Hell

probing cries, drowning
inside a bondage fire-forged
conjecture ceaseless







Haiku written March 26, 2023

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Bartholomew Williams

Date: 11/22/2024 8:29:00 PM

Hi, Brian. Thanks for your unique haiku. I think you capture much of the traditional imagery often associated with hell - the cries, bondage, fire (and the associated unquenchable thirst), etc., - within a very brief form. Your last line seems particularly apt to me - "conjecture ceaseless" - as I see that reflecting what must be a major dimension of hell, which is that one must constantly think about what he/she could have done differently (i.e., regrets) for the rest of eternity. Well said!

Brian Sambourne
Date: 11/22/2024 9:13:00 PM

Thanks very much for your thoughtful comments, Bartholomew, on my haiku. I must return to post again with such detailed responses from careful readers as yourself. Your insights are a grand prompt. With appreciation, Brian

Sara Kendrick

Date: 8/7/2023 4:21:00 AM

Interesting way to go with this one. The Bible says that it is a horrible place that is burning, and the fire dies not (or never dies). I would not want anyone to go there no matter how horrible a person they are, but some make that choice to go there. Thanks for sharing this one and for dropping by my page. Sara

Brian Sambourne
Date: 8/7/2023 6:14:00 AM

Hi Sara, Many thanks for your insights. The Haiku wasn't popular, perhaps because of the concluding line. I left the posting as is, though often the NA tempts revision. Best wishes, Brian