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His Quandary -Edited

She stands with poise nearby the old quaint quay. Her hair, like platinum, glows in the sun. He quivers, seeing her. It is his plea that she’ll forgive him for the wrong he’s done. He wishes there were penance he could do to make her know the depth of his regret - to show her that forever he’d be true were she to take him back! When they first met, he knew she was the only one for him. A quandary he's in now. Can he win her trust again, for things are looking grim. Oh, God, let her forgive him of his sin! She walks toward him. Will he be facing doom? Inhaling – he takes in her sweet perfume. Feb. 17, 2021 for Michelle Faulkner's Mind Your P's And Q's Poetry Contest (I edited and re-entered this. All this time I did not know the pronunciation of quay until a kind poet pointed out my mistake with the rhyme! I had always thought it was a long A sound pronounced like kway! But the place I checked made it sound like "key")

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Date: 3/3/2021 12:31:00 PM
Merriam-Webster online lists three pronunciations for quay: kee, kay, and kway. Rhymezone includes both endings in its rhyme options. I think the more old-school, British Isles pronunciation is kee. Anyway, your sonnet is lovely as always, and tells a beguiling tale of regret and forgiveness with an understated romantic ending ~ John
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Date: 2/23/2021 12:00:00 PM
beautiful sonnet, my friend - yes, some words sound different to how they look, for sure
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Date: 2/21/2021 6:59:00 PM
The ending is another write Andrea. I was expecting an emotional outlet, from her. Your words seemed so real and deliberate. Nice piece...
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Date: 2/21/2021 12:03:00 PM
You blended the words well Andrea, Well penned..
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Date: 2/20/2021 8:46:00 AM
And you have left us hanging my dear friend, did the perfume intoxicate them both and then they made wild love, did she forgive him, or did she sent him packing? Lovely story but I'd love to know what happened. Blessings and hugs,
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Date: 2/20/2021 3:15:00 PM
I don't know what happened either. It was sonnet form and I ran out of lines. I like to think she forgave him. Otherwise, why did she show up? (then again, maybe she wanted to slap his face!) Let's hope not.
Date: 2/18/2021 11:40:00 PM
Reading it i was wondering if it was a true story, did she forgive him, what was his sin? Its a fabulous poem, sensational and lovely to read. Kudos!!! ............-------_____....... Plz do read and comment my newest poem too.
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Date: 2/18/2021 7:48:00 PM
Andrea, Days borrowed now in search of a sweet contraband. All those yesterdays spent, like gold through our hand. -Richard
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Date: 2/18/2021 12:32:00 PM
A nice beginning for a short story. Good job. Good luck in the contest. God Bless, JB
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Date: 2/18/2021 5:06:00 AM
There is some rekindling of relationship here--well done, Andrea. All the best for a TOP win.
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Date: 2/18/2021 12:24:00 AM
Not read a sonnet from you for a while, Andrea. Queen of the genre If i remember correctly, and still you are, reading this beauty.
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Date: 2/17/2021 11:33:00 PM
I loved the way you started the sonnet. There is something hidden in the last line... Anyways, I wish she forgives his sins and he would be true to her henceforth... well crafted Andrea. Hugs ~ Ani
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Date: 2/17/2021 10:54:00 PM
We don't know if she will forgive him, but I have a feeling she will. As for rhyming, quay can rhyme with tea and but also with away. Go figure. Which is why I hate rhyme. ~~
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Date: 2/17/2021 6:46:00 PM
I think next time he'll wash his p's and q's before he does anything to hurt his relationship. Love the write good luck in the contest. Hugs Eve
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Date: 2/17/2021 6:34:00 PM
It is so difficult to forgive a betrayal, his remorse is clearly seen in this remarkable write Andrea. I want her to forgive him.
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Date: 2/17/2021 3:04:00 PM
Heya Andrea, The tempting smell of perfume, for his sins, is a perfect ending, for me anyway, intriguing writing, paints a fantastic picture, best of luck in the contest, cheers David
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Date: 2/17/2021 1:57:00 PM
Your sonnet leaves us in suspense, Andrea! SOUPMAIL
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