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10/30/2024 for Hindsight 20 20 Poetry Contest sponsored by Crystol Woods

I II You showed me I was clueless, I thank for your motivation without ability or skill, to learn and improve my skill. so, I'd know I was just a shoeless I got a good education, kid, and break my will. and I'm learning still. You took a place in the privileged few, I glad that you have a special place. one you seemed to savor, I'm happy where I am. so, I would be envious of you I owe nothing to anybody. in your position of favor. I owe nothing to any man. You ostracized and left me alone, Thanks, too, for my special place for punishment, it was meant, and a chance to meditate, so, for made up sins, I'd atone, traveling in my mind, time and space. and publicly repent. I appreciate your gift, and I feel great. You took everything away from me, You showed me how to make due. so, I'd have no resource, Now, I can be resourceful when I try. thinking you'd put me up a tree, and I've learned to take the view with no recourse. that, important things, we can't buy. Brilliantly, you framed me up From everything that I recall, on pretenses flimsy, and when all is said and done, persecuting me while smiling, yup, what you taught me most of all, with a sense of whimsy. was how not to treat someone.

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Date: 11/30/2024 12:51:00 PM
So very intimate and like a tea pot, heating up with every word until finally the stream screams! I loved the build up to that final line... so powerful David. I'm such a huge fan of your poetry! Ty for entering! Xoxo
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David Crandall
Date: 12/1/2024 4:04:00 PM
Wow Crystol, I love your metaphor! and thanks! I think your comment suggests a poem. :-)
Date: 10/31/2024 9:09:00 AM
Nice framing Dave! It reminds of the pregunta ;);)
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David Crandall
Date: 10/31/2024 2:51:00 PM
Thanks Linda, now that you mention it, I think that's where I was subconsciously pulling the idea from. That happens to me all the time. An idea pops into my head and I write it down, and if I really think about it, I can place what it was that I heard, read, or saw, that was the source for my idea.
Date: 10/30/2024 4:44:00 PM
What a fantastic job you've done in showing your original thoughts and then your hindsight thoughts. Side by side makes it easier to comprehend. Good writing, David.
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David Crandall
Date: 10/30/2024 4:47:00 PM
Thanks Lin. I really appreciate your comments!

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