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Written for Franks final contest. I hope you enjoy my entry Frank. 

Holding Water

I wish love could be a river
Flowing through the trees
Sparkling like crystal waters 
So I can drink her as I please
But this love she's complicated
She often brings me to my knees
My need is like a fever
That feels like a disease
 
At times she make me strong
I feel like the mighty oak
Other times she wraps so tightly
In her embrace I start to choke
At times she feels so solid
And then she turns to smoke
When I think in terms of forever
She laughs like it's a joke

Yes, I want her to be a river
Flowing through the trees
Sparkling like crystal waters
So I can drink her as I please
But love she's complicated
She often brings me to my knees
My need is like a fever
That feels like a disease

When the years turned into shouts
Love didn't love me any more
What was broke just couldn't be fixed
Love kept me locked outside her door
She once had made me happy
Then in two my heart was tore
I had wished upon her forever
Instead she abandoned me on the shore

Then I went down to the ocean
There I found love near the sand
She was not mine to control
Her nature I could not command
Love, she's far too complicated
Her I may never fully understand
When I try to hold her to tightly
She slips easily from my hand

So I dive into her ocean
Feel her cure my heart's dis-ease
She becomes my endless pleasure
She says "Do with me as you please"
Time is no longer important
I travel her ocean like a breeze
Love she was always forever
Now I enjoy her with such ease

So if you want love to be a river
Flowing through the trees
Sparkling like crystal waters
So you can drink her as you please
Try not to hold her tightly
if you wish to cure your hearts dis-ease
Love she can gift you forever
or leave you broken on your knees!
Copyright © | Year Posted 2016

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Yvonne Avatar
November 5, 2016 at 1:23 PM
Saw this one on the list of the best new one hundred. As Tim said "flows like a river". A Fav!
De Beaulieu Avatar
October 22, 2016 at 9:02 PM
Yes it is a great write I enjoyed this poem
Lamoureux Avatar
October 24, 2016 at 9:09 AM
Thanks Darlene.
Ra Avatar
October 21, 2016 at 10:48 PM
Very beautiful poem, felt a deep connection to the words
Lamoureux Avatar
October 21, 2016 at 11:12 PM
Thanks Sofia.
Nance Avatar
October 21, 2016 at 11:57 AM
:) great write, great potw, you are awesome
Lamoureux Avatar
October 21, 2016 at 12:34 PM
You are sweet, thanks Casarah. Hugs Rick.
Hamilton Avatar
October 21, 2016 at 10:31 AM
Back for a second read enjoyed it even more, feels like a song really, congrats on POTW didn't realize till now!
Lamoureux Avatar
October 21, 2016 at 10:58 AM
Thanks John.
Y. Avatar
October 20, 2016 at 10:31 PM
Hi Richard, Congratulations on getting the week:-) Alexis
Lamoureux Avatar
October 21, 2016 at 10:59 AM
Thanks Alexis.
Jane Avatar
October 19, 2016 at 2:16 AM
Awesome read! Well written!
Lamoureux Avatar
October 19, 2016 at 9:00 AM
Thanks Jane!
Johnson Avatar
October 18, 2016 at 1:41 PM
Beautiful poem, congratulations on your poem being as poem of the week. Thank you and God bless you.
Lamoureux Avatar
October 18, 2016 at 6:30 PM
Thanks Terry.
Docherty Avatar
October 18, 2016 at 9:23 AM
Well penned poet. Congratulations on your work being featured pick of the week!
Lamoureux Avatar
October 18, 2016 at 6:31 PM
Thanks Anna-Marie. ;0)
La France Avatar
October 18, 2016 at 1:13 AM
Richard beautifully penned and CONGRATULATIONS on your potw
Lamoureux Avatar
October 18, 2016 at 8:05 AM
Thanks Constance. Hugs Rick.
Deb Avatar
October 17, 2016 at 2:16 PM
Deep write !! passionate ..congrats !
Lamoureux Avatar
October 18, 2016 at 8:06 AM
Much appreciated Nilima.
Turner Avatar
October 17, 2016 at 5:31 AM
Back to say Congratulations Richard on POTW honors. Well deserved!
Lamoureux Avatar
October 17, 2016 at 8:01 AM
Thanks Daniel.
Sands Avatar
October 16, 2016 at 5:49 PM
Very nice!
Lamoureux Avatar
October 16, 2016 at 6:08 PM
Thanks Heidi.
Smith Avatar
October 16, 2016 at 1:37 PM
Congrats on POTW...well deserved
Lamoureux Avatar
October 16, 2016 at 2:35 PM
Thanks Tim.
Capitano Avatar
October 16, 2016 at 9:13 AM
Awesome; love can be a gift or a curse. I held on too tightly and through my fingertips she slipped.
Lamoureux Avatar
October 16, 2016 at 9:32 AM
Thanks Phil.
Turner Avatar
October 16, 2016 at 9:06 AM
Love is so simple. Our problem is we make it so difficult. Beautifully written, Richard. Sounds like you may have had a little experience with this one:) Congratulations on POTW honors. Much deserved by a great person and poet.
Lamoureux Avatar
October 16, 2016 at 9:33 AM
Ha ha, yes I have. Fortunately I found my "Happy Ending".
Manassian Avatar
October 12, 2016 at 3:40 AM
THIS IS SUPERB!!!! One of your absolute best, Richard. I love the way it "flows" through my mind. :) That's why I drink in your words....Hugs
Lamoureux Avatar
October 12, 2016 at 8:07 AM
I'm pleased with this one. The inspiration was "The Rose" Frank wanted something on par with those verses. That of course is a tall order. Hugs Rick.
Malenfant Avatar
October 11, 2016 at 11:48 AM
Really lovely. (Two nitpicks: 5th stanza, 5 line, 'to' -> 'too'; 2nd stanza, last line, "She turns into a joke" fits the meter better.)
Lamoureux Avatar
October 11, 2016 at 2:22 PM
Thanks Jerome.
Macfarlane Avatar
October 10, 2016 at 9:02 PM
Wow Richard, so much wisdom about love and life.....beautiful! #7 Hugs
Lamoureux Avatar
October 10, 2016 at 11:02 PM
What a nice surprise, how are you Cecilia?
Hagy Avatar
October 10, 2016 at 6:22 PM
Love this Richard! The rhyme flows just like a song, beautiful:)
Lamoureux Avatar
October 10, 2016 at 6:46 PM
Thanks Chris.
Trifiatis Avatar
October 9, 2016 at 1:52 PM
A thought provoking, masterfully done poem about love with clear message dear, Richard! Certainly a seven!
Lamoureux Avatar
October 10, 2016 at 9:25 AM
Thanks my friend.
Kriticos Avatar
October 9, 2016 at 12:01 PM
I like this poem! Great metaphorical value with a good flow and true message !
Lamoureux Avatar
October 10, 2016 at 9:26 AM
Thanks Kyle.
Bear Avatar
October 9, 2016 at 9:02 AM
You are so right. If you hold your love too tightly it is hard to keep it. Love must flow with the senses and give pleasure A huge 7 from me Happy Thanksgiving. Love Mom
Lamoureux Avatar
October 9, 2016 at 9:08 AM
Good morning mom, happy thanksgiving to you as well. Love Rick. Thanks for the ;0).
Daniel Avatar
October 9, 2016 at 8:01 AM
A very beautiful write, Richard:) a 7:)
Lamoureux Avatar
October 9, 2016 at 9:09 AM
Thanks Jo.
Onclaud Avatar
October 9, 2016 at 4:34 AM
dynamic yet soft write from your spilled ink, rich... can we have an audio version of this one?.. huggs
Lamoureux Avatar
October 9, 2016 at 9:10 AM
I would if I could figure out how to do it. Hugs back to you.
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