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Haiku - For Contest

peeping through grey clouds
her golden rays smiling down
brightening our world

Open Poetry Contest - Charlotte Puddifoot
07~11~15

Copyright © Jan Allison | Year Posted 2015

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Connie Marcum Wong

July 25, 2015 at 1:31 PM

Jan, I love seeing fingers of sunlight shine down through the clouds like the ones in your picture and in the imagery in your lovely poem. I am so pleased to be in the company of you and Paul on Charlotte's list. I couldn't be in better company! I love how you both write. Congrats!

July 25, 2015 at 1:36 PM

Thanks Connie - it is always an honour to place in Charlotte's contests I so respect her as a sponsor - wish I had had more time to work on this but the contest filled so quickly:-) hugs jan xx

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

July 20, 2015 at 8:19 AM

Positivity this the effect of your poem in me!!! Hope too! kudos!!!~Olive ELoisa =')

July 20, 2015 at 10:59 AM

Thanks Olive may the sun shine on you today my friend:-) hugs jan xx

July 20, 2015 at 5:48 AM

Jan, my son sent me a video of my 6 mo old granddaughter playing and laughing and smiling.....entitled "Brightens even the cloudiest day"....This lovely haiku reminded me of her smile and laugh...Well done...

July 20, 2015 at 7:36 AM

Oh John how lovely I am sure her smile would light up a room:-) hugs Jan xx

July 20, 2015 at 3:39 AM

'her golden rays smiling down'...WOW, what a line...Many congrats to my friend across the Pond - Tim

July 20, 2015 at 7:35 AM

Thanks Tim:-) It's dull and rainy today oh how I wish the sun would smile on me:-( Hugs jan xx

July 20, 2015 at 3:25 AM

Congratulations on yet another merited win, Jan! I still have to read the other entries. Hugs // paul

July 20, 2015 at 7:34 AM

Thanks Paul wish I'd had a little more time to spend on it but the contest filled so quickly:-) hugs Jan xx

July 19, 2015 at 8:43 PM

Cheery little Haiku Jan,congrats from a smiley me x

July 20, 2015 at 1:00 AM

Thanks Mr Viv:-) hugs Jan xx

July 19, 2015 at 6:12 PM

Jan,, congratulations in Charlotte Puddifootst... SKAT

July 20, 2015 at 1:00 AM

Thanks so much Skat:-) hugs Jan xx

Charlotte Jade Puddifoot

July 19, 2015 at 5:03 PM

who wouldn't like this one? it's such a feel-good little piece; I like the warming image :) had I seen a bit more juxtaposition/cut I would've placed it higher - congrats on your win in my contest!

July 19, 2015 at 5:05 PM

I'll remember for next time Charlotte:-) It is sooooooo good to see you back - I hope your health is improving - seeing you back has brightened my day so much:-) hugs jan xx

July 19, 2015 at 3:49 PM

Jan, you out did yourself of this poem it's beautiful. Congratulations on your win hugs Eve

July 19, 2015 at 3:51 PM

I do admire Charlotte as a sponsor was just pleased I could get this penned in time as the contest filled so quickly:-) hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

July 19, 2015 at 3:05 PM

wowowow, Congratulations, Jan!!! You gave her a gem!!

July 19, 2015 at 3:10 PM

Thanks Andrea I was so honoured to be on Charlotte's list:-) hugs Jan xx

July 18, 2015 at 1:59 PM

May she brighten our world for many millions of years, and may we respect her as she does. Love this gem Jan//hugs//James xx

July 18, 2015 at 2:11 PM

Thanks James I always smile when I see the sun peeping through:-) hugs jan xx

July 12, 2015 at 1:42 PM

Like the rays of the sun your words brighten my heart! May you continue to shine forth bringing a simple joy of love to others -- "in your light, we see light" 7

July 12, 2015 at 1:57 PM

Thank you so much David for the lovely words - lovely to see you back here - I have taken time out but am back to writing again to get me through tough days ahead:-) hugs Jan xx

July 12, 2015 at 11:08 AM

A beautiful poem with a beautiful picture presented in haiku. Good luck in the contest. 7 i feel. Loved always, my lovely friend,bl

July 12, 2015 at 11:10 AM

Thanks as ever BL:-) Hugs Jan xx

Carrie Richards

July 12, 2015 at 10:07 AM

This one brightens the poetry page !! Lovely.......good luck, Jan !!

July 12, 2015 at 10:14 AM

Thanks so much Carrie:-) hugs Jan xx

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

July 12, 2015 at 8:23 AM

Jan, a lovely inspiring image... =") Thanks for the drop by! Blessed Sunday!~Olive Eloisa

July 12, 2015 at 8:25 AM

Thanks Olive and I LOVE your new avatar:-) hugs Jan xx

July 12, 2015 at 7:28 AM

Wow. vivid imagery Jan! 7 of course. GL WITH THE CONTEST! Hugs!

July 12, 2015 at 8:03 AM

Thanks Kim:-) Hugs Jan xx

Ravi Sathasivam

July 12, 2015 at 1:50 AM

Excellent haiku. All the best for your contest. TFS

July 12, 2015 at 5:56 AM

Thanks for dropping by Ravi:-) hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

July 11, 2015 at 11:50 PM

a lovely poem with a lovely picture, my friend! Let me see if you have written anything else lately.

July 12, 2015 at 5:55 AM

Thanks as ever Andrea:-) hugs Jan xx

July 11, 2015 at 8:45 PM

'Good luck in the contest. Thank you for your kind comments. Love, Joyce

July 12, 2015 at 5:54 AM

Thanks so much Joyce:-) Hugs Jan xx

July 11, 2015 at 8:19 PM

So pretty!

July 12, 2015 at 5:54 AM

Thanks Lee:-) Hugs Jan xx

July 11, 2015 at 5:39 PM

yes, the splendor of light outshines the dark, jan... very fine 'ku!... huggs

July 11, 2015 at 5:41 PM

Thanks Nette:-) hugs Jan xx

July 11, 2015 at 5:16 PM

This is lovely, Jan. Beyond the dark clouds there is hope waiting to come through. gl in contest. (I'm so busy; don't even know what contests there are on offer!) hugs // paul

July 11, 2015 at 5:18 PM

Charlotte only posted this contest today and it is nearly full:-) I had already written my first haibun for Scott's contest but this poem followed afterwards so I thought I better post it before the contest closes:-) Hugs Jan xx

July 11, 2015 at 4:54 PM

I was thinking this when I read your cemetery poem earlier. The light shining down from loved ones.

July 11, 2015 at 5:01 PM

Thanks Tim I guess could be a connection as I wrote them one after the other - I wasn't going to post this until tomorrow but the contest will be full by then:-) hugs jan xx

Connie Marcum Wong

July 11, 2015 at 4:41 PM

This is lovely Jan. When I see the sunrays coming down like this I can't help feel the touch of God. 7

July 11, 2015 at 4:43 PM

I love to see the sun peeping through the grey clouds and I agree the sunlight does create a spiritual effect:-) Hugs Jan xx

July 11, 2015 at 4:05 PM

pretty :)

July 11, 2015 at 4:09 PM

Thanks Cas:-) hope you have got your poem in the prom one you posted was awesome:-) hugs Jan xx

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