Heartbreak- Hotel

Am I not a speck of decaying dust falling aimlessly?

In a rented room full of seeding sorrow, windows shut

Thrown from the core of love, corridors filled with emptiness

Where smoke rises and descends to occupy the slaving space

And hearts halt to a near cardiac arrest, contorting cells

Where the heavens meet their hells, before mourning breakfast arrives

I rest on a baneful bed, bludgeoned by thoughts, sweating

Then I awake with a shattered smile and coffee brewing

Engulfed by loneliness the sun shines its tender light, again

And dreams drift thru windows pane, beyond the gauzy glass.



Theme: Heartbreak



Jan.16.2019
10 Lines 10 Words
Sponsored by: Lu Loo


Placed 1'st...Thank You

Copyright © | Year Posted 2019



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Date: 2/6/2019 7:20:00 AM
Great write and win WW...Congrats..
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Date: 2/5/2019 7:57:00 PM
Feeling like a tiny particle in a place filled with everything. One could feel lost, lonely or even lifeless. Your thoughts say so much. This is beautiful and tender. Heartbreaking as well. Congratulations Winged Warrior, on this win. Love and Light. ~ Brandy
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Date: 1/24/2019 9:03:00 PM
Hi John, an excellent write for the theme of the contest. Many will be able to relate to this piece. The sadness touches the heart deeply my friend. You have used the full scope of the free verse form. With your golde pen you put us in the heart of the scene and at the end of the piece your pen releases us with light. This write reads like a winner my friend. I hope you find yourself on the winners list. Have a wonderful Friday. Your friend always....Mike.
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Date: 1/24/2019 12:15:00 AM
Heartbreak can hurt the heart and the soul W.W, but the fact that you woke up with a smile and to brewing coffee and a sun shining through your window pane, makes a dream just a dream but enough to achieve a win in the contest with. A great write. Poetry wishes and hugs, Jennifer.
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Date: 1/23/2019 8:26:00 PM
You done did Elvis proud, my friend. Way to 'wing it,' warrior! … Nice entry for the contest, methinks. Best wishes, Gershon
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Date: 1/21/2019 11:58:00 PM
amazing imagery here, great write WW
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Date: 1/20/2019 5:20:00 AM
Better to wake with a shattered smile than to not wake at all (lol) Awesome poetry, WW Love & peace...you ain't nothin but a hound dog! Cm
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Date: 1/18/2019 6:46:00 PM
W.W. that was amazing my friend, best of luck a sure winner W.W. love back at you!
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Date: 1/17/2019 12:13:00 PM
A magnificent portrayal of heartbreak; very well penned.
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Date: 1/16/2019 2:31:00 PM
Wow, this is so impressive WW. The heartbreak is palpable! Good Luck !!!
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Date: 1/16/2019 2:03:00 PM
This must be so hard to do (10x10)..you always tackle difficult forms brilliantly..well done, WW.
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Date: 1/16/2019 12:42:00 PM
Wow! Deeply sad and well written about heartache!
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Date: 1/16/2019 11:57:00 AM
a medium dark roast...three sugar one cream and an espresso shot flavor to fill the void
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