Haiku 8

ancient lighthouse stands
tiny sailboat drifts alone
warm wind finds a song

© donna jones

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Timothy Hicks

Date: 10/14/2014 4:13:00 PM

Picturesque! New adventures up ahead and smooth sailing. Makes me miss the Oregon coastline :)

Cona Adams

Date: 4/17/2014 1:22:00 PM

Nice Haiku poem, Donna.Clear, concrete images. Well done.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/23/2014 11:17:00 AM

In response to what you told me, Your lovely sister sounds like a saint. If I lived alone and had money, I too would adopt various animals and let them stay in my home. But it is not something I can do in my circumstances. And probably I would be a "cat lady!"

Leon Enriquez

Date: 3/12/2014 12:34:00 AM

Dear Donna: A lovely haiku fragment. I can see the lighthouse. I feel the song of the stray wind. I hear the somnolent sing-song of the midday breeze. You have capture an Aha! moment here. Well done. Leon

Donna Jones
Date: 3/12/2014 10:21:00 PM

Thank you so much Leon...I take it you also love sailing and have felt the joy of the moment..thanks for stopping by...appreciate it..:-) :-)

Monterey Sirak

Date: 3/11/2014 7:01:00 AM

Beautiful! I can just picture it in my mind.

Donna Jones
Date: 3/12/2014 10:19:00 PM

Thank you Monterey...so Much..:-)

Painted Hunter

Date: 3/10/2014 11:37:00 AM

Beautiful haiku you've got here, sis. Have y'all thawed out yet? We have, but it was ugly for a few days ...a lot of power out.

Donna Jones
Date: 3/10/2014 10:36:00 PM

Thanks lil bro...well..finally!!! Of course ice then sleet then snow...melt refreeze..for three days..but 76 today..:-) :-) hope your power is back on...but I know that generator is keeping your freezer going....:-) Where all the valuables are kept..:-) :-) ..me too..be safe

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 3/8/2014 5:46:00 AM

Enormously beautiful! HAPPY WOMAN'S DAY dear Donna!

Donna Jones
Date: 3/10/2014 10:38:00 PM

Thanks Demetrios....woman's day? Wow..again thanks..I never knew..:-) :-)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/7/2014 11:20:00 PM

this is so sweet. That last line I just adore it.

Donna Jones
Date: 3/10/2014 10:38:00 PM

Ah thanks Andrea..appreciate it...

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 3/5/2014 8:49:00 AM

I love this beautiful Haiku..especially the last line..dear lady..Charma

Donna Jones
Date: 3/10/2014 10:39:00 PM

Thank you beautiful Charmaine..:-)

Justin Bordner

Date: 3/4/2014 1:28:00 PM

Finds a song on the breath of hope and perseverence Donna. Thank you for giving me something inspirational today. J.A.B.

Donna Jones
Date: 3/10/2014 10:40:00 PM

What a nice comment..thank you...glad you enjoyed..

Kim Van Breda

Date: 3/4/2014 12:39:00 PM

So simply and eloquently you have painted this picture. Enjoyed this. Thank you xx~Xx

Donna Jones
Date: 3/10/2014 10:41:00 PM

Thank you much Kim

Nette Onclaud

Date: 3/4/2014 9:09:00 AM

astounding end that simply mystifies, donna.. greeat 'ku.... nice to read you again!.. huggs

Donna Jones
Date: 3/10/2014 10:44:00 PM

Ahh nett...thanks.:-) :-) :-)

Tim Ryerson

Date: 3/4/2014 4:55:00 AM

I agree with Vera's comment...As soon as I read this gem I saw a painting. Thanks for starting my day out right with this soothing observation my friend! - Tim

Donna Jones
Date: 3/10/2014 10:45:00 PM

Ahh thanks Tim.....sailing is wonderful

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 3/3/2014 7:17:00 PM

Hi Donna, I received Anne Lise's response. Have a nice evening.

Vera Duggan

Date: 3/3/2014 6:43:00 PM

No Donna we have never sailed, been in boats but that is about it, lovely haiku, I could paint a picture from those words, beautiful, take care................Vera......

Donna Jones
Date: 3/3/2014 10:44:00 PM

Thank you Vera...I hope you get to go sailing sometime..it is so quiet..with no motor...just a different experience...take care..

Joseph Sergi

Date: 3/3/2014 5:09:00 PM

Donna reminds me of the summer. Thanks for this one great haiku

Donna Jones
Date: 3/3/2014 10:32:00 PM

Thank you Joseph...appreciate that..:-) :-)

Eileen Manassian

Date: 3/3/2014 1:59:00 PM

Very lovely and calming....MD...This is a FINE haiku...Boy...You sure got this form PAT. Love ya! BTW...you might want to mosey on down my way. I have dedicated a poem to you because I LOVE YA!

Donna Jones
Date: 3/3/2014 10:32:00 PM

Oh thanks sweetie...these short ones are easy for me to get done when short of time..:-) :-) :-) as I usually am..but I went to see my poem and you're a living doll...thank you sooooo much...

Mustapha Mohammed

Date: 3/3/2014 11:41:00 AM

Cute haiku Donna. Missed reading your poetry : )

Donna Jones
Date: 3/3/2014 10:24:00 PM

Thanks Mustapha..good to see ya....:-) :-)

Paul Callus

Date: 3/3/2014 10:58:00 AM

How good...I'm lost for words

Donna Jones
Date: 3/3/2014 7:23:00 PM

Thank you very much Paul..

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 3/3/2014 8:33:00 AM

This is so pretty, you created a lovely mood with so few words. Distilled majesty!

Donna Jones
Date: 3/3/2014 10:02:00 PM

Go to my outboxes and hit comment replies tab..I think that is what its called...let me know if you need more help..:-) :-) :-)

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 3/3/2014 7:28:00 PM

Yep all is well with me, thanks for asking. How do you erase replies? I didn't know we could do that,

Donna Jones
Date: 3/3/2014 7:19:00 PM

Sorry...it jumped...when someone commented...I hate that....thank you for your kind comment ..hope you are well...

Sara Kendrick

Date: 3/3/2014 6:18:00 AM

Very descriptive and expressive work..I can see the scene..Thanks for the visits to my page..Sara

Donna Jones
Date: 3/3/2014 7:21:00 PM

Thank you Sara..very much..

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 3/3/2014 4:44:00 AM

- "warm wind finds a song" - lovely line in a beautiful haiku Donna! - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

Donna Jones
Date: 3/3/2014 7:20:00 PM

Warm thanks Anne Lise....nice to see you

Kayod5 Kayode

Date: 3/2/2014 9:54:00 PM

Great Donna,and when shall we hear the song? In whatever form,you are ever cute. Have a great week Donna Jones.

Donna Jones
Date: 3/3/2014 6:16:00 PM

Hey kayode...thanks so much for the visit..:-) :-) the song comes to me when the wind catches the sail and pops and rustles them...wakes you up from daydreaming....:-) :-)

Russell Sivey

Date: 3/2/2014 9:26:00 PM

This is a glorious write, I really enjoyed reading this delightful poem this evening! I love all three elements that you have presented within this natural piece...Lighthouse, Sailboat, and the Wind [with the Song], are all phenomenal, Great Work!!

Donna Jones
Date: 3/3/2014 6:13:00 PM

Thank you Russell...every time I sailed..years ago..when all was quiet and then the wind would pop and rustle the sails...catch the wind...it was like that to me...appreciate your visit..

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