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Hurt

Look deep in my heart – you can’t see my pain
What gives you the right to besmirch my name?
You think you’re so clever
You think you’re so smart
I’m telling you straight you’re a boring old fart!

10th January 2016

bullyinghow i feelhurtrhyme

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Dalia Shahein

March 8, 2016 at 1:21 PM

This is so true , very clever one my dear , I salute not only for the great words but also for the great subject, hugs / / :) dalia

Jan Allison

March 8, 2016 at 1:25 PM

Thanks Dalia:-) hugs Jan xx

Robert Lindley

January 17, 2016 at 12:14 PM

Let 'em whine my friend. Your poetry is top class and if its jealousy that drives'em--let em eat their vain blackened hearts out. Great and meaningful poem you've penned. A7

Jan Allison

January 17, 2016 at 1:15 PM

Thanks Robert... I just wish soup was a nicer place and the safe haven it once was:-) hugs Jan xx

CayCay Godwin

January 14, 2016 at 9:54 PM

Yes, what you said! Again - you are Limerick Lady - so darn good at it. They are a blast to read and never fail to make me laugh. Thank you for that ... CayCay

Jan Allison

January 15, 2016 at 3:48 AM

I posted it as rhyme as lines 3 and 4 don't rhyme but it does have a limerick feel to it:-) hugs Jan xx

Arthur Vaso

January 11, 2016 at 10:43 PM

Some are old farts, some are young tarts, some dont even realize thats exactly what they are. I will say supporting them is as bad as being one. Something for some here to ponder.

Jan Allison

January 12, 2016 at 1:01 PM

Wise comment my friend:-) hugs jan xx

Susan Gentry

January 11, 2016 at 9:21 PM

Bullying can be done in so many different ways... I like how you express how it feels to be bullied, have felt those same feelings - the last line kinda disappointed me - seemed almost like bullying back. I admit I have no idea what's going on, just what I felt as I read.

Jan Allison

January 12, 2016 at 1:01 PM

Thanks for dropping by Susan - the last line was meant in a humourous way but I guess can be interpreted the way you did:-) hugs jan xx

Pete Yuhas

January 11, 2016 at 5:44 PM

Way to go Jan, enjoyed.

Jan Allison

January 12, 2016 at 12:59 PM

Thanks Pete:-) hugs jan xx

Lindsay Laurie

January 10, 2016 at 11:31 PM

Well Jan, you're final line narrowed it down to a big bag of wind and eventually that's how a bully ends up - well written - Lindsay

Jan Allison

January 11, 2016 at 1:44 AM

ha ha ha love it Lindsay:-) hugs jan xx

Kp Nunez

January 10, 2016 at 11:11 PM

Glad that even when hurt, your writes still have that oomph which make me smile. I agree with Eileen. We face the world with a brave face, but it's those people who genuinely love and care for us that we turn to when we feel down. We're here for you, Jan. hugs!

Jan Allison

January 17, 2016 at 1:20 PM

Thanks Kim and as for the farting - phew I am suffering at the moment lol - I could gas the bullies for us all lol:-) hugs jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

January 10, 2016 at 6:41 PM

You tell' em, lady!! Enjoyed this one.

Jan Allison

January 17, 2016 at 1:16 PM

Thanks Andrea:-) hugs Jan xx

Tim Smith

January 10, 2016 at 6:13 PM

What did I miss Jan? I've busy the past few days with the kids and my nephew was here too.

Jan Allison

January 17, 2016 at 1:15 PM

Sorry I missed your comment Tim - just the usual chaos on the blogs - they cause so much distress to people:-( hugs jan xx

Mama Bear

January 10, 2016 at 5:52 PM

You can certainly put a bully in his place. Good to see you take up the cause. Love Edith

Jan Allison

January 10, 2016 at 6:03 PM

Thanks Mama Bear:-) hugs Jan xx

Jerry T Curtis

January 10, 2016 at 4:45 PM

That Maybe Jan, but I can change , Really I can! Greaat Job

Jan Allison

January 10, 2016 at 4:47 PM

aww Jerry you are one of the good guys always:-) hugs Jan xx

Constance La France

January 10, 2016 at 4:20 PM

Jan, your poem speaks the truth, to me bullies are just cowards seeking attention, stand up to them and they run away crying, I read a book once on the types of personalities, like the bulldozer, the yes person, the no person, the joker, the backstabber, the gossip, etc etc, it was fun to read, oh yeah there was the no opinion, there was a bunch others, I wish I still had that book !!! Anyways great write 7 ~

Jan Allison

January 10, 2016 at 4:24 PM

Thanks Broken Wings I just wish soup was a nicer place and back to the safe haven it once was:-) hugs Jan xx

Leon Datu

January 10, 2016 at 3:49 PM

Packed with righteous message! I had a hunch you were speaking of bullies ( seen through your picture also). They are not loved nor appreciated but this doesn't mean they can take it on us.

Jan Allison

January 10, 2016 at 3:56 PM

Thanks Leon:-) Hugs jan xx

Eileen Manassian

January 10, 2016 at 3:15 PM

Hurt....can change to Heal....when you are with ones who love you, dear. Sending you Cyber hugs.....

Jan Allison

January 10, 2016 at 3:17 PM

Oh so true Eileen:-) hugs Jan xx

White Sage

January 10, 2016 at 3:07 PM

well written...nice write Jan, No to bullying

Jan Allison

January 10, 2016 at 3:16 PM

it would be lovely to see soup back to the safe haven it once was:-( hugs Jan xx

Nette Onclaud

January 10, 2016 at 1:52 PM

whodunnnit?... you always amaze, dear jan...huggs

Jan Allison

January 10, 2016 at 1:56 PM

Not necessarily written about me Nette - I penned this last week - but on seeing a very nasty blog today (now removed) and hurtful comments it was a good time to post it:-) hugs jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen

January 10, 2016 at 1:09 PM

- Do not pick my friend Jan on the nose !!!! - Well said, Jan - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Jan Allison

January 10, 2016 at 1:10 PM

It's a general poem, its not really about me Anne Lise but I have been bullied on here at one time in the past it was so bad I wanted to leave but I am stronger now! :-) hugs Jan xx

Ilene Bauer

January 10, 2016 at 1:06 PM

i rarely have time to read the blogs here, jan, so i guess i'm lucky to be missing some of the nastiness that seems to be going on. too bad! i like the way you've addressed this in your poem, though...

Jan Allison

January 10, 2016 at 1:07 PM

Keep away from them Ilene you are a wise woman indeed!:-) hugs Jan xx

Keith Bickerstaffe

January 10, 2016 at 12:33 PM

Cool rhythm, almost LIMERICK-LIKE! I love your final line! You tell him, girl!! Best wishes, Keith (PS apt title.)

Jan Allison

January 10, 2016 at 12:55 PM

I do love writing limericks Keith but they are meant to be humourous and bullying is no laughing matter:-) if you have time do drop by my collaboration with Rob Bettridge called .. he's bent lol:-) that is limerick heaven lol:-) hugs jan xx

Keith Bickerstaffe

January 10, 2016 at 12:36 PM

I just saw your response to Dalia's review, and the the BIG description in your proforma! Duh!! Yes, bullying is totally bad and wrong. K.

Dalia Shahein

January 10, 2016 at 12:21 PM

Lol , brilliant and very realistic , a very thoughtful and beautiful poem my dear , enjoyed reading it, hugs / / :) dalia

Jan Allison

January 10, 2016 at 12:25 PM

Thanks Dalia - bullying is a topic I feel very strongly about :-( Hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus

January 10, 2016 at 12:19 PM

You, Jan, know how to deal with such situations, but not all are capable of doing so. Bullying can do much psychological damage to a person who is shy and weak and unable to stand up for him/herself. Hugs // paul

Jan Allison

January 10, 2016 at 12:23 PM

I was bullied at school when I was a kid Paul I have been able to talk to kids where I work about what happened to me and my being bullied poem was used on a website in the US - so sad to see it going on in soup with so called adults - I have the power of my pen to write about many things I see:-) hugs jan xx

Beautiful Scars

January 10, 2016 at 12:00 PM

ahaha!! Right on Jan!!! LOVE IT...-luloo *smiles*

Jan Allison

January 10, 2016 at 12:03 PM

I'm fed up of the bullying sniping back biting especially on the blogs Luloo - if people could see how we hide our pain maybe read between the lines of what we write maybe it would be a nicer place:-( hugs Jan xx

Hurt

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