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Haikus - Three For November

just one crazy bush
spread out in that barren field
sprouts blood-red berries

one icy window
one index finger writing
she reads backwards    smiles

how simply charming
this snowflake hits my window
melts a wayward star

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/24/2010 12:27:00 AM

These are great for november. I just love that first one, daver, about the crazy bush. LUv, andrea

Date: 11/28/2008 2:58:00 PM

Thanks for allowing me to smile with this one. I enjoyed it. I especially like the last line. Good job! Karen

Milton Toran

Date: 11/22/2008 7:32:00 PM

Great haiku series. Perfect 5-7-5 syllable count. Thanks for the kind sentiments on my featured write. Milt

Nigel Fawcett

Date: 11/22/2008 3:27:00 AM

Great collection of Haikus, Daver. Best wishes, Nigel

I Have Forgiven You But It Will Never Be The Same

Date: 11/21/2008 5:41:00 AM

my birthday is sunday!!!! in november!!! lol

Ali Matheny

Date: 11/20/2008 1:15:00 PM

I love the fact that it's about November cause my birthday is in November.

James Foulk

Date: 11/19/2008 11:52:00 AM

how clever to put three Haiku together that way. all three were beautiful. thank you for reading my poem and for your comment. you must be about the age of my brother, he was born in 1929, he served in the Air Force during the Korea War. Denver has changed a lot since then. I moved here in 1977 and it has changed a lot since then. They built Mile High Stadium I think in 1947 or 48, since torn down.

Christopher Higgins

Date: 11/19/2008 4:13:00 AM

A wonderful haiku my friend. Snowflake becoming a star is a winner.

Sharon Winter

Date: 11/18/2008 3:01:00 PM

And my favorite, is the third! A wayward star - how completely enchanting! All three, quite seriously, are excellent! Love, Shar

Raul Moreno

Date: 11/18/2008 11:08:00 AM

Nice contribution to Haiku. Great imagery and well written...You told a good story with your haiku's...Raul

Carrie Richards

Date: 11/18/2008 6:27:00 AM

You painted a beautiful picture with Haiku poetry! Love it, love it! Clever and lovely! ~ I agree...they are all wonderful, that middle one is outstanding! ~ Carrie

Kristin Reynolds

Date: 11/18/2008 6:22:00 AM

Wow, Daver, these all go together so well, so vivd and bright! LOVE the middle one, especially - excellent my dear! Love Kristin

Barbara Gorelick

Date: 11/18/2008 6:10:00 AM

Nice job..all good but I love the middle one. I can see the finger writing on the window. BG