Have You Had Enough

Have you had enough?
Have you ever thought you’d had enough?
When days grow dark and life gets tough

Took some tablets, and a few more?
Treating life like a closed door

Have you ever thought about help when you struggle?
Have you ever thought your life’s a puzzle?

You may build this vast fake shadow
At your lowest hiding in the hallows

You’ve had enough can’t bare to scream
Wishing this was all a bad dream

You down and chug neat, sharp vodka
To numb the pain and feel no more
You look for someone just to care

But you awake with even more violent pain
You awake with nothing but wind and dismal rain

Have you ever asked yourself why?
Maybe you were born just to die.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2017

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De Beaulieu Avatar
December 2, 2017 at 6:34 PM
Hello Daisy, I agree with Dug Pederson you should read the 23rd psalm help is on the way. You are in my prayers every evening my friend.
Breidenthal Avatar
November 10, 2017 at 8:03 PM
"You may build this vast fake shadow At your lowest hiding in the hallows" Those were really intriguing, unique lines. I like poetry that makes me feel something new, and that line was quite interesting to me. Excellent first entry, Daisy. I also really love the second to last stanza...."You awake with nothing but wind and dismal rain"...That is a line with impact. I have felt some of these feelings before...beautiful work. Always, Laura
Mccall Avatar
November 6, 2017 at 11:13 PM
Hello Daisy I really like the structure that you employed. However I agree with Richard on the 6th and 7th stanzas but all in all a very well written piece that tugs at the heart.
Gauthier Avatar
November 3, 2017 at 7:32 PM
Very dark. Strikes at the heart. I really like for format - chops it up making giving each idea impact.
Lamoureux Avatar
November 3, 2017 at 6:12 PM
Hi Daisy this is a well expressed emotive piece. I would rework the 6th and 7th stanza as they don’t match the rhythm and feel of the rest of the piece. As humans we tend to have a negativity bias. My comments do not detract from the piece as a whole. In fact it is quite good, it just needs a bit of polish.
White Avatar
November 3, 2017 at 5:39 PM
I love your expression of pain. Do not give up. You are a child of God. You have touched my soul. You are a beautiful incredible human being. Your writing is real and pure.
One Avatar
November 3, 2017 at 7:36 AM
We are all born to die and we will do one day.. This is a deep and sad write, I am happy to see you are still fighting.. never give up!
Evans Avatar
November 1, 2017 at 2:10 PM
Wow! A poignant poem indeed. I'm sure there are many who know someone or even are that someone who echoes the sentiment in this poem.
Tyrrell Avatar
November 1, 2017 at 5:10 AM
if your a sufferer, keep fighting, don't EVER give up, its not the end x
De Beaulieu Avatar
December 4, 2017 at 8:34 PM
That is right Daisy. never give up. Have a nice evening my friend.You are in my prayers always.
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