Caren Krutsinger Poet Free verse

Her Gentle Loving Breeze

Gemini born, an obvious air sign, 
She loved the breezes, the more brisk the better
They brought butterflies, dragonflies and damsel flies
Didn’t they?

She liked nothing better than to lie in the grass
While little ants creeped up her legs reading a book
Did not matter what book, she found value in most 
As long as there was a breeze lifting her hair up

As the gentle breeze caressed her arms and legs
The summer sun would warm her
Together they would lull her to sleep
She would wake up happy, loving neighborhood sounds

Mrs. Rutherford laughing at something Mrs. Zee said.
Mr. Rutherford’s buzz saw, Sophie’s collie’s happy bark.
Nothing like a little snooze in the middle of June
Next to a gentle loving breeze.

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Robert Pettit February 4, 2021 at 6:56 PM You have a nice imaginative write here. There's just one issue I have noticed: I detect a bit of amphiboly in the second line of your second verse. Who is reading the book? She or the ants? One small suggestion: change that line to "while little ants creeped up her legs as she read a book". I think that would clarify things significantly. Everything else looks good here.