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Hopeful Sea I have a friend She seems withdrawn Our wistful chat before the dawn Reveals the truth The news is grim It isn't me she loves but him The shroud of night Reveals the day And as my feelings drift away My heart resists The dawn's concession Hopeful sea drowns night depression Still gloomy truth Like storms may shudder With sails revoked, hold fast the rudder Adventure wanes As journey's folly Dashed on rocks of melancholy 31st May 2023 Eight Word Challenge Poetry Contest Sponsored by: Emile Pinet > SECOND PLACE <

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Christina Bowring

Date: 6/24/2024 3:18:00 PM

Dear Chris, love this emotive write from you. I can see why it won a very well deserved second place in the contest. I’m awfully late with my congratulations but I’ll say it anyway - many congratulations! It is such a beautiful melancholic read. I love the imagery that you have skilfully captured here and the sense of waves of strong emotion when truth is revealed. I especially love, ‘ The shroud of night reveals the day’ and yet there is a longing for the night to remain as the appearance

Christopher Grieves
Date: 6/24/2024 10:05:00 PM

Christina x you are such a blessing.. thank you for your timely visit dear friend (and I do mean that). The competition was a challenge I enjoyed at the time. I do so appreciate your visit and kind words C :) xx

Christina Bowring
Date: 6/24/2024 3:21:00 PM

of dawn brings with it the shipwreck of hopeful dreams. There’s such a beautiful use of metaphor throughout the poem. One of your finest dear friend. Blessings and smile x :):)

Sam Kauffman

Date: 6/29/2023 11:35:00 AM

Christopher, congratulations on your win. Beautiful cadence to match the waves and tides. Blessings.

Christopher Grieves
Date: 6/24/2024 10:06:00 PM

Thank you, Sam!

David Drowley

Date: 6/29/2023 10:35:00 AM

Congratulations on your win! I could feel the "...journey's folly dashed on rocks of melancholy."

Christopher Grieves
Date: 6/29/2023 10:47:00 AM

David - thank you kindly :)

Beata Agustin

Date: 6/23/2023 2:47:00 AM

Wow! Congrats. Thanks for sharing your talent. God bless you.

Christopher Grieves
Date: 6/23/2023 3:28:00 AM

That's kind. Thank you too :))

John Lawless

Date: 6/22/2023 3:40:00 PM

Excellently done Christopher. The meter mimics the roiling sea as it crashes ashore

Christopher Grieves
Date: 6/22/2023 9:53:00 PM

That is a dimension I hadn't appreciated John. Thank you :)

Linda Alice Fowler

Date: 6/22/2023 6:02:00 AM

Christopher, this is magnificent in its presentation. Your narration is a welcome addition. Congratulations on your win! :)

Christopher Grieves
Date: 6/22/2023 6:25:00 AM

Linda - lovely to hear from you and thanks :) Magnificent is humbling as I am in such good company and very much learning. I appreciate your comments - very happy with a second place.

Emile Pinet

Date: 6/21/2023 4:55:00 PM

Congratulations Christopher! Your beautiful poem "Hopeful Sea" achieved second place in my contest. Very well done my friend, Emile.

Christopher Grieves
Date: 6/22/2023 12:06:00 AM

This is wonderful news I am beyond thrilled - my first attempt / entry. Really enjoyed the challenge. Thanks Emile :-)

Deb M

Date: 5/31/2023 6:15:00 AM

Wow Christopher….an absolutely amazing poem! Captivating until the end! Debx

Christopher Grieves
Date: 5/31/2023 6:17:00 AM

So very kind and high praise indeed. Thank you! First attempt at a comp so it was fun and a little different for me :)