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Here-Gone-Fresh

Here–Gone-Fresh

Here
Are but 
Children as
They meet the beach
Forewarned of rip tides
Suction at the
Shore eating
Their feet
Gone

Fresh
Salt air
Filling up 
The boys’ young lungs
Crabs scuttle sideways
Seagulls fly free
Dive for fish
Tides coming
Fresh                                                                

Jill Spagnola aka Sunshine Williams
November 13th, 2015
Eve’s Oil Painting 1, 2, 3, any form contest

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Andrea Dietrich Date: 11/18/2015 8:05:00 PM Ninette is an interesting form for this challenge and I see you came away with a win GREAT job and congratulations. Login to Reply Jill Spagnola Date: 11/19/2015 3:06:00 AM Thank you Andrea!....:), jill

Paul Callus Date: 11/18/2015 1:55:00 PM Love the imagery and appeal to senses, Jill. This form has served you well. Congratulations on a fine podium win. Regards // paul Login to Reply Jill Spagnola Date: 11/18/2015 3:33:00 PM Thank you Paul, I find it helpful to use a form like this on ideas I did not form on my own. It helps me to stay on topic...:), jill

Richard Lamoureux Date: 11/18/2015 8:04:00 AM Well expressed, congrats. Login to Reply Jill Spagnola Date: 11/18/2015 3:31:00 PM Thank you so much Richard!...:), jill

Teddy Kimathi Date: 11/18/2015 7:24:00 AM Congrats for your wonderful WIN and verse Jill! ;-) Login to Reply Jill Spagnola Date: 11/18/2015 3:30:00 PM Thanks Teddy!!!....:), jill

Skat A Date: 11/17/2015 9:53:00 PM Jill, Congratulations, Have a nice day. SKAT Login to Reply Jill Spagnola Date: 11/18/2015 3:29:00 PM You do the same, thanks SKAT...:), jill

Eve Roper Date: 11/17/2015 9:48:00 PM Thank you so very much for composing and submitting a poem in my contest, Jill, congratulations on your win!!! My husband and I truly enjoyed the poem. Hugs dear friend Eve Login to Reply Jill Spagnola Date: 11/18/2015 3:28:00 PM Eve thank you so much for sponsoring this contest based on another of your artistic talents. It took me a while to see that this was not a photograph of the boys but your oil. The beach is one of my favorite places in the world...again thank you....:), jill

Nayda Ivette Negron Flores Date: 11/17/2015 7:01:00 PM Congratulations Jill Login to Reply Jill Spagnola Date: 11/18/2015 3:28:00 PM Thank you Nayda...:), jill

Jan Allison Date: 11/17/2015 6:16:00 PM You paint a lovely picture using these forms Jill congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx Login to Reply Jill Spagnola Date: 11/18/2015 3:25:00 PM Thank you so much Jan ox....:), jill

Skat A Date: 11/14/2015 5:40:00 AM Jill, you paint a beautiful day. The best of luck. Skat Login to Reply Jill Spagnola Date: 11/17/2015 2:55:00 PM Thank you so much Skat, did you know you are like #1 in this poet community??? You rock...:), jill

Kp Nunez Date: 11/13/2015 8:31:00 PM You do well with these succinct writes, right Jill? I find them more challenging, trying to encapsulate the thoughts within a few words within a limited form. All the best! hugs! Login to Reply Jill Spagnola Date: 11/17/2015 2:52:00 PM Yes Kim, sticking to a form helps me from straying off of topic...thank you so much for noticing xxx's!! jill

Jean Murray Date: 11/13/2015 5:53:00 PM The first time I read this, I read it as fresh salt water, not air,and feared the worst. Having been caught in a rip tide once at Trivandrum in southern India, I am relieved to think we both survived. Brilliant suspense. Login to Reply Jill Spagnola Date: 11/13/2015 7:47:00 PM Thank you so much Jean ox...:), jill

Eric Boddie Date: 11/13/2015 4:35:00 PM here are words that will inspire any....gone is all fear, and it was plenty....fresh is the scene painted by jill....I am just one witness to this Beauty, and that's just keeping it real....;) Login to Reply Jill Spagnola Date: 11/13/2015 7:50:00 PM Thank you Eric, my poem is blushing....:), truly, jill

Cherl Dunn Date: 11/13/2015 12:03:00 PM Dear Jill Wow a brilliant piece I'm sure you will do well in the contest because this is very inspirational I'll cross my fingers for you girl, and thanks for your comment, I appreciate your heart felt words on my stuff two, cheri Login to Reply Jill Spagnola Date: 11/13/2015 3:43:00 PM Thank you so much cheri...:), jill

Afolabi Muideen Date: 11/13/2015 8:06:00 AM Wow! What a lovely and excellent write. I love how you constructed this. Excellent..............A.M. Login to Reply Afolabi Muideen Date: 11/13/2015 8:43:00 AM Don't be discouraged my friend, your write is truly brilliant and your syllables are correct. Beautiful. Afolabi Muideen Date: 11/13/2015 8:43:00 AM Don't be discouraged my friend, your write is truly brilliant and your syllables are correct. Beautiful. Jill Spagnola Date: 11/13/2015 8:29:00 AM Thank you so very much, A.M...This is the first contest I have entered in a while, I was getting discouraged...:), jill