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Her Wave

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   How strikingly gray
    as the Spring rain 
         plummets 
      to the ground

        The green
        and brown
          all wet
             yet
  no glittering from
    the Sun's wink

         I walk
    not skip today
     and the train
  slowly slips away

        so drifts
       her wave








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Debbie Duncan

Date: 8/26/2015 3:58:00 PM

This strikes a cord , so drifts her wave. nice :)

Elizabeth Wesley

Date: 8/24/2011 10:46:00 PM

Wonderful James, this touches me in such a sad way. Rain does that sometimes and when the train slips away, someone is always left behind.

Michelle Mac Donald

Date: 5/28/2011 6:06:00 AM

A sad and solemn write, James. Conjures up times as I'd watched waves drift then "slip away". An emotive piece! Best wishes, Mikki

Carrie Richards

Date: 5/17/2011 3:16:00 PM

Oh wow.....If I had seen this poem, before I wrote my latest poem....it could have been a collaboration of the same theme, yet strikingly different in forms....we must have been getting the same vibrations of the sad parting of a train....how weird that we were both thinking of this as a subject for a poem :) Love this!!

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 5/12/2011 8:27:00 AM

James ..look at my latest post "Ignition" and see what ideas u glean from it to add or begin a new poem with me in this vein luv.. how exciting ..

Robert Johnson

Date: 5/10/2011 4:09:00 PM

And the sun slowly fades into the dusk of tommorow. Touching write here James.

C.C Bloomsfield

Date: 5/9/2011 10:33:00 PM

Her wave drifts away,till she plays music on her harpstrings, once again warming your heart. .very beautiful sad poem,its so lovely to read one of my favourite poets,once again,always C.C

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 5/8/2011 10:16:00 AM

Would you mind if I shared this poem with a friend who is not a Soup member. I think he will realize he is not alone in the feelings he's having right now. Thanks again for your friendship, James. Love you much, Carolyn

Red Fiery

Date: 5/8/2011 4:41:00 AM

i can realte myself wid this situation...this is very intense ! thanx for sharing this lovely piece !

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 5/7/2011 1:15:00 PM

Very touching, dear James. I can feel the deep sadnesss as you say farewell to your love. Definitely a favorite for me! Love, Carolyn

Phyllis Babcock

Date: 5/7/2011 8:29:00 AM

You feel the emotion when someone gets on a train and you see the last wave as they disappear down the track. Very nice poem James. love phyl

Nette Onclaud

Date: 5/7/2011 1:58:00 AM

so strong yet soft, james... how you can combine both images amazes me no end... brilliant. best winning wishes, and it will win! :) huggs, nette

Daver Austin

Date: 5/6/2011 2:53:00 PM

"I walk, not skip, today." Hey! This really drags ass. Hits one right in the heart. Love, dave

Carrie Richards

Date: 5/6/2011 7:43:00 AM

This fills with emotional goodbyes, and each one of can feel the sadness of parting. A beautifully written poem, James with a melancholy lyric!

Wilma Neels

Date: 5/6/2011 6:26:00 AM

I love the line "the spring rain plummets" James, quite a visual iducing piece.. Hope your weekend will be a great one too :) love Wilma

Roxanna Johnson

Date: 5/5/2011 5:10:00 PM

beautiful and grand(:

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 5/5/2011 7:55:00 AM

So appreciate your lovely sentiments on my Intense Inferno James as well as your many other sweet words on my work.. always a joy to read u my friend.. such depth ...luv..

Nette Onclaud

Date: 5/5/2011 6:11:00 AM

oh james, i can feel the colors and sounds of your spring day.. greeat stuff! :) huggs, nette