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skimming stones on lake they dance across the water splish splash, now silence 05~03~17 Open Poetry Contest Sponsored by Charlotte Jade Puddifoot

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Valerie Staton

Date: 4/7/2017 6:32:00 PM

Very nice! I also have a splish, splash Haiku! Enjoyed reading. loved the accompanying pic!

Jan Allison
Date: 8/27/2017 7:53:00 AM

Thanks Valerie I'm sorry I have only just found your comment:-( hugs jan xx

Jenny Brewer

Date: 3/14/2017 7:41:00 PM

Hello my dearest friend.... Fabulous Haiku hun,You know I do love a beautiful Haiku and this is one,Lovely. I hope you are well,xxx Mahoosive Hugs Jenny xxx

Jan Allison
Date: 3/26/2017 7:05:00 PM

Jennnyyyyyyyyyyyyyy so lovely to see your smiling face:-) :-) Without your encouragement I wouldn't be the writer I am now:-) :-) hugs jan xx

John Michaels

Date: 3/13/2017 5:25:00 PM

Lovely little write, with a splash of alliteration and onomatopoeia for good measure!

Jan Allison
Date: 3/26/2017 7:04:00 PM

I tried to use several poetic devices John:-) hugs Jan xx

Lynn Marie

Date: 3/11/2017 10:26:00 PM

Great writing with such lovely imagery.:-) It's the circles in the water then silence, that is so mesmerizing. What a fantastic theme Jan. blessings, :-) lynn

Jan Allison
Date: 3/26/2017 7:04:00 PM

Thanks Lynn:-) hugs Jan xx

Pashang Salehi

Date: 3/8/2017 4:53:00 PM

Very nice Jan... best of luck...

Jan Allison
Date: 3/8/2017 5:12:00 PM

Thanks Pashang:-) hugs Jan xx

Lenny Gazbowski

Date: 3/7/2017 10:44:00 AM

A top write Jan.

Jan Allison
Date: 3/7/2017 4:59:00 PM

Thanks Lenny:-)

John Lawless

Date: 3/6/2017 6:30:00 PM

AH, Jan, an ode to the flat round river rock.....

Jan Allison
Date: 3/7/2017 4:59:00 PM

Thanks John:-) hugs jan xx

Charlie Smith

Date: 3/6/2017 3:09:00 PM

I've never out grown the desire to skip a stone across the water, such vivid imagery Jan...

Jan Allison
Date: 3/6/2017 3:30:00 PM

Thanks Charlie I hope Charlotte likes it:-) hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus

Date: 3/6/2017 11:37:00 AM

I love the visual aspect and sound leading to silence, Jan. gl in the contest. Hugs // paul

Jan Allison
Date: 3/6/2017 1:15:00 PM

Thanks Paul:-) hugs Jan xx

Alexis Y.

Date: 3/6/2017 10:01:00 AM

Hi Jan, I loved the imagery in this well written Haiku. I wish you the best of luck in the contest:) Alexis

Jan Allison
Date: 3/6/2017 1:16:00 PM

Thanks Alexis:-) hugs Jan xx

Tim Smith

Date: 3/6/2017 9:51:00 AM

Great imagery in this ku Jan

Jan Allison
Date: 3/6/2017 1:16:00 PM

Thanks Tim:-) hugs Jan xx

Roy Pett

Date: 3/6/2017 4:55:00 AM

Lovely Haiku Jan, good luck in contest, Roy. :)

Jan Allison
Date: 3/6/2017 1:16:00 PM

Thanks Roy:-) hugs Jan xx

Ravi Sathasivam

Date: 3/6/2017 3:16:00 AM

Excellent haiku. Enjoyed reading it. Thanks for sharing it.

Jan Allison
Date: 3/6/2017 1:17:00 PM

Thanks Ravi:-) hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/5/2017 10:12:00 PM

I really like this, Jan. GReat job sticking with traditional 5/7/5! Wish I could see more. I got waylaid on comments. Joe almost home and I am SO behind here. Argggh

Jan Allison
Date: 3/6/2017 1:06:00 AM

I don't know how you manage to fit everything in Andrea I hope Charlotte likes it:-) hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper

Date: 3/5/2017 6:39:00 PM

love this ~* Hugs

Jan Allison
Date: 3/5/2017 6:41:00 PM

Thanks Eve I hope Charlotte likes it too:-) hugs Jan xx

Carol B.

Date: 3/5/2017 6:36:00 PM

Love the soothing feeling of this Haiku. Brings back fond childhood memories :)

Jan Allison
Date: 3/5/2017 6:40:00 PM

Thanks Carol:-) hugs Jan xx

Ilene Bauer

Date: 3/5/2017 6:06:00 PM

well done, jan! it's been a long time since i've skimmed stones, but you've captured that magic here perfectly...

Jan Allison
Date: 3/5/2017 6:10:00 PM

I've not done it for years either - must go down to the beach next week and see if I can still do it:-) hugs Jan xx

Heidi Sands

Date: 3/5/2017 2:42:00 PM

I love this Haiku! Very nice :)

Jan Allison
Date: 3/5/2017 2:43:00 PM

I hope Charlotte likes it Heidi - it is an honour if you do manage to place in one of her contests:-) hugs Jan xx