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His Amber Pendant

Dawn's light roused me from morning mist Upon my breast, his amber pendant lies Gently awakened when warmly kissed as sunlight dapples across my sleepy eyes Upon my breast, an amber pendant lies I stand at my window in a whisp of a gown as sunlight dapples across my sleepy eyes I weep in fear that my heart may drown I stand at my window in a whisp of a gown feeling the sun's comfort in a loving embrace I weep in fear that my heart may drown Tears brush my cheeks as he touched my face Feeling the sun's comfort in a loving embrace Gently awakened when warmly kissed Tears brush my cheeks as he touched my face Dawn's light roused me from morning mist ^__________May 23rd, 2017___________^ Contest: Form P, sponsored by Broken Wings

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Eve Roper

Date: 6/6/2017 7:18:00 PM

Back to congratulate you on your awesome win ~*

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 6/6/2017 6:36:00 PM

Congratulations on your First Place Win Lin! I was so happy to see this a top winner. : )

Lin Lane
Date: 6/6/2017 7:02:00 PM

Thanks, Connie. I'm always glad to read your kind comments.

Constance La France

Date: 6/5/2017 3:50:00 PM

Lin congratulations on your win in my contest with this beautiful write

Lin Lane
Date: 6/6/2017 7:23:00 AM

Thank you for the honor and for hosting, Constance.

Carole Duet

Date: 6/3/2017 12:40:00 PM

Hi Lin! I'm just learning the various poetry forms and this one is so unique and you've made it beautiful as well. Congrats on your win! Carole

Lin Lane
Date: 6/6/2017 7:21:00 AM

Hi, Carole, and thank you. It's a great form for a challenge.

Alexis Y.

Date: 6/3/2017 9:43:00 AM

Hi Lin, You did a good job with the Pantoum form. Congratulations on your 1st place win. It was well deserved:-) Alexis

Lin Lane
Date: 6/3/2017 11:10:00 AM

Thank you, Alexis.

Dean Wood

Date: 6/2/2017 11:54:00 PM

Wow Lin! This is beautiful. I am gaining a real appreciation for this pantoum form. A well deserved win! - Dean

Lin Lane
Date: 6/3/2017 5:18:00 AM

Its a bit of a challenge but gratifying when it all comes together. Thanks so much, Dean.

Dale Gregory Cozart

Date: 6/2/2017 1:06:00 PM

beautiful. congrats on your win!

Lin Lane
Date: 6/3/2017 5:13:00 AM

Thank you kindly, Dale.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/27/2017 7:59:00 PM

wow, Lin, amazingly beautiful. I want to give you a seven and again it's gone. I went to other poets today and the rating box was still there!!! Anyway, you were REALLY inspired by that theme, lady.

Lin Lane
Date: 6/3/2017 5:13:00 AM

Thanks so much, Andrea. I'm out of town and not up on PS doings, so I need to play catch up.

Joanna Daniel

Date: 5/25/2017 9:52:00 AM

A 7:) There is sadness in this beautiful pantoum, Lin:( somehow, all poems I'm reading of late have a sad tone!!!

Lin Lane
Date: 5/25/2017 10:01:00 AM

I've noticed that, Jo. A sign of our times these days, but all will get better, eventually. If you'd like a fun write, read Imagine the Sight of That. Something I wrote when I was 10. I think it'll make you smile. Thank you for commenting on this one.

Paul Callus

Date: 5/24/2017 12:17:00 PM

This form is not an easy one, Lin, but that did not deter you from having a good go at it, and the final result is all in your favour! The content is beautiful, warm and tender. ~ Best regards // paul

Lin Lane
Date: 5/25/2017 9:59:00 AM

I'm happy to know you're pleased with this pantoum, Paul. Thank you very much for all of your encouraging remarks.

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 5/24/2017 5:04:00 AM

I really enjoy this form. A very moving piece. An excellent Pantoum Lin. Love your poetry. Lots Of Love Always, armand.

Lin Lane
Date: 5/24/2017 8:27:00 AM

Merci beaucoup, Armand. ;-)

Jan Allison

Date: 5/23/2017 5:18:00 PM

I love the pantoum form Lin and you have written a gem - the amber pendant is very poignant in my life as my mother has some baltic amber from her visits to Lithuania with my late father and it holds a lot of memories for her:- hugs jan xx

Lin Lane
Date: 5/23/2017 5:26:00 PM

Baltic amber is so lovely. I have several pieces of it that I've crafted into jewelry, and one is a pendant. This poem started out with me using tanzanite, but remembered my amber pendant. Thanks a lot for your comments, Jan.

Daniel Turner

Date: 5/23/2017 4:44:00 PM

Wonderful poetry! I love the form, too. Lin. You write superbly:)

Lin Lane
Date: 5/23/2017 5:24:00 PM

I thank you most sincerely, Danny, and savor your comments.

Eve Roper

Date: 5/23/2017 4:13:00 PM

Wow, impressive !!! One of my favorite forms... an art you've mastered.... I don't have to say good luck....:)

Lin Lane
Date: 5/23/2017 4:46:00 PM

Thank you so much, dear Eve. I haven't written many of these and though it DOES get a little confusing I enjoy writing them. You are so kind in your remarks.

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 5/23/2017 12:14:00 PM

Phantoms are a challenge Lin, and you have written a beauty! I hope Constance places this really high Lin. 7 ; )

Lin Lane
Date: 5/23/2017 12:42:00 PM

Being in love with a phantom or with a fleshly person is the most unforgettable emotion in our lives. That's what makes it so painful when it's lost...we still can't forget. Thank you so much for always reading me, Connie.