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Human Folly

We met online
taking time to
design profiles
 
Across the miles
we used smiles to
beguile and spurn
 
A page to turn
with well-earned tales
of learned lessons


Written 2-16-2016

For ‘Than-Bauk on Human Folly’ Contest by Marugu Mo

Form: Than-Bauk – Three Stair-Cased Verses

Tenth Place

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Sara Kendrick

Date: 3/16/2016 7:47:00 AM

Than-Bauk written in style..Congrats on your winner..Sara..I see that you did the interlocking kind with the extra rhyme..Great work..

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 3/15/2016 5:48:00 PM

Susan, Congrats on your win in "Marugu MO's contest." Wuv ~LINDA~

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/13/2016 7:15:00 PM

I like how you did yours and even bolded it. Congrats, Susan

Sandra Haight

Date: 3/11/2016 9:17:00 AM

Well written, Susan, and with a strong message. Congratulations on your win. Hugs, Sandra

Vladislav Raven

Date: 3/11/2016 8:28:00 AM

Hi Susan, enjoyed the read. Congratulations on your placement in the contest....Vlad.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 2/19/2016 9:39:00 AM

very well done. I find this form so limiting and I am afraid to post mine. haha. Maybe soon!!

Susan Gentry
Date: 2/23/2016 1:52:00 AM

Thanks Andrea!! you always have good ones if not excellent ones. :)

Timothy Hicks

Date: 2/17/2016 9:55:00 PM

This is a smooth flowing piece on a difficult form. The first stanza especially sounds very natural when said aloud. I'm curious what lessons you learned, and what happened with this Internet friend. Good luck on the contest!

Susan Gentry
Date: 2/19/2016 9:09:00 AM

Thank you for comment. I may work on the rhythm of the other two stanzas. I thought the same thing. As far as lessons, not based on my own experience, a friends. Turned out not so good although they moved on to other internet friends. :) I believe it is like always, boils down to person's character online or off whether it will work or not.

Janice Canerdy

Date: 2/17/2016 9:41:00 PM

This is good. I've been trying to get into this form--haven't yet! Janice

Susan Gentry
Date: 2/19/2016 9:03:00 AM

Thank you Janice. You will... still early. Once I started it was not as hard as I thought it would be. Good luck!

Elaine George

Date: 2/17/2016 2:36:00 PM

Excellent!!! Susan. I agree with the silent one. Elaine

Susan Gentry
Date: 2/17/2016 6:57:00 PM

Wow, thanks so much! :)

Paul Callus

Date: 2/17/2016 10:27:00 AM

Online friendship and dating are the in-thing nowadays. For some it works, but unfortunately not all that glitters is gold, and many are those who wake up to stark reality! gl in the contest. // paul

Susan Gentry
Date: 2/17/2016 6:51:00 PM

So true! Thank you Paul!