Tom Quigley Poet Rhyme

Hawaiian Winds

The humid Hawaiian heat hobbles my head and heart too,
Hitting as the Humvee high-tails past on the highway, 
Sweat seeps steadily south from scalp to shoes
Convection current cooking, keep pedaling, pores crying.

Howling Haleakala Headwinds hammer hard, 
Freezing face, fingers, and forehead.
Wistfully watching the warm water Westward;
Blasting breeze’s blows batter my body backward.

Soft saline sea spray spritzes the sunbathers
As the surges' steady smashing against the shore 
Rhythmically rocks the run-down revelers 
to a sweet, sun-kissed, seaside sleep once more.

For Elements Part 2—Wind Contest (First Place)
Sponsored by Brian Davey
Judged 3/29/16

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Timothy Hicks March 30, 2016 at 6:12 PM I live in Idaho, but in less than a month I'm moving to Georgia ... lots of packing to do! My brother's been to Hawaii a couple of times, trying to work on those organic farms over there with free room and board ... each time it didn't seem to work out though. Tom Quigley March 30, 2016 at 9:47 PM Idaho to GA? Wow. There's a change. Work? Love? School? Gotta be something worthy of an epic poem there. :-)

Timothy Hicks March 30, 2016 at 5:59 PM Stellar use of alliteration, Tom. And I love the subject matter of biking, as I love to bike by the riverside under the shaded trees in the summertime (though preferably away from any Humvees) ... You sure an impressive writer, my friend. Hitting first place yet again. Well done! So you do really live in Hawaii then? Tom Quigley March 30, 2016 at 6:08 PM Thanks! We live in Southern AZ, but have family on the Big Island of HI. Always nice to have an excuse!! Going there next month. You?

Brian Mcclain March 30, 2016 at 1:24 PM Hi Tom, Fantastic imagery and illiteration. Congrats on your #1st place W. Cheers, Brian Tom Quigley March 30, 2016 at 5:48 PM Thanks, Brian!

Teddy Kimathi March 30, 2016 at 12:19 PM Hi Tom. Congrats for your first placement in the contest!!! ;-) Tom Quigley March 30, 2016 at 5:48 PM Thanks, Teddy!

Probir Gupta March 30, 2016 at 8:45 AM A celebration of alliteration...In a thoughtful presentation....Congratulation... Probir Gupta March 30, 2016 at 7:52 PM A nice crutch, in these hours in lurch, thanks very much... Tom Quigley March 30, 2016 at 5:49 PM I thank you much, that's a nice touch, to congratulate as such!

Charlie Smith March 30, 2016 at 6:47 AM Congratulations, wonderful write and win... Tom Quigley March 30, 2016 at 8:22 AM Thanks, Charlie!

Terry O'Leary March 30, 2016 at 5:56 AM Great poem! Great win!! Tom Quigley March 30, 2016 at 8:22 AM Thanks, Terry!

Magan Szentesi March 30, 2016 at 2:33 AM good job on your win! Tom Quigley March 30, 2016 at 8:23 AM Thank you, Magan!

Dr. Upma A. Sharma March 30, 2016 at 12:56 AM Wonderful poetry n win Tom.. big congrats! Tom Quigley March 30, 2016 at 8:23 AM Thanks, Doc!

Connie Marcum Wong March 29, 2016 at 1:58 PM Congratulations on taking the top spot Tom. You did an outstanding job of describing, with well chosen alliteration, an experience here in Hawaii. My hats off to you Tom! Kudos! #7 ; ) Tom Quigley March 30, 2016 at 8:25 AM Thank you, Connie!

Daniel Turner March 29, 2016 at 12:55 PM Really nice write, Tom. I think the alliteration was probably the tipping point. Congratulations on your winning poem. Peace my friend:) Tom Quigley March 30, 2016 at 8:25 AM Thanks, Daniel!

Sandra Haight March 29, 2016 at 12:37 PM Great description and use of alliteration, Tom. Congrats on your First Place win! Sandra Tom Quigley March 29, 2016 at 12:49 PM Thanks, Sandra! Yours was every bit as deserving!

Jan Allison March 29, 2016 at 4:34 AM Wow Tom the description and alliteration are fabulous - no wonder you clinched the top spot:-) hugs Jan xx7 Tom Quigley March 29, 2016 at 6:42 AM Thanks, Jan!

Brian Davey March 29, 2016 at 3:49 AM Congratulations on your top placement in my elements contest Tom! Your use of alliteration while writing about such a specific place was brilliant. Thank you for entering Tom Quigley March 29, 2016 at 6:42 AM Thanks for the contest! I love the topic, and your parameters really pushed me to do things I hadn't done before...lots of fun. :-)

Nayda Ivette Negron Flores March 26, 2016 at 9:00 PM Excellent poem Tom. My best wishes for the contest Tom Quigley March 27, 2016 at 8:13 AM Thanks, Nayda!

Walter T. Ashe March 21, 2016 at 9:33 PM Hey Tom, read this and experienced three different faces of Hawaii...and did also relax at the end! Very visual write! Tom Quigley March 21, 2016 at 10:31 PM Thanks, Walter!