Hunger

Hunger, like rain on a sweltering day,
in form of gentle drops, itself precipitates,
then intensifies to stay.

Relentlessly it pounds me, falling furious and fast.
Sated, I sense its slow to pitter pat,
an interminable summer storm's mere lapse.

2010
For Line Gauthier's Bite Size Poem No23 Poetry Contest

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Kash Poet

Date: 2/13/2011 6:43:00 AM

Hunger very nicely described here.Enjoyed---kash

Matthew Anish

Date: 5/30/2010 8:42:00 PM

Hunger is a problem. I am trying to lose weight and believe me it is difficult. I like the metaphor you used in the poem. You should come to New York - there are poetry readings every day of the week. I go often - but not as often as I used to. I am going to see Iron Man II tomorrow. Were you a comic book fan as a kid? Peace & Blessings Matthew Anish

Michael J. Falotico

Date: 5/30/2010 4:46:00 PM

Very well written again Andrea! good luck in contest... I'm in NY so today its HOT, but last week was up and down...stay well Love

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 5/28/2010 9:25:00 AM

Congratulations on your win in Paula's " Feel The Feelings" contest Andrea. Love, Carol

Sharon Tideswell

Date: 5/26/2010 8:59:00 AM

Hi Andrea, thanks for stopping by & reading my 'Tea for Two'. Really enjoyed your descriptive hunger rhyme, especially how it 'intensifies to stay'. Nice alliteration too. Good luck in the contest.

Daver Austin

Date: 5/26/2010 8:01:00 AM

The Sunken Cathedral got me a 7th place in the first contest I entered on the soup. Way back when I won a college contest with the poem $20.00. A twenty was not bad in those days. Catch ya later. The heat has me laying a bit low - fan just a foot away from my body. Love, Dave

Scarlett Sepulvado Anderson

Date: 5/26/2010 7:57:00 AM

LOVELY! as usual I enjoy reading your material. Been away from soup with no internet and borrowing friends to post a few poems and read my favorite poets. Hope you have a wonderful day! Love Scarlett P.S. I miss soup and all my friends TERRIBLY! Love Scarlett

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 5/26/2010 5:07:00 AM

Thankxxx Andrea.. they all seem like such great guys and wanted to give them an idea of how we wanted the poems submitted by the dedications but unfortunately that went out the window of creativity ...haha... so I wanted to "float their boat" and make them all feel good ..don't think Deb has seen it as yet to critique'..let u know when she does... luv.. Linda-Marie..

Buffy Fooksss Aka Lynette C.

Date: 5/25/2010 8:54:00 PM

OH, CONGRATSSSS, I DID SEE. & YOU DESERVED IT! bUfFy

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 5/25/2010 7:43:00 PM

Congrats Andrea on your HM in Paula's contest with this wonderful write.. enjoy your special honor my sweet friend... luv.. Linda-Marie..

Lynette Chachere

Date: 5/25/2010 4:58:00 PM

makes me think of people, or animals who go hungry for days, especially if they are homeless. i try to keep away from those thoughts, they are upsetting.&good luck to you always, Andrea! -Always&Forever Lynette

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 5/25/2010 2:30:00 PM

Of course... passion surges through my veins and its the best feeling I know... but your hunger poem relates to so many and will be on top for sure... now if u want a good laugh.. go read my entry for the EVE contest... The First Lady of Paradise.. and tell me then about passion..haha..luv.. Linda-Marie.

Daver Austin

Date: 5/25/2010 1:17:00 PM

I sensed that your poem might have other meaning, Andrea, but no matter the meaning, I am that BEAST! I like this piece better the second time. The first time was great too. Love, Dave

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 5/25/2010 9:20:00 AM

GREAT Andrea.. and the alliteration is awesome too as well as the rhyme... good luck in Paula's new contest... u already read my Passion's Magic Moment I think... thankxxx for your fun blog comment too and your input... taking my sweetie poll early... luv.. Linda-Marie..

Anish Shrivastava

Date: 5/25/2010 7:50:00 AM

very nice

James Peranteau

Date: 5/25/2010 7:15:00 AM

Andrea...I had to read some of the comments to see if I had a grip on this poem of yours...to me, it is one who is hungering. Hope I didn't read it wrong, and I'm certain you'll let me in on this one ! *smiles* james

Daver Austin

Date: 5/25/2010 6:23:00 AM

Did be da kinda hunger I feel, Andrea, an unnatural, savage urge to eat. "Itself precipitates then intensifies to stay." I like that, beast that I am. Love, Dave