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I Am a Maroon

I am a Maroon Flesh and blood and everything My spirit cries against the toxic air Of cities, and broken moon Perched on skyscrapers Surveying ruin Blowing with greasy scraps of paper Through the horror of night Eagles with broken wings. I want to enter the bush again And be still Within the wash of rain Far from the folding clothes of pain Cankering my will. I am Maroon Lover of the land like Muta Baruka On when the California fires burn I sit and smile with the sun Staring at my wings of wax.

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Cesar Cantu

Date: 5/29/2009 12:43:00 PM

Last line reminded me of Icarus and the whole language of the poem put that image in an urban context, mixed with some jungle stuff, don't know why @.@ so this poem rules because of that, the language and the whole rythm sensed when reading outloud! thanks for the experience xD

Yoni Dvorkis

Date: 5/27/2009 11:57:00 AM

Very nice. I like the Icarus reference in the end, I think it's an Icarus reference... Feels like a cry for older pre-skyscraper times. that in this world anyone can feel marooned in a city they tried to love and understand but never quite got the hang of it. I had that relationship with NYC before I moved away.

Edward Orozco

Date: 5/26/2009 8:40:00 AM

Beautiful use of imagery master! Beautiful indeed. - jeremia

Sajdah Al-Riyami

Date: 5/23/2009 3:28:00 AM

You Ended It Perfectly!Tops For This Poem

Brandy Megens

Date: 5/20/2009 3:16:00 PM

i see clearly your descriptive image beautifully done

Rhia Madison Thomer

Date: 5/16/2009 9:21:00 AM

i see why metaphors are much better than similes hahah. this was a descriptive visual write, very beautiful i think i hear the musci :) <3 madison ps. you got soupmail!!

John Rhinem

Date: 5/15/2009 4:07:00 PM

Smile~"Oh How I Love Your Soul!!!":):)~"You" pour it upon the pages L'nass, straight from the depths of the greatest treasure that any life could ever know~"The Treasures of Their Soul!!!":):)~This is a wonderfully written, image filled, creative and amazing write!!!:):)~And, I shall always love "You My Brother," until the very ends of time...."A Perfect Write L'nass"...."My Love Always & Forever, To You & Your Loves, John!!!"~"Have A Beautiful Weekend!!!":):) Bye ~

Nadia Shahwan

Date: 5/14/2009 7:25:00 AM

Beautifu word.

James Peranteau

Date: 5/12/2009 2:34:00 PM

L'nass,..this time you have nailed it with me,.....I am caught in this concrete jungle,..though not as concrete as some of my neighbors,..still not the lush I desire,..no steal step! TY for this write,..and I hope for many more far away friend! james

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 5/12/2009 10:15:00 AM

Vivid and tragic images of fire-damaged cities. Love the reference to "wings of wax." Very compelling as the reader considers the way colors bleed and drip through the sky. Nice work! Love, Carolyn

Carrie Richards

Date: 5/12/2009 8:27:00 AM

You took us on a journey...through the dry brush of devastation...and made it seem almost serene...and beautiful...like the skyline over Santa Barbara...with a maroon sky above the flame. wow!