Haiku: Lessons Women Taught Me
(A Haiku Trilogy)
Stage 1
you don't share feelings
how can you say you love me
when I don't know you
Stage 2
you ask me nothing
only sharing your feelings
god you're self-absorbed
Stage 3
cosmic truth just rocks
forever, all is stardust
(but women's feelings)
Brian Johnston
July 30,2014
Poet's Notes:
New: Why Stage 1, Stage 2 and Stage 3? Well (this is funny) , it's kind of like
cancer, though, of course, cancer is not funny either to those going through it.
Also new: I like the inversion of the speakers complaint in the 2nd stanza as
well and the irony of the 3rd stanza too.
You should note that throughout the first two stanzas the speaker is negating
the other's feelings. Really it could be a man or a woman speaking in the first
two stanzas). The real question is, is the other really not sharing/listening or is
the speaker afraid to be loved (just making the other wrong)? The speaker
apparently teaches the other to share and then finds the other's sharing
annoying. Might the speaker not share with the other what the speaker wants
the other to ask the speaker about? Just a thought! : -) God avoiding
looking like a sexist is tough! Whew! Though of course, at heart I am still truly
sexist, and sorry ladies, the third stanza still stands (a stroke of genius) ! Ha!
This poem is like watching the sun go down off the coast of California. You and
God are having a nice glass of Merlot, no Piesporter Goldtropschen Spatlese,
like sipping the nectar of honey suckle blossems when you were a kid (but with
a kick). You realise that God is perfect and you aren't. And somehow that's OK,
because at least He loves you! (No woman is present!)
Copyright © Brian Johnston | Year Posted 2014
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