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For the Write Seven Beautiful Lines With A Twist Poetry Contest of Constance La France

Rhyme Scheme: a a b a b b a

He Awaits His Fate

"Love is the only gold." Alfred, Lord Tennyson

With a small boxed jewel in hand, he stands before the Duke’s grand gate.
Gold is that imposing entrance so beautifully ornate. 
A shadow of fear keeps flickering across the young man’s mind
though Lady Beth had vowed that for him alone she’d wait.
His friends all mutter Lady Beth won't be inclined
to let her life with her lowly lover’s life be intertwined.
Will his lady accept his betrothal ring? Oh, what shall be his fate?

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Duke Beaufort Date: 4/3/2025 12:36:00 PM Andrea, nice way to ask a question in poetry. We really never know do we? I liked the Tennyson quote...there's some wisdom there! Smiles! Login to Reply

Reason A. Poteet Date: 3/24/2025 7:55:00 AM Congratulations on your rhymed piece even though rhyme was not required here. Love the twist which leaves us, the audience, wondering still??? Hopefully in Tennyson style it wasn't "Tis better to have loved and lost than never to have loved at all." Login to Reply

Krishnanand Guptar Date: 3/24/2025 4:05:00 AM Congratulations, dear poet, on your top placement in this poetry contest with a jewel boxed with golden words laid at the gate of Conatance despite the mutter of shadows. Login to Reply

Anne-Lise Andresen Date: 3/24/2025 2:24:00 AM - I always find you in top first place in Constance's contest, Andrea :) - Beautifully written, well deserved :) - Congratulations :) - hugs Login to Reply

Valsa George Date: 3/23/2025 10:01:00 PM Great story narrated in a few lines with the prompt words used at the right place. Congratulations Andrea on your first place win. Login to Reply

Paige Hind Date: 3/22/2025 9:07:00 AM Very lovely- true love, "if a man give all his substance for love it would utterly be contemned" - Song of Solomon <3 Login to Reply

Ink Empress Date: 3/22/2025 5:48:00 AM Its like reading and an ancient poem from the archives of literature, how profound and well articulated with brilliant rhymes and in such cadence! Love the quote. Love is the only gold, and weighs heavier than any jewel! And i love how you’ve written “ to let her life with her lowly lover’s life be intertwined. Will his lady accept his betrothal ring? Oh, what shall be his fate?” would love to know his fate! Best wishes! Sending you light always Login to Reply Andrea Dietrich Date: 3/22/2025 7:52:00 AM I would love to know his fate too. haha

Yann Rolland Date: 3/22/2025 1:44:00 AM a great( paintiing, with so many possibilities and thoughts, your poem is wonderful and very creative, thanks poet Login to Reply Andrea Dietrich Date: 3/22/2025 7:53:00 AM thanks, Yann

Akham Nilabirdhwaja Singh Date: 3/21/2025 11:45:00 PM Themes of love and status.Very nice .Wish you the best Login to Reply Andrea Dietrich Date: 3/22/2025 7:53:00 AM Thank you, Akham.

CayCay Jennings Date: 3/21/2025 10:54:00 PM Beautifully written in an 'oldish style that hums along in true, compelling-story wiles. Had a gray day to-day, hope this Friday was kinder to you (technically it's Sat, 2am here) ... CayCay Login to Reply Andrea Dietrich Date: 3/22/2025 7:54:00 AM thanks. the poem just ended up being this way. No, yesterday no better than any other day. Some days I don't know how I go on. I know you know that feeling too.

Sam Scott Date: 3/21/2025 9:02:00 PM This is intriguing.. clearly anyone who has to propose takes a beat, realising there is a point of undeniable transition - whether an enthusiastic 'yes'.. or a reluctant 'no'. A big imposing gateway boundary to traverse! More so, if imposing more than simply metaphorical.. I pray the story concludes happily. Enjoyed this. Blessings.. S:) x Login to Reply Andrea Dietrich Date: 3/22/2025 7:54:00 AM Glad you saw all that inside my poem, Sam.