Hold Back the Dawn

One early morning in May
Just before the break of day,
I spied a haggard looking Sun
Appearing to be on the run,
Bedraggled but feigning zest
Oh, was seen rising from the west!

Sneaking behind some clouds,
Like a thief hiding in shrouds,
Scurrying towards home eastwise, 
From where each morn he must rise.

The sun it seems got lost,
Carousing out and about
after all night on a hot date
with a pretty twinkling starlet,
Dancing away to the rhythm and rhyme,
Alas, the sun failed to rise on time!

Scared of what Mother Nature would say
Why didn't he in the east stay,
And terrified of Father Time
the sun could not smile or shine.

The day failed to dawn that way,
And the world got to sleep another day!


Story Poem contest by Carol Eastman

Copyright © | Year Posted 2015



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Date: 7/16/2015 6:57:00 PM
Congrats on your number one placement!
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Abdul Malik
Date: 7/17/2015 10:27:00 AM
Thanks Richard.
Date: 7/15/2015 3:58:00 PM
very CREATIVE!!!!Abdul. Great personification. Elaine C. George
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Abdul Malik
Date: 7/17/2015 10:28:00 AM
Glad you liked it. Thanks for your comments.
Date: 7/15/2015 12:31:00 AM
Love this! So well done congrats !
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Date: 7/14/2015 8:17:00 PM
Abdul, congratulations on a your big win it was well deserved:-)Alexis
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Date: 7/14/2015 2:02:00 AM
Congrats in Carol's story poem win. always ~~ LINDA ~~
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Date: 7/14/2015 12:14:00 AM
nice win..SK
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Date: 7/13/2015 2:15:00 PM
Congrats Abdul on your fine win with this wonderful write, I enjoyed the read. ~Caryl
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Abdul Malik
Date: 7/17/2015 10:32:00 AM
Thanks Caryl, appreciate much.
Date: 7/13/2015 1:30:00 PM
Dropping back with my congrats Abdul:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 7/13/2015 11:05:00 AM
Congratulations on a superb first place win! I enjoyed this clever piece with awesome imagery! Well done and a 7! Pandita.
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Abdul Malik
Date: 7/13/2015 1:16:00 PM
Thanks Pandita. Appreciate much.
Date: 7/11/2015 10:23:00 AM
On days the sun fails to shine, now I know why! Enjoyed your poem and good luck in the contest. Darlene
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Abdul Malik
Date: 7/12/2015 5:43:00 PM
Thanks Darlene.
Date: 7/10/2015 3:26:00 PM
wonderful imagery good luck in the contst:-) hugs Jan xx
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