquence dear silent one, so well woven and expressed and how youv compared tears to leaves caught in a breeze blew me away! What an artistic simile! The darkness and sorrow how youv depicted it is so clever! I absolutely love this! Especially love also the rhymes! Creative. I think i have a lot to learn in english! Lol what am i but a mere maldivian? this looks seamless! Despite how hard it must be writing in iambic form. I believe so too sometimes iambic pentameter gives a cadence and is lyrical but emotions do not come strong. If that makes sense! However yours is emotive and deeply touching! This you did very well. Im sure andrea will love and appreciate your take! Best wishes

I am Sadness

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