Haunting Verses

In the pocket of an old coat about to be donated, I stumble upon words scribbled on a pad as I watched my husband die. “Your love is the most precious thing in my life. Do you know I see you as a shining star -- my mentor, my lover, my best friend” Preparing to move, I find a letter. a note from the first boy I ever loved. “I want to date other girls; but I want to stay friends.” Why had I saved this? To renew the pain again in days to come? We never did stay friends. In my desk I discover a verse I wrote while flying to Dad’s funeral. I’d wanted to read it at the service; my sister said it was too amateurish. “For every step my father took, My child’s legs took three, ‘Daddy, please,’ I called to him, ‘You walk too fast for me.’ “As Dad lay dying carrying years That numbered ninety-three, I could not help but say aloud, ‘They went too fast for me.’” And now as days are numbered, my muse stepped out the door, leaving me in God’s hands. Don’t know if I’ll be writing anymore.
*Entry for Carol’s contest “Pieces of Paper...a Poet’s Heart” By Carolyn Devonshire

Copyright © | Year Posted 2011



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Date: 9/19/2011 10:30:00 PM
Congrats on 1st Place, Carolyn. Excellent write. Thanks for your recent comments. Nice going. luv Ralph
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Date: 9/19/2011 12:26:00 PM
Oh Carolyn, I think this poem is so touching and sad. I sure hope that God holds you gently and long in his hands. You must write more. It is an honour to share first place with such an accomplished poet. Thank you for helping and sharing your wealth. Love Lee
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Date: 9/19/2011 10:26:00 AM
such a sad poem. i didn't think any of your words were amateurish - they were heart wrenching, especially, "They went too fast for me" love that line. and i hope you don't let your sister discourage you from writing. you write from the heart and your words need to be heard. congrats on your win :)
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Date: 9/19/2011 9:14:00 AM
All these thoughts brought together into a prize winning poem. Lovely as usual Carolyn. Congratulations. Love, Joyce
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Date: 9/19/2011 7:37:00 AM
Congratulations on your placement in my contest Carolyn. Love, Carol
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Date: 9/18/2011 10:16:00 PM
okay this one knocked my socks off, Carolyn. Just beautiful. A true poet's heart. I just love it to tears
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Date: 9/13/2011 6:21:00 PM
Very good adherence to the theme requirement Carolyn. Realistic as one would find the crumpled notes. As for numbers, it is only human concept that adheres to them. Precept is on the flip side of time in Eternity. Blessed is this truth. Agape, Moses
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Date: 9/13/2011 11:38:00 AM
What a sad but lovely piece, my friend. I wish you'd ignored your sister and read the poem for your dad at his funeral
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Date: 9/12/2011 6:25:00 PM
Enjoyed your rememberances of penned lines..At my uncle's funeral, the pastor read a poem written by my uncle about his daughter Nina who died at age five...I have always wonder what happened to those few lines that so fitted a father's love..Reads like a winning work to me..Good luck in the contest..Sara
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Date: 9/12/2011 5:10:00 PM
Some pieces of paper are better lost. This is most touching, dear, Carolyn. I can understand - where has the time gone? Hey! FSU - mutilate them Okies! I recall in the days of Bud Wilkinson, Colorado tied Oklahoma one year when Oklahoma had won a couple of national championships. One Buffalo player told the media - Boulder is way up there. Them damn Okies couldn't breathe. Love, daver
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Date: 9/12/2011 7:13:00 AM
Thank you for supporting my contest Carolyn. Love, Carol
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Date: 9/12/2011 3:30:00 AM
Your poem is very touching indeed Carolyn. Poetry permeates every day and the great poems like yours will live on forever. Blessings, Connie
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Date: 9/11/2011 10:51:00 PM
A beautiful poem, Carolyn! Kim
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Date: 9/11/2011 8:23:00 PM
Carolyn: My favorite line "For every step my father took, My child’s legs took three," I even tried to catch up to my father's career success. Lots of benchmarks that just made me reach higher. Love this poem. Good luck as Carol judges. CR
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Date: 9/11/2011 6:27:00 PM
carolyn, dear, this is heart wrenchingly beautiful. I have to say,you really took the contest of Carol's to heart and outdid yourself with this one. You WILL be writing more. I just know it. LUv, Andrea
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Date: 9/11/2011 5:51:00 PM
This is a very sentimental poem that I just finished reading! I can still feel the essence of the poem within me even minutes after reading it! You have written a masterpiece, Carolyn, in my book!! Such a glorious write!! Good luck in the contest!!
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