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Half-a-Life

. Half-a-Life Approaching the first sign of hell. An instrument of the baby tell. I receive the blood in a Limbo womb . An embryo conceived from a cell. A set life waiting to bloom. 9 months to be stuck inside of a shell. The first pain of labor revels my doom. I exit to another Half Life to roam and dwell. I vanished all excitement in the waiting room. Abused in my first moment, just to here me yell. My lungs full of life entering my second tomb. Yelling my guts to an evil smell. The smell of entering the Gates of Hell. By:P.D.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010




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Date: 4/28/2013 7:36:00 PM
Just spotted your comment in man in kitchen, lol am I ever goin to live that down lol, not sure if I like possum anyway lol, you teaser
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Date: 4/28/2013 7:30:00 PM
Maybe I didn't in those first moments but I have come to love life to the full. I guess for many it has not worked out and for millions living the day to day survival especially. Maybe one day I'll find out if it has for you my Sweet Dark Fiend. Take care, Richard
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Date: 9/26/2010 8:16:00 AM
Hauntingly dark ... and yet full of courage, none can tell the meaning well, like those under the moment's spell. Thanks for being friend
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Date: 9/12/2010 8:11:00 AM
The work of being born. I like the way you paint the picture from the infant's eyes. I'm new to poetry soup, found your work from another poet that commented on mine. Your name made me curious to read your work, happy it did. Monica
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Date: 8/7/2010 8:21:00 PM
Great imagery although sad and pathetic, but brilliantly composed lines revealing some other wonderful skills of your pen. Great write. And many thank for your very unique and precious comments on Patradoot 26. I am so indebted to all my friends of poetry soup for supporting me to bring on the surface this rare book of my father before the world. Love and best wishes always.......Ravindra.......Poet D
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Date: 7/20/2010 10:55:00 AM
soupmail-- :( ??????
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Date: 7/17/2010 3:08:00 PM
Wow!!! Amazing poem! :] luv dark angel
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Date: 7/16/2010 6:26:00 PM
Very dark and thought provoking.
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Date: 7/14/2010 1:37:00 PM
I like the dark feeling I get when I read this one, What can I say I like morbid things and this poem of yours is one of them :) very good write though just the same! U rock!
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Date: 7/14/2010 12:49:00 PM
Well writen. i enjoy reading every one's work. It helps me improve. I never shared anything I've written, nor have I read anyone else's work. I guess this is probably the only way to improve... My biggest problem I see is that there are so many styles of poetry and I'm not familiar with any of them. Thanks for your interest. I guess I've got my work cut out. Matt T. Love
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Date: 7/13/2010 11:41:00 AM
realistic n blunt, enjoyed reading entirely....thought provoking...n thanks much for your encouraging remarkson smiley...GOd bless.
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Date: 7/12/2010 6:52:00 PM
wow MA,awesome ! J.C.
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Date: 7/12/2010 11:43:00 AM
LOVE IT
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Date: 7/12/2010 9:07:00 AM
hey thanks for ur comment... this poem is a real powerful one good writtin
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Date: 7/12/2010 5:29:00 AM
wowow poweful write xxx sarah x
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Date: 7/11/2010 8:27:00 AM
Wow....I almost missed catching this....after almost everyone on the Soup had read it!! It's an eye opener....and yes....we have all been there!!....not knowing what we had gotten ourselves into!! Clever poem! ~ Carrie!
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Date: 7/11/2010 5:57:00 AM
Surely life can't be that bad! It's all a matter of perspective, "And Satan looked around in Hell and said, 'How awful good Hell is!'" This life can be Heaven or Hell depending on what you make of it. I hope you find your heaven if you haven't already.
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Date: 7/10/2010 12:13:00 AM
o boy thats...well thats crazy o.0, i gotta admit i was confused but i understand the birth entry to hell, great poem FTW! lol
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Date: 7/9/2010 9:08:00 PM
P.D. a B. I like Limbo womb, that is a striking phrase. I hope this wasn't an actual delivery because if it was, it's Rosemary's baby part 2. Regards, Gerard and thank you!
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Date: 7/8/2010 7:43:00 PM
I hear what ya saying P.D...... very powerfully written!!!!!!
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Date: 7/8/2010 7:30:00 PM
uuuuuuuuuugh, not sure what to make of this but it's interesting!
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Date: 7/8/2010 3:46:00 PM
Hello my P.D. BFF .. well I am now joining the ranks and have officially changed my name on P.S. to the one I sign all the time.. am leaving the islands tomorrow for a 17 hour plane ride home with my LUV and am anxious to see my family and my pets..oh I miss my babies so much.. see u soon..my BFF .. your BFF with luv..always.. "Sweetheart"
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Date: 7/8/2010 7:23:00 AM
That brimstone. Giving birth is hell. I can remember my wife's screaming. This was 57 years ago. She never had another one. Maybe it was just as well. Love, daver
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Date: 7/8/2010 4:16:00 AM
a wrenchingly good poem. I especially like the last line. love, Susan
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Date: 7/7/2010 10:33:00 PM
Dramatic indeed and so very sad. Well written poem. Thanks for sharing and thank you for your kind comments on mine today. Caroline.
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