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Hitting the Mark -Hc

falcon circling high one two three ready aim fire falling from the sky three two one pigeons scattering commotion the marked one struck in a feathered explosion 02/25/19 Charliekucoup Poetry Contest By Charles Messina

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Allen Beilschmidt Sr.

Date: 3/27/2019 12:36:00 PM

Poor poor prey. Great work Maureen

Eve Roper

Date: 3/7/2019 1:39:00 PM

Congratulations on a great Haiku & Couplet, Maureen. great imagery :) ... Hugs Eve ~`*

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 3/7/2019 4:37:00 AM

- Congratulations on your win :) -

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 3/7/2019 7:30:00 AM

Thank you :) xomo

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/6/2019 3:11:00 PM

congrats, I do think your poem was so inventive.

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 3/7/2019 7:29:00 AM

Thank you Andrea, xomo :)

Charles Messina

Date: 3/6/2019 1:57:00 PM

This one made me think of that commercial of the pigeons sitting on the telephone wire and the one says... something like "fire down below" lol. Well done, Mo. Love this.. Congratulations on your win. xocm

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 3/7/2019 7:28:00 AM

Thank you Charlie! :) xomo!

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 2/28/2019 10:28:00 PM

Awesome...your imagery is explosive

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 3/7/2019 7:28:00 AM

Thank you Kim! :) xomo

Gershon Wolf

Date: 2/27/2019 4:50:00 PM

The length that municipalities will go to these days to repair the roads. There ought to be a law... G'day! :) gw

Gershon Wolf
Date: 3/4/2019 10:38:00 PM

Ah, I can see why my comment was so mysterious... It's because I, the man of mystery... OK, Here's why: In Chicago there used to be two seasons, winter and construction; now there's only construction. 365 days/yr., city crews go around repairing roads...

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 2/27/2019 7:29:00 PM

I don't understand...

Arthur Vaso

Date: 2/27/2019 1:49:00 AM

I confess , I had to go to University for 4 years to get this, finally I did, thank god I can time travel!!!! Loved this!

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 2/27/2019 6:40:00 AM

The fastest animal alive, ornithology 101 ;)

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 2/26/2019 6:11:00 AM

Beautifully done. I am thinking "wow" as I read these; there are so many good ones. I think this will go straight to the winner's circle.

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 2/26/2019 7:16:00 AM

Thank you Caren! :))) xomo!

Michelle Faulkner

Date: 2/25/2019 11:20:00 PM

This hits the mark - I see you're aiming for a strike!

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 2/26/2019 7:16:00 AM

Ha! With any luck ;) Thank you! xomo

Timothy Mcguire

Date: 2/25/2019 7:59:00 PM

Nice! I can identify with this one. Hawks are always looking for my chickens.

Timothy Mcguire
Date: 2/26/2019 5:42:00 PM

Hawks have to eat too. It is violent but a quick death for the chicken, explosive. The trouble is the hawk keeps coming back for a free chicken dinner. Also, it take a few months for a chick to start laying just to lose to a hawk.

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 2/26/2019 7:15:00 AM

...I should say I do have pet doves~ I love all birds

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 2/26/2019 7:14:00 AM

I'm waiting for chickens to be legal here in town, gotta say I wouldn't feel too bad losing one if I got to see it happen ;) Thank you Timothy! xomo