Humble Pie

He prepared the pie
With greatest care
Within the pot 
My brains and hair
For hers had been
A lofty perch 
Just a peg or two
Would never do

Cremated remains
Formed the shell
Into the plate
My crushed bones fell
I could still see
But could not yell
The pie's aroma
A story to tell

My innards baked
Hour by hour
The smell of blood
And blackened flour
Words poured in
Enhanced the flavour
The humble pie 
For her to savour

Fork to mouth
My body consumed 
From the plate
My heart exhumed
The baker says 
She's eating crow
The taste is bitter
She eats the pie slow

The true recipe
He does not show
Humble pies plentiful
Stacked row on row
The victims many
Some you may know
If he invites you
I beg you not to go!


For Sheri's Plentitude of Pie Contest, 

I went with a halloween twist.
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Lamoureux Avatar
December 10, 2014 at 9:03 AM
Thanks to all, I would like to respond individually but time is short.
Meier-Hans Avatar
December 9, 2014 at 9:14 AM
Dropping back with my congratulations Richard.
Mehta Avatar
December 9, 2014 at 8:52 AM
Love the title, congrats on the win
Sietesantos Avatar
December 8, 2014 at 3:37 PM
Love the twist on this one - brilliant, clever write! Please accept my hearty congratulations on your fine win, Richard! Best wishes, Pandita.
Callus Avatar
December 8, 2014 at 2:37 PM
Back with deserved congrats, Richard. I told you it would do better than mine...and it sure did:) // paul
Jerden Avatar
December 8, 2014 at 2:24 PM
Dinner at Hannibal's... Loved the theme and the poem! Congratulations!
Allison Avatar
December 8, 2014 at 11:39 AM
dropping back with my congrats:-) Hugs jan xx
Harper Avatar
December 8, 2014 at 10:51 AM
Richard, I love the Halloween twist to your pie mix. Thanks for entering the pie contest, truly wonderful submissions sent in, congratulations on your win.
Sirak Avatar
November 9, 2014 at 8:00 AM
Well let's hope I never have to eat humble pie, although I did love that band in the 70's. Good morning Rick, have missed reading your poetry.
Lamoureux Avatar
November 9, 2014 at 11:36 AM
Well, I am off to see what you have come up with. Thanks for making my morning pleasurable. I enjoy your company.
Yvonne Avatar
October 26, 2014 at 4:37 AM
This is a very creative take on the challenge. As always a masterful write.
Lamoureux Avatar
October 26, 2014 at 8:13 AM
Thanks Maurice.
Sivey Avatar
October 25, 2014 at 8:52 AM
I love it Rick! You took this write in a great direction, I really enjoyed reading this wondrous poem this morning! Thank you for referring me to this illustrious poem! What a perfect Halloween twist you have written here! Great Work!!
Lamoureux Avatar
October 25, 2014 at 9:19 AM
Thanks Russel, I am pleased you enjoyed it.
Chakrabarty Avatar
October 22, 2014 at 8:41 AM
How humble the baker is! at least for his umbles. love....rajat
Lamoureux Avatar
October 22, 2014 at 9:06 AM
Thanks Rajat.
Callus Avatar
October 19, 2014 at 7:06 AM
Yours is a unique take on the pie theme, Richard....a poem that should stand out among the others, mine included! I think I'll miss out on pie next time round:) // paul
Lamoureux Avatar
October 19, 2014 at 7:44 AM
Ha ha, I don't blame you, also I doubt you would qualify for an invitation to eat humble pie.
Bordner Avatar
October 18, 2014 at 6:25 PM
I love this morbid brlliance, deathly and grainy in lesson of humility Richard. Havent we all felt like this at some point, not vicims, but casualities of arrogance served on Karma's warm plate. "Blackened flour" really holds the meaning for me, just stupendous Richard, a FAV! Justin
Lamoureux Avatar
October 18, 2014 at 6:47 PM
I like how you have interpreted my piece, you are on the mark my friend.
Van Breda Avatar
October 18, 2014 at 4:51 AM
Hi Richard Quite a poem of contrasting themes and ideals. I found myself between .. the .. "ew... disgusting" .. to " that is so true". Great write as always Xx~Xx
Lamoureux Avatar
October 18, 2014 at 7:05 AM
Good morning Kim. Thanks for reading and commenting.
Fraser Avatar
October 17, 2014 at 12:49 PM
Now this is certainly different. Thank goodness it's chicken for supper, and not pie. Good luck in the contest Richard. You never know 'the pies the limits for you' - James :)
Lamoureux Avatar
October 18, 2014 at 7:07 AM
Ha ha, good choice my friend.
Mcdaid Avatar
October 17, 2014 at 4:56 AM
now thats what i call a pie richard excellent pen dear friend smiling
Lamoureux Avatar
October 17, 2014 at 7:02 AM
It may not be what the Judge is looking for but I wanted to take the theme in a compleatly different direction. I'm glad I can add a smile to your day. Thanks for commenting.
Hicks Avatar
October 17, 2014 at 12:43 AM
... you didn't just watch Sweeney Todd did you? It reminds me of that except there's no barber. What I thought was creepy about this write was the fact that you described it as if you were still alive... while being eaten. Best of luck on the contest!
Lamoureux Avatar
October 17, 2014 at 7:06 AM
Good morning Timothy, no I haven't been watching Sweeny Tod *lol* if I can draw on any influence, perhaps Stephen King although I rarely write in this genre. This one kind of wrote it self. Thanks for the luck Timothy.
Dietrich Avatar
October 16, 2014 at 9:59 PM
this one is VERY creepy, Richard, which is a GOOD thing for being unique in the contest and also for Halloween theme. it reminds me of Sweeny Todd. GREAT stuff.
Lamoureux Avatar
October 17, 2014 at 7:08 AM
Interesting that I have two Sweeny Todd references, thanks for the encouraging visit.
Dietrich Avatar
October 16, 2014 at 9:57 PM
I agree with what you said on my Time Heals All. I think I will go to it and take off the word "all" now let me see this one here!!!
Lindley Avatar
October 16, 2014 at 8:44 PM
Humble pie, I have eaten lots in my time on this spinning blue marble my friend. Your write excels in that dish... A superb write and good luck in that contest. A 7..
Lamoureux Avatar
October 16, 2014 at 8:58 PM
Thanks, for the kind comment, have another peek I am now finished writing it.
Meier-Hans Avatar
October 16, 2014 at 7:49 PM
I love how you brought Halloween into this Richard but I am feeling a little queasy.
Lamoureux Avatar
October 16, 2014 at 8:59 PM
Thanks Brenda, it is now finished. It may make you a bit more queasy.
Nance Avatar
October 16, 2014 at 7:00 PM
That is good! I like the take on the theme. and the spirit of halloween you put along with it, best of luck to you in the contest sweetie.
Lamoureux Avatar
October 16, 2014 at 9:02 PM
Hi Casarah, it is now complete. Also have a look at my bio poem and tell me if I have gone to far.
Lamoureux Avatar
October 16, 2014 at 7:06 PM
I am doing a rewrite, I wanted to get it into the contest before it closed. Check back in a few hours.
Allison Avatar
October 16, 2014 at 6:10 PM
ooh deep and dark Richard not a pie I fancy eating:-) good luck with the contest:-) hugs jan xxx
Allison Avatar
October 17, 2014 at 2:29 AM
Its exceptional Richard i feel chilled reading it - could do with a nice slice of pie to warm me up now! hugs jan xxx
Lamoureux Avatar
October 16, 2014 at 8:57 PM
Check my final offering.
Allison Avatar
October 16, 2014 at 6:32 PM
You sure did - its a great take on the theme:-) hugs jan xxx
Lamoureux Avatar
October 16, 2014 at 6:30 PM
Thanks Jan, I wanted to take a different approach.
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