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He Thinks He's a Real Man

He thinks he's a real man I know a few guys who won't look you in the eyes they wear a great disguise.... yeah maybe you know them too All the fancy gold he buys real work he never tries spends his days inventing lies got no time for goodbyes... but, he's ...gonna end up alone! Chorus His heart is stone, his heart is stone he imitates all he's ever known so many seeds he's sown he's a child tho full grown He doesn't have a real plan... and he thinks he's a real man. Himself, he always tries to please he only likes her, when she's on her knees he doesn't like it when you tease he only loves her when she agrees but, he's gonna end up all alone His point of view he does enforce his language is real coarse he screams until he's hoarse he's surprised with the divorce yeah, he's gonna end up alone Chorus His heart is stone, his heart is stone he imitates all he's ever known so many seeds he's sown he's a child tho full grown He doesn't have a real plan... and he thinks he's a real man. I know a few guys who won't look you in the eyes they wear a great disguise.... yeah maybe you know them too! Chorus His heart is stone, his heart is stone he imitates all he's ever known so many seeds he's sown he's a child tho full grown He doesn't have a real plan... and he thinks he's a real man. yeah, thinks he's a real man yeah, thinks he's a real man repeat and fade John Derek Hamilton November 3,2017

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Frances Schiavina

Date: 11/20/2017 10:18:00 AM

Hard hitting words. Well written!

John Hamilton
Date: 11/20/2017 10:51:00 AM

Thanks Frances, I appreciate the visit and comment!

Joanna Daniel

Date: 11/15/2017 8:22:00 AM

Sad to see this happening ever so often, John, no wonder fatherless children aren't mature enough, I have seen all types of problems in children of broken families or single parents...

Gregory Richard Barden

Date: 11/7/2017 10:23:00 PM

This is great, Brother, makes me think of Rap artists, though maybe that's stereotyping ... kids with money and no character or manners. I hear this as a Rock anthem or R&B groove ... super write, my friend - you are a superb lyricist! :-)

John Hamilton
Date: 11/8/2017 4:29:00 PM

Hey thanks Greg, I appreciate the comment, yeah I was thinking with the mono rhyme it has a rap feel, to it so R&B would be a good fit. Thanks for the compliment, now if only I could find my Elton John to put music to them, that would be cool. Take care buddy!

Elaine George

Date: 11/7/2017 1:31:00 PM

This would make a great country hit, John. Elai ne

John Hamilton
Date: 11/7/2017 7:34:00 PM

I think your right, just gotta find someone to sing it...thanks Elaine for the nice visit!

Jan Allison

Date: 11/6/2017 6:21:00 PM

Such a sad state of affairs and the situation isn't going to get any better John and so often the offspring of these young mother's end up pregnant at a very young age and history repeats itself:-( hugs jan xx

John Hamilton
Date: 11/6/2017 8:04:00 PM

So true, thanks Jan for the visit and comment!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 11/5/2017 7:29:00 PM

There are too many grown "children" in this world (some of them our world leaders) I really like this. Again, would sure love to hear it sung!!!

John Hamilton
Date: 11/5/2017 9:18:00 PM

Thanks Andrea you and me both!

Charlie Smith

Date: 11/4/2017 9:52:00 AM

You speak true as always John, good one...

John Hamilton
Date: 11/4/2017 11:14:00 AM

Thanks Charlie, I appreciate the visit and comment!

Heidi Sands

Date: 11/4/2017 7:42:00 AM

This song is spoken with truth with what can happen. You are so good at writing Lyrics John! You have a addressed a serious issue . You are right. Too many children growing up without a parent.

John Hamilton
Date: 11/4/2017 11:13:00 AM

Thanks Heidi nice to "see" you drop by with your positive words!

Silent One

Date: 11/4/2017 6:24:00 AM

Such a sad state of affairs, so many single mothers out there and so many immature fathers, who have no clue... This is an excellent song with a powerful message.. You are a talented writer my friend..

John Hamilton
Date: 11/4/2017 11:10:00 AM

Thanks so much SO, it is a big social problem the world over, I thank you for your words of support!

Arturo Michael

Date: 11/3/2017 11:04:00 PM

You wrote this like a true songwriter... Would love to hear it from you, although your poem did a good job at that

John Hamilton
Date: 11/3/2017 11:16:00 PM

Thanks Arturo, I'm not much of a performer, but this definitely lends itself to a certain rap vibe, not my normal style but posted it for the social message. I thank you for the nice visit!

Reggae Magnet

Date: 11/3/2017 10:34:00 PM

Well written and deep, so true to life, love it. Would love to hear the song when performed. keep up the good work.

John Hamilton
Date: 11/3/2017 11:04:00 PM

Love the name Reggae Magnet, so cool, thanks for the visit, first time I think, I appreciate the affirmation, RM!

Maria Williams

Date: 11/3/2017 9:07:00 PM

Your lyrical expose is sadly so true of a number of self centered shallow men that I've heard about. It amounts to bullying. They don't display finesse and feel they are the wounded party when friends male or female become aware of them and desert them. As the saying goes ' you can fool people some of the time - but you cannot fool people all of the time' Great write John - would have loved to hear it to music. Would be great in 'Rap' rhythm ... Maria

John Hamilton
Date: 11/3/2017 11:03:00 PM

Thanks Maria, it was actually after reading your collab poem with WW that I thought I would pull out and dust off what I've kept for a while, it is kind of a rap style but thought it wouldn't go over well, but worked up the nerve and voila. So you had an indirect influence on this write, thanks for the nice words!

Kevin Shaw

Date: 11/3/2017 6:59:00 PM

Well written John, a sad but all true commentary on life for a lot of young people today, Its very true of my town in England, young mothers of mixed race children, high unemployment and crime. It will probably only get worse. Kindest regards, Kevin

John Hamilton
Date: 11/3/2017 7:19:00 PM

Thanks Kevin, yeah I lived in Vancouver and Toronto and it's a big problem, I tried to escape to a small town and it's the same here, no moral guidance and the cycle repeats, thanks for your comment!

Lin Lane

Date: 11/3/2017 6:42:00 PM

So many children are latch-key, left on their own so they think they know how to handle life. They really are children, with no idea of responsibility. A wonderful chorus, John.

John Hamilton
Date: 11/3/2017 7:18:00 PM

Thanks Lin, I appreciate your kind visit and nice comment!