Nette Onclaud Poet Haibun

Hope Awaits

Here,  I lie motionless like the tint 
of  ocean's breath. A roulette's fading stars
 glistens in tidal whisper of night,
and the incredibly sentient call
 of migrant birds wing
on ribs of leaves where tenderness 
gushes with tenderness.

clouds are scattering
in the midst of a blank pause...
lies a full mantle

Nayda Ivette Negron's Contest: Hope

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Dr. Upma A. Sharma April 30, 2014 at 7:59 AM Beautiful poem ! U really know how to play wid words ! Congrats on win !

Dr.Ram Mehta April 30, 2014 at 2:11 AM Great write on Rock My world contest. Congrats on the win. nette

Poet Destroyer A April 29, 2014 at 8:08 PM Nette xool rocking poem... Congrats in D G.'s contest.... Linda

Donna Jones April 28, 2014 at 7:44 AM Dearest nett..you'll rock her world...:-) This is like fine porcelain china in words..behind glass and dared not touched.....

Monterey Sirak April 27, 2014 at 5:40 AM Wow! Perfection! "Motionless like the tint of ocean's breath" oh the anticipation, the waiting for it to happen, and you do not disappoint.

Painted Hunter April 24, 2014 at 8:59 AM Im a fan of haibuns. Debbie G. got me hooked...haha. Yours is dreamy and fragrant.....oh, so sweet. Loved it, Nette.

Shadow Hamilton April 24, 2014 at 4:04 AM stunning Nette the prose is uplifting and the Haiku's beguile and enchant superb pen hugs

Carrie Richards April 23, 2014 at 2:25 PM ahhh......the prose captures me.....but then the haiku enchancing the prose is perfect! "in the midst of a blank pause".....what a lovely line that is !! :)

Daver Austin April 23, 2014 at 10:04 AM I love your forays into sensual areas difficult to describe, Love, daver

Tiaua M Ioane April 23, 2014 at 9:31 AM Your gift always draw me back to PS and you never fail to amaze dear Nette. You are so inspired and talented. Alofas, Tiaua.

Jake Ponce April 23, 2014 at 3:48 AM *sigh* Your writing makes me swoon. Nette talaga when we meet nga can you please do me a favor and sign my planner? HAHAHAHAHA

Reason A. Poteet April 22, 2014 at 9:29 PM Beautifuly written haibun, nette. the mantle is especially effective. I am amazed at how you can fit such imagery in three short lines. I have been reading too much minimalist haiku which lacks color sometimes almost completely. Thank you too for commenting on my Reshaping the Plea.

Leon Datu April 22, 2014 at 4:37 PM I like your vision of accepting opposites and then giving rise to the call of inspiration in the end. Brilliant poem, Nette!