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Headlong

Our lives could never be the same
When tasting love that knows no shame
Or self restrain; we both give in
To the strong urge that flows within
As we let go out of control
And fan the flame of burning coal
Knowing full well this is no game
Our lives could never be the same.

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19th October 2014 
Contest: 8 Lines 7 Words Enjambment
Sponsor: Rick Parise

Copyright © Paul Callus | Year Posted 2014

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Julia Ward Date: 3/12/2015 11:47:00 AM Love and worry become entwined in "Headlong". Hugs, Julia, xx Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 3/12/2015 2:39:00 PM Yes, Julia; some games can go out of hand!! In this case it is much more than a game! Hugs // paul

Eileen Manassian Date: 11/3/2014 11:23:00 AM Absolutely perfect....There are life changing moments like these. Beautiful life changing moments. Hugs Login to Reply Eileen Manassian Date: 11/5/2014 2:13:00 PM It's not the outback to me. It's beautiful...indeed. Paul Callus Date: 11/5/2014 2:11:00 PM Thank you Eileen for finding 'perfection' in this poem of mine; I am pleased to have made an impact on you...to me that means a lot. As far as the contest goes, it got lost in the outback!:) Hope you're keeping well. hugs // paul

Sara Kendrick Date: 10/25/2014 7:54:00 AM Reads like a winner to me..Thanks for stopping by with congrats..Have a blessed day..Sara Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 10/25/2014 4:31:00 PM I will go by your vibes, Sara:) Thank you for both visit and 'faith'. Hope yours will be a lovely weekend. // paul

Timothy Hicks Date: 10/23/2014 1:14:00 PM Your poetry is simple and well thought out. Easy to grasp with a nice poetic touch. What is love anyway without shame or self restrain? Passionate love, anyway... keep writing! Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 10/23/2014 5:17:00 PM Timothy, my poetry rests on simplicity of thought and expression, and hopefully with enough poetic flavor to touch the heart. I suppose this is derived from the many years of teaching during which I always strove to explain in simple clear ways, using uncomplicated methods which served me and my students well. Thank you..you are an honest and positive critic:) // paul

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser Date: 10/20/2014 8:22:00 AM love the flow as always Paul . :) Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 10/20/2014 8:26:00 AM Thank you Olive_eloi:) Hope you have a lovely week:) hugs // paul

Andrea Dietrich Date: 10/19/2014 7:42:00 PM Oh, was it seven words and not syllables? That is cool because it allows you to be more metrical by choosing one of the words to have two syllables!! Great use of enjambment too. Me LIKES!!! Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 10/20/2014 2:15:00 AM Hi Andrea....you got it exactly right....but then you are an expert on these things!:) ...the key is the 2 syllable word. Like that it flows like honey and gives access to easy rhyme. Txs for the 'like'. Have a nice day.....paul

Brenda Meier-Hans Date: 10/19/2014 1:56:00 PM Oh Paul, wow. I agree with Carolyn. I want to hear more. This looks like a great entry. Good luck. Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 10/19/2014 4:23:00 PM Thanks for liking it, Brenda; one day I will publish a sequel to it, but I would need her permission first:) Goodnight // paul

Carolyn Devonshire Date: 10/19/2014 12:36:00 PM Dear Paul, A compelling poem! It makes the reader long for more details about the "love that knows no shame." I haven't looked at Rick's contest rules yet, but he's sure to like this entry. Rick is a fair judge and always rewards good poetry. (He's been off the site for a while.) Wishing you success, my friend. Love, carolyn Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 10/19/2014 4:20:00 PM Well, I could go into details, but I'll do that in private:) (up above Brenda is dying to hear more, too!) Glad you found it compelling; this is the first time that I heard of Rick; I must look up his poetry and get acquainted. Thanks for stopping by...love, // paul

Eileen Manassian Date: 10/19/2014 12:14:00 PM I've tumbled headlong into the ecstasy of this write, Paul. Lovely. Good luck in the contest. My money is on you.... Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 10/19/2014 4:13:00 PM I love it when you tumble into ecstasy! Thank you for the faith you show in this write, Eileen; maybe I could take your tip and try my luck:) // paul

Maurice Yvonne Date: 10/19/2014 10:25:00 AM Paul this poem is so beautiful as to tug at my very soul. I have to add this to my favs. Login to Reply Paul Callus Date: 10/19/2014 3:37:00 PM Wow thank you Maurice...it's been my lucky day for faves! I am very pleased that you enjoyed it; I am usually very critical of what I write, but I have to admit that this one is close to my heart. cheers. // paul

Jan Allison Date: 10/19/2014 9:48:00 AM I love the structure and effortless flow of the verse Paul - I have never seen this form before - good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xxx Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 10/19/2014 3:40:00 PM Thanks Paul I will have a look at the contest and see if I am able to come up with something. Hugs jan xx Paul Callus Date: 10/19/2014 3:27:00 PM Thank you for the lovely comments, Jan. Enjambment isn't really a form...it's more a case of continuation of one line into the next one; the sponsor added extra rules to make the contest a bit harder and thus more interesting. I suggest you try this one for I feel it could be quite up your street. hugs // paul