His Eyes

How blonde he was! How smooth was his veneer! My poor heart raced whenever he was near. He was a wizard! His blue crystal eyes, if fixed on mine, would surely hypnotize! Did I turn crimson when he gazed on me those first few times before obscurity became my lot? How many months I pined for something sweet I wished with him to find! He’d wanted me! That was no masquerade. Yet later, no attention was I paid. He grew aloof and turned his face away, while not opaque, my heart before him lay. HIS heart was ebony and hard as coal. I had to suture mine because my soul felt close to death. Years passed. . . I chanced to see him, but his eyes, cold glass, sliced right through me. Dedicated to Chris F.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2017

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Raven Avatar
June 5, 2017 at 7:10 PM
H Andrea, you are a rhyming poet and this is a wonderful Quatrain you lay before us. You come alive when you start to rhyme. Don't get me wrong, i do like your work in unrhyming form but this is you. Excellent poetry as always Andrea. This would have had the highest rating and it is a definite fave. Hugs....Mike. XX
White Avatar
June 5, 2017 at 4:54 AM
Since you asked, Andrea... I prefer the Free Verse. I do love the rhyme, but the Free Verse has so much more depth of emotion in it.
May Avatar
June 4, 2017 at 7:29 AM
A story of unrequited love or just a stone cold heart..I prefer this version Andrea
Canerdy Avatar
June 3, 2017 at 9:34 PM
A moving story of being hurt by one with a really cold heart, Andrea! Janice
Parker Avatar
June 3, 2017 at 12:51 PM
I like this version better, it's much tighter, the free verse one had too many lines of explanation, this version I could feel
Dietrich Avatar
June 3, 2017 at 6:41 PM
Good to know .Thanks for seeing both!! It just reinforces for me that I am a rhyming poet!
Daniel Avatar
June 3, 2017 at 6:30 AM
I like this version better, Andrea, but maybe that's because I love rhymes better:) beautifully expressed coldness:)
Dietrich Avatar
June 3, 2017 at 6:41 PM
Thanks, Jo. Wish it could have been a rhymed entry!
Callus Avatar
June 2, 2017 at 5:31 PM
Charmed by blonde hair and blue eyes!! Pity you had no way of seeing his heart, Andrea! The last line slices like a sharp razor...surely, no turning crimson this time! ~ Regards // paul
Downing  Avatar
June 2, 2017 at 12:53 PM
It's perfect, I enjoyed it very much :)
Lawless Avatar
June 2, 2017 at 8:21 AM
Andrea, perhaps his heart hardened over time as he realized the beauty he had lost in dissing you.....good luck in the contest.
Marcum Wong Avatar
June 2, 2017 at 7:46 AM
This entry should do really well Andrea, it is dark and beautiful just what she asked for! : )
Dietrich Avatar
June 2, 2017 at 9:38 AM
Connie, it's not free verse. I did not realize she wanted free verse. I think I should delete this and save it for another time.
Turner Avatar
June 1, 2017 at 11:36 PM
You women, always thinking about "bad boys". Well written, Andrea. Good luck!
Vaso Avatar
June 1, 2017 at 11:27 PM
Being blonde, he didn't see true beauty! LOL kidding, I think we have all been there, and I really loved the line "I had to suture mine because my soul" Hugs!
Rodrigues Avatar
June 1, 2017 at 10:24 PM
Excellent!
Roper Avatar
June 1, 2017 at 9:34 PM
Nicely done I love the way you made the form, Andrea, good luck in the contest
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