Headlong

Our lives could never be the same When tasting love that knows no shame Or self restrain; we both give in To the strong urge that flows within As we let go out of control And fan the flame of burning coal Knowing full well this is no game Our lives could never be the same. ------------------------------------------- 19th October 2014 Contest: 8 Lines 7 Words Enjambment Sponsor: Rick Parise

Post Comments

Poetrysoup is an environment of encouragement and growth so only provide specific positive comments that indicate what you appreciate about the poem.

Please Login to post a comment

Julia Ward

Date: 3/12/2015 11:47:00 AM

Love and worry become entwined in "Headlong". Hugs, Julia, xx

Paul Callus
Date: 3/12/2015 2:39:00 PM

Yes, Julia; some games can go out of hand!! In this case it is much more than a game! Hugs // paul

Eileen Manassian

Date: 11/3/2014 11:23:00 AM

Absolutely perfect....There are life changing moments like these. Beautiful life changing moments. Hugs

Eileen Manassian
Date: 11/5/2014 2:13:00 PM

It's not the outback to me. It's beautiful...indeed.

Paul Callus
Date: 11/5/2014 2:11:00 PM

Thank you Eileen for finding 'perfection' in this poem of mine; I am pleased to have made an impact on you...to me that means a lot. As far as the contest goes, it got lost in the outback!:) Hope you're keeping well. hugs // paul

Sara Kendrick

Date: 10/25/2014 7:54:00 AM

Reads like a winner to me..Thanks for stopping by with congrats..Have a blessed day..Sara

Paul Callus
Date: 10/25/2014 4:31:00 PM

I will go by your vibes, Sara:) Thank you for both visit and 'faith'. Hope yours will be a lovely weekend. // paul

Timothy Hicks

Date: 10/23/2014 1:14:00 PM

Your poetry is simple and well thought out. Easy to grasp with a nice poetic touch. What is love anyway without shame or self restrain? Passionate love, anyway... keep writing!

Paul Callus
Date: 10/23/2014 5:17:00 PM

Timothy, my poetry rests on simplicity of thought and expression, and hopefully with enough poetic flavor to touch the heart. I suppose this is derived from the many years of teaching during which I always strove to explain in simple clear ways, using uncomplicated methods which served me and my students well. Thank you..you are an honest and positive critic:) // paul

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

Date: 10/20/2014 8:22:00 AM

love the flow as always Paul . :)

Paul Callus
Date: 10/20/2014 8:26:00 AM

Thank you Olive_eloi:) Hope you have a lovely week:) hugs // paul

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/19/2014 7:42:00 PM

Oh, was it seven words and not syllables? That is cool because it allows you to be more metrical by choosing one of the words to have two syllables!! Great use of enjambment too. Me LIKES!!!

Paul Callus
Date: 10/20/2014 2:15:00 AM

Hi Andrea....you got it exactly right....but then you are an expert on these things!:) ...the key is the 2 syllable word. Like that it flows like honey and gives access to easy rhyme. Txs for the 'like'. Have a nice day.....paul

Brenda Meier-Hans

Date: 10/19/2014 1:56:00 PM

Oh Paul, wow. I agree with Carolyn. I want to hear more. This looks like a great entry. Good luck.

Paul Callus
Date: 10/19/2014 4:23:00 PM

Thanks for liking it, Brenda; one day I will publish a sequel to it, but I would need her permission first:) Goodnight // paul

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 10/19/2014 12:36:00 PM

Dear Paul, A compelling poem! It makes the reader long for more details about the "love that knows no shame." I haven't looked at Rick's contest rules yet, but he's sure to like this entry. Rick is a fair judge and always rewards good poetry. (He's been off the site for a while.) Wishing you success, my friend. Love, carolyn

Paul Callus
Date: 10/19/2014 4:20:00 PM

Well, I could go into details, but I'll do that in private:) (up above Brenda is dying to hear more, too!) Glad you found it compelling; this is the first time that I heard of Rick; I must look up his poetry and get acquainted. Thanks for stopping by...love, // paul

Eileen Manassian

Date: 10/19/2014 12:14:00 PM

I've tumbled headlong into the ecstasy of this write, Paul. Lovely. Good luck in the contest. My money is on you....

Paul Callus
Date: 10/19/2014 4:13:00 PM

I love it when you tumble into ecstasy! Thank you for the faith you show in this write, Eileen; maybe I could take your tip and try my luck:) // paul

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 10/19/2014 10:25:00 AM

Paul this poem is so beautiful as to tug at my very soul. I have to add this to my favs.

Paul Callus
Date: 10/19/2014 3:37:00 PM

Wow thank you Maurice...it's been my lucky day for faves! I am very pleased that you enjoyed it; I am usually very critical of what I write, but I have to admit that this one is close to my heart. cheers. // paul

Jan Allison

Date: 10/19/2014 9:48:00 AM

I love the structure and effortless flow of the verse Paul - I have never seen this form before - good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xxx

Jan Allison
Date: 10/19/2014 3:40:00 PM

Thanks Paul I will have a look at the contest and see if I am able to come up with something. Hugs jan xx

Paul Callus
Date: 10/19/2014 3:27:00 PM

Thank you for the lovely comments, Jan. Enjambment isn't really a form...it's more a case of continuation of one line into the next one; the sponsor added extra rules to make the contest a bit harder and thus more interesting. I suggest you try this one for I feel it could be quite up your street. hugs // paul