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Heat of Summer

midsummer heat - the hazy memories of a burnt-out affair

trembling 'cross the sky   in the heat of summer storm   she files for divorce


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A ku duet contest by Silent One
Placed 2nd

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Angela Crabtree Date: 11/16/2020 2:48:00 PM You got me with the ending. I wasn't expecting that. Great poem! :) Login to Reply

Timothy Hicks Date: 5/3/2020 12:25:00 PM Not saying this for puns-sake, but it is a 'shocking' image you paint here to correlate a divorce with the suddenness of a lightning bolt. Powerful images. PS: I'm sure this has something to do with the contest rules, now long passed, but doesn't monoku only have one line in it? Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 5/9/2020 7:37:00 AM Hi Timothy...I believe that there are instances when a divorce could bring shattering/lightning results!! As to the PS...Yes, a Monoku is a one-liner, but the contest sponsor wanted a double one, with both related to the same theme. ~ Regards // paul

Phyllis Babcock Date: 1/23/2020 2:50:00 PM Few words that express so much. Well done. love phyl Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 1/23/2020 4:55:00 PM Thank you, Phyllis; a pleasure to have you stopping by. Regards // paul

Kai Michael Neumann Date: 1/18/2020 8:32:00 AM Well penned. And after my own divorce came life of unimaginable beauty ... Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 1/18/2020 1:50:00 PM Thank you, Kai. I hope that your 'beauty' will last for many years! Regards // paul

Kelly Deschler Date: 1/17/2020 6:03:00 PM Nice to read about the summer heat as a winter storm is approaching us this evening... A good and creative use of metaphor within this poem. Great writing Paul! Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 1/18/2020 1:49:00 PM Thank you, Kelly. Sometimes a summer storm can be much worse than a winter one! Have a lovely weekend. // paul

Line Gauthier Date: 1/8/2020 8:07:00 PM Well penned, Paul. Congrats on your most deserving podium finish. Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 1/10/2020 3:39:00 PM Thank you, Line. Have a lovely weekend. Regards // paul

Kim Rodrigues Date: 1/6/2020 6:29:00 AM Congrats, Paul! Touching. Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 1/6/2020 9:06:00 AM Thank you, Kim. Enjoy the week ahead:) Regards // paul

Eve Roper Date: 1/4/2020 9:48:00 PM Congratulations on your in Silent One's contest. Hugs Eve Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 1/5/2020 9:19:00 AM Thank you, Eve. Regards & Hugs // paul

Andrea Dietrich Date: 1/4/2020 5:58:00 PM just back to congratulate you. Don't have time for much else. going to my daughters to get my hair colored again soon!!! Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 1/5/2020 9:21:00 AM Thank you for a double visit, Andrea:) Daughters do come in handy sometimes:) Regards // paul

Anne-Lise Andresen Date: 1/4/2020 1:37:00 PM - A beautiful ku duet, Paul :) - Congratulations on a 2st place in the contest :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 1/5/2020 9:22:00 AM You did did very well yourself, Anne-Lise:) Thank you, regards and hugs // paul

Carolyn Devonshire Date: 1/4/2020 12:42:00 PM Your monoku are as great as your haiku, Paul! Congratulations on your win with this one. Hugs, Carolyn Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 1/5/2020 10:58:00 AM hank you, Carolyn; your generosity is appreciated:) Warm regards & Hugs // paul

Jenish Somadas Date: 1/4/2020 10:56:00 AM Sad.. Good one..Congrats on your placement... Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 1/5/2020 10:50:00 AM Glad you like it, Jenish...thank you! Regards // paul

John Hamilton Date: 1/4/2020 8:10:00 AM Nice imagery Paul, congrats on another win! Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 1/5/2020 10:48:00 AM Thank you, John. Best regards // paul

Silent One Date: 1/4/2020 7:23:00 AM You did this very well.. Congratulations on your placement in the contest. Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 1/5/2020 10:48:00 AM Thank you, S-1. Best regards // paul

Andrea Dietrich Date: 1/2/2020 9:22:00 PM I love the symoblism you used in this one. GREAT job, Paul. Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 1/3/2020 8:37:00 AM Many thanks, Andrea; your feedback is always appreciated. Warm regards // paul

Demetrios Trifiatis Date: 1/2/2020 3:48:00 AM This is very masterfully done! Hope no personal experience is involved my friend, Paul. Hahaha. Good luck and Happy New Year! Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 1/2/2020 8:33:00 AM Thank you so much, Demi. I hardly ever write from personal experience, my friend:) All the very best // paul

FJ Thomas Date: 1/1/2020 12:27:00 AM You've done this beautifully old friend. Hello Paul :) Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 1/1/2020 9:53:00 AM What a beautiful surprise, Flo!! You made my day! Such a pleasant way to start off the new year:) Thank you and warm regards // paul

Evelyn Judy Buehler Date: 12/31/2019 6:54:00 PM A very nicely done ku duet, Paul. Amazing imagery! Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 1/1/2020 10:08:00 AM Thank you so much, Evelyn. So pleased that you enjoyed.Best regards // paul

Anil Deo Date: 12/31/2019 6:17:00 PM all in one summer? Happy New Year my Brother-In-Christ Jesus. shalom, shalom Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 1/1/2020 10:07:00 AM Aye, Anil....some summers can be worse than others! Thank you for visiting, my friend. Peace // paul

Chris Green Date: 12/31/2019 3:17:00 PM Wow, that hurt! Nice one Paul, this will definitely get the judges attention. Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 1/1/2020 10:06:00 AM Thank you, Chris. I hope they put you on the judging panel:) Regards // paul

Vijay Pandit Date: 12/31/2019 2:43:00 PM This burnt out affair is a superb poem--very well written and executed. A sure win, Paul. Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 12/31/2019 2:58:00 PM Probably this will be my last comment for this year, Vijay:) Thank you for your visits, encouragement and support, my friend. Wishing you all the best for the New Year!! // paul