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Hidden Stream

Waltzing ‘mongst the redwoods she now meanders Shyly smiling, candid in guileless virtue Feeling carefree, gleeful, of threats unwary... Progress encroaches. - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - Sapphic Stanza Contest Sponsor: William Kekaula © 21st January 2019

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Paula Goldsmith

Date: 9/30/2021 10:58:00 AM

Back with Congratulations on this new win. Have a great/blessed day writing away..............

Rob Carmack

Date: 9/26/2021 5:41:00 PM

This is my favorite from the contest I have read so far, congrats on your win.

Hilo Poet

Date: 9/22/2021 12:27:00 AM

Paul, as poets we offer nature a voice of blissful words knowing that progress is a fate that may mute our voice but not our words. Nicely done my friend, with my compliments, Aloha!

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 9/21/2021 11:21:00 AM

Congratulations on your win. You have so much talent. Have a blessed day.............

David Mohn

Date: 2/14/2019 8:17:00 PM

Congratulations Paul! I see we both have a thing for redwoods :) love your take on this.

Paul Callus
Date: 2/15/2019 8:47:00 AM

Thank you, David. Yes, must be some kind of telepathy :) Regards // paul

Beata Agustin

Date: 2/13/2019 9:06:00 PM

Congrats! Thanks for sharing your talent. God bless you.

Paul Callus
Date: 2/14/2019 7:30:00 AM

Thank you, Beata. Blessings to you, too! Have a nice day. // paul

Rob Carmack

Date: 2/13/2019 7:05:00 PM

Nicely done. Congrats Paul.

Paul Callus
Date: 2/14/2019 7:28:00 AM

Thank you, Rob. Best regards // paul

P.S. Awtry

Date: 2/13/2019 1:04:00 PM

Wow, you got me with that jux. This is beautiful! Congratulations!

Paul Callus
Date: 2/13/2019 2:03:00 PM

So pleased you found it to your liking, P.S. Thank you on all counts. Regards // paul

Craig Cornish

Date: 2/13/2019 10:26:00 AM

As I reread this I like it more all the time Paul, thank you for taking the time in this difficult form to do it so well.

Paul Callus
Date: 2/13/2019 2:02:00 PM

Thank you, Craig. I was not quite sure that I had got it right. I like contests that challenge the mind. Regards // paul

Sandra L. Weiss

Date: 2/12/2019 2:26:00 PM

Progress, sadly intrusive at times. A wonderful write.

Paul Callus
Date: 2/12/2019 3:09:00 PM

Indeed, Sandra....I am very wary of progress and what it really stands for! Thank you for stopping by. Regards // paul

Sunlite Wanter

Date: 2/10/2019 10:21:00 AM

Just ran across this. Very strong and surprising.

Paul Callus
Date: 2/10/2019 1:39:00 PM

So pleased that you enjoyed it, Sunlite...thank you! Regards // paul

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 2/5/2019 3:42:00 PM

Still one of my very favorites in the contest, Paul. I predict a win! I finally did mine. I rather like how i did it, but I think so far only one comment. I wonder if it is understandable! to people!!

Paul Callus
Date: 2/6/2019 9:07:00 AM

Thank you, Andrea. I enjoyed your entry, and yes, it is understandable! Maybe people are more wary of the form itself, fearing to commit themselves to stressed and unstressed syllables! Regards // paul

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 2/2/2019 5:09:00 PM

this is so gorgeous, Paul! A contest I dearly hope to write for quickly.

Paul Callus
Date: 2/2/2019 5:16:00 PM

Thank you, Andrea. After reading Craig's blog I decided to write another one; now I am not sure which one to enter!! Regards // paul

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 1/30/2019 8:40:00 AM

Hi Paul, Progress encroaches - how sad, it is taking away the green and beautiful and natural. I have a poem that I am posting which writes about this horrible, dreadful encroachment on nature, animals and tribes. Love your poem Paul, wonderfully penned. Poetry hugs, Jennifer.

Paul Callus
Date: 1/30/2019 3:42:00 PM

Unfortunately we are slowly eating away at what we inherited for free. I wonder what will be left for future generations, especially in small islands like those I live in. ~ Poetry hugs to you too, Jenny. // paul

Jack Horne

Date: 1/29/2019 3:32:00 PM

love this & I forgot what a super form this is - a sure winner in the contest

Paul Callus
Date: 1/30/2019 3:34:00 PM

Thank you, Jack. All the best // paul

Alexis Y.

Date: 1/26/2019 11:57:00 AM

Hi Paul, I agree with Silent One, this is such a clever to take on the contest. This form looks difficult to me. I think you did a good job. I wish you the best of luck in the contest:-) Alexis

Paul Callus
Date: 1/26/2019 4:05:00 PM

Many thanks, Alexis:) True, not an easy form, but I am here to learn (even at my age!), so I go for it:) Regards // paul

Silent One

Date: 1/26/2019 8:14:00 AM

Clever take on this, with intellectual words in a short poem..

Paul Callus
Date: 1/26/2019 9:21:00 AM

Thank you S-1. I think this is only my second Sapphic stanza which I've written. Regards // paul

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 1/25/2019 12:10:00 AM

We have a need to come full circle Paul and return to the past in solutions that worked. Progress isn't always for the best if the stakes are too high. This is a great entry for the contest. I couldn't attempt it. I am sure it will do well! : ) xxoo

Paul Callus
Date: 1/25/2019 11:14:00 AM

Thank you, Connie; your insightful comments are appreciated...so is the faith you show in my poem. Wishing you a lovely weekend. // Regards // paul

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 1/23/2019 5:52:00 PM

Sometimes I wish there wasn't so much "progress" encroaching, Paul. I followed your meter and you seem to have it perfect! I can picture the "meandering" being done by a woman, an animal or a stream. You really gave a great description in this short verse form. (I've tried to write for this with no success.) Best wishes in Craig's contest! Hugs, carolyn

Carolyn Devonshire
Date: 1/30/2019 5:26:00 PM

It's the same here, but Malta has so much to protect. Let's hope trends change, my friend.

Paul Callus
Date: 1/24/2019 10:54:00 AM

Most of the progress in my country is connected with development by the same individuals who are led by greed for money. Unfortunately our environment and cultural heritage are going to the dogs. Thank you for the lovely feedback. Hugs // paul

Heidi Sands

Date: 1/23/2019 4:53:00 PM

Beautifully written Paul :)

Paul Callus
Date: 1/24/2019 10:50:00 AM

Thank you, Heidi :) Regards // paul

Vijay Pandit

Date: 1/23/2019 3:54:00 PM

I see the hidden guileless virtue..among redwoods..you painted the scene well Paul. Regards.

Paul Callus
Date: 1/23/2019 4:37:00 PM

Thank you, Vijay. Glad you enjoyed. The idea of joyful innocence is hard to resist, yet nothing lasts for ever! Regards // paul

Nette Onclaud

Date: 1/23/2019 3:50:00 PM

grreeat twist in the end, paul... could she have seen danger ahead?... well done..huggs

Paul Callus
Date: 1/23/2019 4:34:00 PM

Thank you, Nette. Hidden away from inquisitive eyes and human influence, I would say that she still was too innocent to perceive danger. Hugs // paul