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Written for Franks final contest. I hope you enjoy my entry Frank. 

I wish love could be a river Flowing through the trees Sparkling like crystal waters So I can drink her as I please But this love she's complicated She often brings me to my knees My need is like a fever That feels like a disease At times she make me strong I feel like the mighty oak Other times she wraps so tightly In her embrace I start to choke At times she feels so solid And then she turns to smoke When I think in terms of forever She laughs like it's a joke Yes, I want her to be a river Flowing through the trees Sparkling like crystal waters So I can drink her as I please But love she's complicated She often brings me to my knees My need is like a fever That feels like a disease When the years turned into shouts Love didn't love me any more What was broke just couldn't be fixed Love kept me locked outside her door She once had made me happy Then in two my heart was tore I had wished upon her forever Instead she abandoned me on the shore Then I went down to the ocean There I found love near the sand She was not mine to control Her nature I could not command Love, she's far too complicated Her I may never fully understand When I try to hold her to tightly She slips easily from my hand So I dive into her ocean Feel her cure my heart's dis-ease She becomes my endless pleasure She says "Do with me as you please" Time is no longer important I travel her ocean like a breeze Love she was always forever Now I enjoy her with such ease So if you want love to be a river Flowing through the trees Sparkling like crystal waters So you can drink her as you please Try not to hold her tightly if you wish to cure your hearts dis-ease Love she can gift you forever or leave you broken on your knees!

Copyright © | Year Posted 2016




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Date: 11/5/2016 1:23:00 PM
Saw this one on the list of the best new one hundred. As Tim said "flows like a river". A Fav!
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Date: 10/22/2016 9:02:00 PM
Yes it is a great write I enjoyed this poem
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/24/2016 9:09:00 AM
Thanks Darlene.
Date: 10/21/2016 10:48:00 PM
Very beautiful poem, felt a deep connection to the words
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/21/2016 11:12:00 PM
Thanks Sofia.
Date: 10/21/2016 11:57:00 AM
:) great write, great potw, you are awesome
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/21/2016 12:34:00 PM
You are sweet, thanks Casarah. Hugs Rick.
Date: 10/21/2016 10:31:00 AM
Back for a second read enjoyed it even more, feels like a song really, congrats on POTW didn't realize till now!
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/21/2016 10:58:00 AM
Thanks John.
Date: 10/20/2016 10:31:00 PM
Hi Richard, Congratulations on getting the week:-) Alexis
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/21/2016 10:59:00 AM
Thanks Alexis.
Date: 10/19/2016 2:16:00 AM
Awesome read! Well written!
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/19/2016 9:00:00 AM
Thanks Jane!
Date: 10/18/2016 1:41:00 PM
Beautiful poem, congratulations on your poem being as poem of the week. Thank you and God bless you.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/18/2016 6:30:00 PM
Thanks Terry.
Date: 10/18/2016 9:23:00 AM
Well penned poet. Congratulations on your work being featured pick of the week!
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/18/2016 6:31:00 PM
Thanks Anna-Marie. ;0)
Date: 10/18/2016 1:13:00 AM
Richard beautifully penned and CONGRATULATIONS on your potw
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/18/2016 8:05:00 AM
Thanks Constance. Hugs Rick.
Date: 10/17/2016 2:16:00 PM
Deep write !! passionate ..congrats !
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/18/2016 8:06:00 AM
Much appreciated Nilima.
Date: 10/17/2016 5:31:00 AM
Back to say Congratulations Richard on POTW honors. Well deserved!
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/17/2016 8:01:00 AM
Thanks Daniel.
Date: 10/16/2016 5:49:00 PM
Very nice!
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/16/2016 6:08:00 PM
Thanks Heidi.
Date: 10/16/2016 1:37:00 PM
Congrats on POTW...well deserved
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/16/2016 2:35:00 PM
Thanks Tim.
Date: 10/16/2016 9:13:00 AM
Awesome; love can be a gift or a curse. I held on too tightly and through my fingertips she slipped.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/16/2016 9:32:00 AM
Thanks Phil.
Date: 10/16/2016 9:06:00 AM
Love is so simple. Our problem is we make it so difficult. Beautifully written, Richard. Sounds like you may have had a little experience with this one:) Congratulations on POTW honors. Much deserved by a great person and poet.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/16/2016 9:33:00 AM
Ha ha, yes I have. Fortunately I found my "Happy Ending".
Date: 10/12/2016 3:40:00 AM
THIS IS SUPERB!!!! One of your absolute best, Richard. I love the way it "flows" through my mind. :) That's why I drink in your words....Hugs
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/12/2016 8:07:00 AM
I'm pleased with this one. The inspiration was "The Rose" Frank wanted something on par with those verses. That of course is a tall order. Hugs Rick.
Date: 10/11/2016 11:48:00 AM
Really lovely. (Two nitpicks: 5th stanza, 5 line, 'to' -> 'too'; 2nd stanza, last line, "She turns into a joke" fits the meter better.)
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/11/2016 2:22:00 PM
Thanks Jerome.
Date: 10/10/2016 9:02:00 PM
Wow Richard, so much wisdom about love and life.....beautiful! #7 Hugs
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/10/2016 11:02:00 PM
What a nice surprise, how are you Cecilia?
Date: 10/10/2016 6:22:00 PM
Love this Richard! The rhyme flows just like a song, beautiful:)
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/10/2016 6:46:00 PM
Thanks Chris.
Date: 10/9/2016 1:52:00 PM
A thought provoking, masterfully done poem about love with clear message dear, Richard! Certainly a seven!
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/10/2016 9:25:00 AM
Thanks my friend.
Date: 10/9/2016 12:01:00 PM
I like this poem! Great metaphorical value with a good flow and true message !
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/10/2016 9:26:00 AM
Thanks Kyle.
Date: 10/9/2016 9:02:00 AM
You are so right. If you hold your love too tightly it is hard to keep it. Love must flow with the senses and give pleasure A huge 7 from me Happy Thanksgiving. Love Mom
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/9/2016 9:08:00 AM
Good morning mom, happy thanksgiving to you as well. Love Rick. Thanks for the ;0).
Date: 10/9/2016 8:01:00 AM
A very beautiful write, Richard:) a 7:)
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/9/2016 9:09:00 AM
Thanks Jo.
Date: 10/9/2016 4:34:00 AM
dynamic yet soft write from your spilled ink, rich... can we have an audio version of this one?.. huggs
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 10/9/2016 9:10:00 AM
I would if I could figure out how to do it. Hugs back to you.
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