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Hidden Stream

Waltzing ‘mongst the redwoods she now meanders
Shyly smiling, candid in guileless virtue
Feeling carefree, gleeful, of threats unwary...
Progress encroaches.


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Sapphic Stanza Contest
Sponsor: William Kekaula

© 21st January 2019

Copyright © Paul Callus | Year Posted 2019

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Paula Goldsmith Date: 9/30/2021 10:58:00 AM Back with Congratulations on this new win. Have a great/blessed day writing away.............. Login to Reply

Rob Carmack Date: 9/26/2021 5:41:00 PM This is my favorite from the contest I have read so far, congrats on your win. Login to Reply

Hilo Poet Date: 9/22/2021 12:27:00 AM Paul, as poets we offer nature a voice of blissful words knowing that progress is a fate that may mute our voice but not our words. Nicely done my friend, with my compliments, Aloha! Login to Reply

Paula Goldsmith Date: 9/21/2021 11:21:00 AM Congratulations on your win. You have so much talent. Have a blessed day............. Login to Reply

David Mohn Date: 2/14/2019 8:17:00 PM Congratulations Paul! I see we both have a thing for redwoods :) love your take on this. Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 2/15/2019 8:47:00 AM Thank you, David. Yes, must be some kind of telepathy :) Regards // paul

Beata Agustin Date: 2/13/2019 9:06:00 PM Congrats! Thanks for sharing your talent. God bless you. Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 2/14/2019 7:30:00 AM Thank you, Beata. Blessings to you, too! Have a nice day. // paul

Rob Carmack Date: 2/13/2019 7:05:00 PM Nicely done. Congrats Paul. Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 2/14/2019 7:28:00 AM Thank you, Rob. Best regards // paul

P.S. Awtry Date: 2/13/2019 1:04:00 PM Wow, you got me with that jux. This is beautiful! Congratulations! Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 2/13/2019 2:03:00 PM So pleased you found it to your liking, P.S. Thank you on all counts. Regards // paul

Craig Cornish Date: 2/13/2019 10:26:00 AM As I reread this I like it more all the time Paul, thank you for taking the time in this difficult form to do it so well. Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 2/13/2019 2:02:00 PM Thank you, Craig. I was not quite sure that I had got it right. I like contests that challenge the mind. Regards // paul

Sandra L. Weiss Date: 2/12/2019 2:26:00 PM Progress, sadly intrusive at times. A wonderful write. Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 2/12/2019 3:09:00 PM Indeed, Sandra....I am very wary of progress and what it really stands for! Thank you for stopping by. Regards // paul

Sunlite Wanter Date: 2/10/2019 10:21:00 AM Just ran across this. Very strong and surprising. Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 2/10/2019 1:39:00 PM So pleased that you enjoyed it, Sunlite...thank you! Regards // paul

Andrea Dietrich Date: 2/5/2019 3:42:00 PM Still one of my very favorites in the contest, Paul. I predict a win! I finally did mine. I rather like how i did it, but I think so far only one comment. I wonder if it is understandable! to people!! Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 2/6/2019 9:07:00 AM Thank you, Andrea. I enjoyed your entry, and yes, it is understandable! Maybe people are more wary of the form itself, fearing to commit themselves to stressed and unstressed syllables! Regards // paul

Andrea Dietrich Date: 2/2/2019 5:09:00 PM this is so gorgeous, Paul! A contest I dearly hope to write for quickly. Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 2/2/2019 5:16:00 PM Thank you, Andrea. After reading Craig's blog I decided to write another one; now I am not sure which one to enter!! Regards // paul

Jennifer Proxenos Date: 1/30/2019 8:40:00 AM Hi Paul, Progress encroaches - how sad, it is taking away the green and beautiful and natural. I have a poem that I am posting which writes about this horrible, dreadful encroachment on nature, animals and tribes. Love your poem Paul, wonderfully penned. Poetry hugs, Jennifer. Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 1/30/2019 3:42:00 PM Unfortunately we are slowly eating away at what we inherited for free. I wonder what will be left for future generations, especially in small islands like those I live in. ~ Poetry hugs to you too, Jenny. // paul

Jack Horne Date: 1/29/2019 3:32:00 PM love this & I forgot what a super form this is - a sure winner in the contest Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 1/30/2019 3:34:00 PM Thank you, Jack. All the best // paul

Alexis Y. Date: 1/26/2019 11:57:00 AM Hi Paul, I agree with Silent One, this is such a clever to take on the contest. This form looks difficult to me. I think you did a good job. I wish you the best of luck in the contest:-) Alexis Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 1/26/2019 4:05:00 PM Many thanks, Alexis:) True, not an easy form, but I am here to learn (even at my age!), so I go for it:) Regards // paul

Silent One Date: 1/26/2019 8:14:00 AM Clever take on this, with intellectual words in a short poem.. Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 1/26/2019 9:21:00 AM Thank you S-1. I think this is only my second Sapphic stanza which I've written. Regards // paul

Connie Marcum Wong Date: 1/25/2019 12:10:00 AM We have a need to come full circle Paul and return to the past in solutions that worked. Progress isn't always for the best if the stakes are too high. This is a great entry for the contest. I couldn't attempt it. I am sure it will do well! : ) xxoo Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 1/25/2019 11:14:00 AM Thank you, Connie; your insightful comments are appreciated...so is the faith you show in my poem. Wishing you a lovely weekend. // Regards // paul

Carolyn Devonshire Date: 1/23/2019 5:52:00 PM Sometimes I wish there wasn't so much "progress" encroaching, Paul. I followed your meter and you seem to have it perfect! I can picture the "meandering" being done by a woman, an animal or a stream. You really gave a great description in this short verse form. (I've tried to write for this with no success.) Best wishes in Craig's contest! Hugs, carolyn Login to Reply Carolyn Devonshire Date: 1/30/2019 5:26:00 PM It's the same here, but Malta has so much to protect. Let's hope trends change, my friend. Paul Callus Date: 1/24/2019 10:54:00 AM Most of the progress in my country is connected with development by the same individuals who are led by greed for money. Unfortunately our environment and cultural heritage are going to the dogs. Thank you for the lovely feedback. Hugs // paul

Heidi Sands Date: 1/23/2019 4:53:00 PM Beautifully written Paul :) Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 1/24/2019 10:50:00 AM Thank you, Heidi :) Regards // paul

Vijay Pandit Date: 1/23/2019 3:54:00 PM I see the hidden guileless virtue..among redwoods..you painted the scene well Paul. Regards. Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 1/23/2019 4:37:00 PM Thank you, Vijay. Glad you enjoyed. The idea of joyful innocence is hard to resist, yet nothing lasts for ever! Regards // paul

Nette Onclaud Date: 1/23/2019 3:50:00 PM grreeat twist in the end, paul... could she have seen danger ahead?... well done..huggs Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 1/23/2019 4:34:00 PM Thank you, Nette. Hidden away from inquisitive eyes and human influence, I would say that she still was too innocent to perceive danger. Hugs // paul