Hush

The dainty foot marks like daisy treads, Loiters in her intoxication, Places puddles in the perfume trail, Coo's in enlightenment to my whistle. Touch me not for she crushes my heart, With her soft feet in black moccasins, Chatter as she whispers on the walk, In desire loves me to follow. Lewd perfection I hoot in pursuit, Swaying form winks as she turns to smiles, Bottom lines skit in free offer, Prejudiced I track the sensation.

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Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 11/10/2010 10:59:00 AM

Congratulations on your poetry X2 making it through the first round of the Poetrysoup site contest Jai. The best to you in the finals. Love, Carol

Nate D.

Date: 10/15/2010 11:41:00 AM

JAI, Congratulations! On having your poem featured this week. A poem well deserved, keep the fascinating poetry coming" Nathan D."

Skat A

Date: 10/15/2010 9:38:00 AM

GOOD MORNING! JAI, CoNGRATULATIoNS ON HAVING YOUR POEM FEATURED THIS WEEK*luv~SKAT"

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 10/13/2010 1:28:00 PM

Jai, hello & Congratulations! On your awesome & well done poem being featured this week: ) have a nice one,..p.d. "

Daver Austin

Date: 10/12/2010 8:18:00 AM

Good fantasy-path. All the smells, both good and bad. Congrats on the selection. Dave

Adeleke Adeite

Date: 10/12/2010 6:32:00 AM

Congrats on having your poem being featured on the Poetry Soup home page this week. Please keep your creative caps on, let your poetry pen keep painting your poetry pads with colors of creativity. Thanks for sharing this with us and have a wonderful week ahead. Love always, Adeleke

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 10/11/2010 5:51:00 AM

Congratulations on your wonderful poetry being featured this week what a great way to have it seen. Love, Carol

Janette Fisher

Date: 10/10/2010 12:07:00 PM

Many congrats on your feature this week. Rgds Janette

Jai Garg

Date: 4/1/2010 11:12:00 PM

continued..... I also know it is bad manners to follow someone so I did accept Stephanie's comments with respects. And the line you liked "Touch me not for she crushes my heart". We have a small plant in India which when touched folds and we would look for it in the local forest. I used to feel crushed to see it fold when touched. I am grateful to you for your comments.

Jai Garg

Date: 4/1/2010 11:10:00 PM

Thanks Amy, the poem is on a picture with just naked legs showing and on one of the legs it was written "follow me" with a small bird on the lower side of the writing. The link to the picture ( http://allpoetry.com/images/ext/Image/99/665.jpg ) I also remembered the childhood ways, when we would follow a girl if we friends liked her and she was a tease; just for fun. And this poem developed on the lines. continue in the next comment of mine.....

Amy Green

Date: 4/1/2010 8:05:00 AM

jai- She's an idiot who can't understand Jack and Jill. Ignore her, better...block her. Your poem was intriguing. Really loved the flow of words, "Touch me not for she crushes my heart".. don't know why, but this one in particular gets me.

Jai Garg

Date: 4/1/2010 2:35:00 AM

I am grateful that you have made a unique comment and respect you for the truth. After a point a writer should evolve so as to compete with himself. Here at poetrysoup there are brilliant writers and readers. My comments or considerations as to what a reader wants really would have no meaning. I just pick images and place my self in a position to write and enjoy life to its full. Sorry, Stephanie, if I inadvertently step on a readers soft nerve point.