Lin Lane Poet Pantoum

His Amber Pendant

Dawn's light roused me from morning mist
Upon my breast, his amber pendant lies
Gently awakened when warmly kissed
as sunlight dapples across my sleepy eyes

Upon my breast, an amber pendant lies
I stand at my window in a whisp of a gown
as sunlight dapples across my sleepy eyes
I weep in fear that my heart may drown

I stand at my window in a whisp of a gown
feeling the sun's comfort in a loving embrace
I weep in fear that my heart may drown
Tears brush my cheeks as he touched my face

Feeling the sun's comfort in a loving embrace
Gently awakened when warmly kissed
Tears brush my cheeks as he touched my face
Dawn's light roused me from morning mist


^__________May 23rd, 2017___________^
Contest: Form P, sponsored by Broken Wings

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Eve Roper June 6, 2017 at 7:18 PM Back to congratulate you on your awesome win ~*

Connie Marcum Wong June 6, 2017 at 6:36 PM Congratulations on your First Place Win Lin! I was so happy to see this a top winner. : ) Lin Lane June 6, 2017 at 7:02 PM Thanks, Connie. I'm always glad to read your kind comments.

Constance La France June 5, 2017 at 3:50 PM Lin congratulations on your win in my contest with this beautiful write Lin Lane June 6, 2017 at 7:23 AM Thank you for the honor and for hosting, Constance.

Carole Duet June 3, 2017 at 12:40 PM Hi Lin! I'm just learning the various poetry forms and this one is so unique and you've made it beautiful as well. Congrats on your win! Carole Lin Lane June 6, 2017 at 7:21 AM Hi, Carole, and thank you. It's a great form for a challenge.

Alexis Y. June 3, 2017 at 9:43 AM Hi Lin, You did a good job with the Pantoum form. Congratulations on your 1st place win. It was well deserved:-) Alexis Lin Lane June 3, 2017 at 11:10 AM Thank you, Alexis.

Dean Wood June 2, 2017 at 11:54 PM Wow Lin! This is beautiful. I am gaining a real appreciation for this pantoum form. A well deserved win! - Dean Lin Lane June 3, 2017 at 5:18 AM Its a bit of a challenge but gratifying when it all comes together. Thanks so much, Dean.

Dale Gregory Cozart June 2, 2017 at 1:06 PM beautiful. congrats on your win! Lin Lane June 3, 2017 at 5:13 AM Thank you kindly, Dale.

Andrea Dietrich May 27, 2017 at 7:59 PM wow, Lin, amazingly beautiful. I want to give you a seven and again it's gone. I went to other poets today and the rating box was still there!!! Anyway, you were REALLY inspired by that theme, lady. Lin Lane June 3, 2017 at 5:13 AM Thanks so much, Andrea. I'm out of town and not up on PS doings, so I need to play catch up.

Joanna Daniel May 25, 2017 at 9:52 AM A 7:) There is sadness in this beautiful pantoum, Lin:( somehow, all poems I'm reading of late have a sad tone!!! Lin Lane May 25, 2017 at 10:01 AM I've noticed that, Jo. A sign of our times these days, but all will get better, eventually. If you'd like a fun write, read Imagine the Sight of That. Something I wrote when I was 10. I think it'll make you smile. Thank you for commenting on this one.

Paul Callus May 24, 2017 at 12:17 PM This form is not an easy one, Lin, but that did not deter you from having a good go at it, and the final result is all in your favour! The content is beautiful, warm and tender. ~ Best regards // paul Lin Lane May 25, 2017 at 9:59 AM I'm happy to know you're pleased with this pantoum, Paul. Thank you very much for all of your encouraging remarks.

Maurice Yvonne May 24, 2017 at 5:04 AM I really enjoy this form. A very moving piece. An excellent Pantoum Lin. Love your poetry. Lots Of Love Always, armand. Lin Lane May 24, 2017 at 8:27 AM Merci beaucoup, Armand. ;-)

Jan Allison May 23, 2017 at 5:18 PM I love the pantoum form Lin and you have written a gem - the amber pendant is very poignant in my life as my mother has some baltic amber from her visits to Lithuania with my late father and it holds a lot of memories for her:- hugs jan xx Lin Lane May 23, 2017 at 5:26 PM Baltic amber is so lovely. I have several pieces of it that I've crafted into jewelry, and one is a pendant. This poem started out with me using tanzanite, but remembered my amber pendant. Thanks a lot for your comments, Jan.

Daniel Turner May 23, 2017 at 4:44 PM Wonderful poetry! I love the form, too. Lin. You write superbly:) Lin Lane May 23, 2017 at 5:24 PM I thank you most sincerely, Danny, and savor your comments.

Eve Roper May 23, 2017 at 4:13 PM Wow, impressive !!! One of my favorite forms... an art you've mastered.... I don't have to say good luck....:) Lin Lane May 23, 2017 at 4:46 PM Thank you so much, dear Eve. I haven't written many of these and though it DOES get a little confusing I enjoy writing them. You are so kind in your remarks.

Connie Marcum Wong May 23, 2017 at 12:14 PM Phantoms are a challenge Lin, and you have written a beauty! I hope Constance places this really high Lin. 7 ; ) Lin Lane May 23, 2017 at 12:42 PM Being in love with a phantom or with a fleshly person is the most unforgettable emotion in our lives. That's what makes it so painful when it's lost...we still can't forget. Thank you so much for always reading me, Connie.

Darren White May 23, 2017 at 11:05 AM Owwww, Pantoum is one of my favourite forms to write. I wish you good luck in the contest. This pendant is a regular gem. Lin Lane May 23, 2017 at 11:54 AM Thank you most sincerely, Darren.

Tim Smith May 23, 2017 at 10:17 AM Awe inspiring Lin...love this form Lin Lane May 23, 2017 at 11:53 AM Thank you lots and lots, Tim. It takes a bit of thought and planning for it to make the most sense, but a challenge that's worth the effort.

Chris Green May 23, 2017 at 9:50 AM This was beautiful Lin. Such an enchanting piece. Lin Lane May 23, 2017 at 11:52 AM Thank you so very much for your kind comment, Chris.