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I almost tossed it out contest

Sponsored by John Lawless   20/10/24

I almost tossed it out


The day was long, her eyelashes longer 
batting them, only drove my lust stronger 
I was light on my feet, she’d light fingers
I traversed hot coals, yet coldness lingers 
How cruel this night, corrupt and broken 
Rolex watch gone, one silk hose her token 
(I almost tossed it out), but couldn’t part 
that laddered stocking, of a high-class tart
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Bell Avatar
November 11, 2024 at 3:06 AM
Ah, many a randy lad has lost his Rolex in the height of passion. Probably why time flies by when you're having fun.
Kavanagh  Avatar
November 11, 2024 at 6:21 AM
This is getting very deep Paul, but not so much that anything temporal is going over my head lol! Cheers David
Anaya Avatar
October 20, 2024 at 4:07 PM
Oh no, a Rolex is missing as is one laddered stocking (adds imagry). Sounds like it was worth the drama. It's getting closer , Dia de Los muertos and cuties in costumes. Good one, David. Right up Lawless'z alley.
Anaya Avatar
October 24, 2024 at 4:35 PM
Yep! Gotta love em romcom's, they crack me up.
Kavanagh  Avatar
October 22, 2024 at 2:33 PM
Genius Anaya lol!
Anaya Avatar
October 21, 2024 at 4:08 PM
....a closer look this is a Romcom...you see he finds the Rolex and one fake eyelash in the car seat...he finally locates her, apologizes, discovers she is a rocket scientist. It's love ever after.
Kavanagh  Avatar
October 21, 2024 at 1:30 AM
You can never tell when Lawlessness abounds lol! don’t think I’ve ever gotten a placement in any of John’s contests. Hope you have a great (day of the dead) I think Halloween sounds safer lol! Cheers David
Flood Avatar
October 20, 2024 at 3:05 PM
Well, David, you might have known she’d be bad for your ticker! Hope that Rolex was knock off.
Kavanagh  Avatar
October 20, 2024 at 3:24 PM
Of course it was Terry, I reckon the stocking cost more, still it might come in handy for my next erm withdrawal from the post office lol! Cheers David
Lane Avatar
October 20, 2024 at 2:24 PM
Well, well, well, Ranger David. Now it all makes sense... the nights no one can find you when you're needed in Milton Creek. The days, too for that matter, and we all knew exactly where to find you, at the Bor..... Boarding house down the street where you tell us you do their handy work. I'm sure you're quite handy at what you do. You must have quite a collection of ladies' lacy things by now.
Lane Avatar
October 20, 2024 at 2:50 PM
Not a problem, cowboy. I've always covered for you. ;-)
Kavanagh  Avatar
October 20, 2024 at 2:38 PM
Haha I never seen this one coming Lin, a great comment (no comment) well just one but I must be careful, yeah now I remember oh right the boarding house, that old place has gone to hell since I hung up my Tools lol! Thanks so much for giving me some wriggle room lol! Cheers David
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